A Leaf on the Wind
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Fear"Autobiography of abuse
33 total reviews
Comment from pamelaperron
wow - where do I begin. although a disturbing story it is smooth enough to keep you reading. the aftershock of her heightened sense of alarm was spot on as was her prayer to not wake up the following day. only because we need to critique... she was awfully bold when fighting as I believe children of abuse do not have that gumption. they are more self doubters with a safety net(parents). a child may say 'they'll tell they'll tell' but not necessarily their mother as she has not protected her thus far...great story even though the truth be told...pamela
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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wow - where do I begin. although a disturbing story it is smooth enough to keep you reading. the aftershock of her heightened sense of alarm was spot on as was her prayer to not wake up the following day. only because we need to critique... she was awfully bold when fighting as I believe children of abuse do not have that gumption. they are more self doubters with a safety net(parents). a child may say 'they'll tell they'll tell' but not necessarily their mother as she has not protected her thus far...great story even though the truth be told...pamela
Comment Written 09-May-2016
reply by the author on 09-May-2016
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Thanks for your positive comments and lovely 6 stars. I sincerely appreciate them.
Comment from Margaret Ford
Well, 'Valerie', you've done an incredible job in describing this little girls emotions and injuries during her ordeal(s). As someone who has heard a story much like this from a child's own mouth, I salute you. IMHO, this is really first-rate work.
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Well, 'Valerie', you've done an incredible job in describing this little girls emotions and injuries during her ordeal(s). As someone who has heard a story much like this from a child's own mouth, I salute you. IMHO, this is really first-rate work.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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Thank you so very much.
Comment from wilkswrites
Valerie, although your story was long, and I am tired, I regretted its ending. It was a FANTASTIC read and I didn't want to stop reading. I'm so sorry that happened to you. Someone once told me that a good story evokes emotions. I wish you could have seen my face as I read your story. Your daddy is like the many ass-wipes my students have told me about. Again, GREAT read, well-written, no suggested changes. I am just soon sorry that happened to you.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016
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Valerie, although your story was long, and I am tired, I regretted its ending. It was a FANTASTIC read and I didn't want to stop reading. I'm so sorry that happened to you. Someone once told me that a good story evokes emotions. I wish you could have seen my face as I read your story. Your daddy is like the many ass-wipes my students have told me about. Again, GREAT read, well-written, no suggested changes. I am just soon sorry that happened to you.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2016
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Thank you so very much. Yes, it is a difficult book to read but at least I had the opportunity to finally have a good relationship with my mother. I have adjusted to not having a relationship with my family but haven't stop hoping that some day my daughters will want to talk to me again. I sincerely appreciate the lovely 6 stars.
Comment from MaBaker
That is so true as countless little girls could tell you. Most me are decent and kind to their children while others... The horrible way these cruel actions are twisted so heavily with enough guilt to keep their victims compliant is disgusting. Regards MaBaker
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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That is so true as countless little girls could tell you. Most me are decent and kind to their children while others... The horrible way these cruel actions are twisted so heavily with enough guilt to keep their victims compliant is disgusting. Regards MaBaker
Comment Written 18-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2016
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You are so right, fear is such a cruel tool for the wicked to use on the innocent.
Comment from Jade Lawson
Indeed, highlighting that her sister would perform tasks better and was clever than Valerie wouldn't encourage a child, probably would make her feel with more lack of confidence.
The description of the rape is so heart breaking and the reader feels the pain of Valerie very well. I just wonder how her other didn't suspect that someone had harmed Valerie.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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Indeed, highlighting that her sister would perform tasks better and was clever than Valerie wouldn't encourage a child, probably would make her feel with more lack of confidence.
The description of the rape is so heart breaking and the reader feels the pain of Valerie very well. I just wonder how her other didn't suspect that someone had harmed Valerie.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2013
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I believe my mother knew what happened but handle it the same way she handled everything else, denial. Thanks so much for the awesome stars.
Comment from MsRefusenik
I just finished reading about the rape. Hell is too good for that monster. He can't be human to do what he did to his own flesh and blood. How my heart goes out to that precious, innocent, traumaticized little soul of a girl child who brought absolutely none of this horribleness onto herself. It seems almost unreal in its terribleness, but I know it is all too real. How can a parent fuck up a child for life like that and still exist in normal society like a regular man and not the craven beast he really is? I am as shocked and horrified as I knew I would be, but what I didn't count on is the love I feel for that helpless suffering child which makes me want to read more. Love, Maryellen
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2009
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I just finished reading about the rape. Hell is too good for that monster. He can't be human to do what he did to his own flesh and blood. How my heart goes out to that precious, innocent, traumaticized little soul of a girl child who brought absolutely none of this horribleness onto herself. It seems almost unreal in its terribleness, but I know it is all too real. How can a parent fuck up a child for life like that and still exist in normal society like a regular man and not the craven beast he really is? I am as shocked and horrified as I knew I would be, but what I didn't count on is the love I feel for that helpless suffering child which makes me want to read more. Love, Maryellen
Comment Written 20-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2009
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That was my hope. I wanted to reader to understand the confusion, frustation, fear that a child experinces from something like this and having no one to talk to, explain or comfort them. Chilren use what they have to deal with something like this, sadly what they have is the emotional and intellectually capability of a child and most of the answers they come up with are wrong and that only adds to the fear, confusion and frustration. It is just one big viscius circle.
Comment from medicnate
Very sad. The vivid imagery definitely grasps the reader with both hands by the lapels of the jacket and drags him deep into the girls world. I am so sorry.
~medicnate~
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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Very sad. The vivid imagery definitely grasps the reader with both hands by the lapels of the jacket and drags him deep into the girls world. I am so sorry.
~medicnate~
Comment Written 04-Apr-2009
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2009
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I know. Hard chapter to write and hard chapter to read. This is the only one that I use graphic descriptions. I didn't feel it was necessary to repeat what the reader already knew.
Comment from babylonia
how could she not feel anything but fear and rage. i am angry that the mom didn't take her to the doctor. i don't care how much she protested. i know it's just a story but it is very riveting as it is happening to some little girl somewhere all over the world.
imagery is excellent.
good luck~
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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how could she not feel anything but fear and rage. i am angry that the mom didn't take her to the doctor. i don't care how much she protested. i know it's just a story but it is very riveting as it is happening to some little girl somewhere all over the world.
imagery is excellent.
good luck~
love,
barbara
Comment Written 16-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your kind review. This is actually an autobiography and really happened, and yes it is still happening all over the world. Which is why I felt it was important to write about.
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i thought so but i didn't want to assume. this had to be pretty terrifying for you. i hope you have received help since then.
thank you for sharing your story.
love,
barbara
Comment from NightWriter
"Fear" is a one story I have never read, and hope never to read again. Not that the writing is bad. The writing is well done and explosive. It's the details of the horrible story that upset me. I'm sorry that anyone has to go through something like this. School was bad enough, but the homelife was really bad.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
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"Fear" is a one story I have never read, and hope never to read again. Not that the writing is bad. The writing is well done and explosive. It's the details of the horrible story that upset me. I'm sorry that anyone has to go through something like this. School was bad enough, but the homelife was really bad.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2009
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Thank you. I agree. It was a difficult, but necessary chapter to write.
Comment from Lois Delaney
Sorry to say, but what a mean bastard. I hate him and every man like him. How can a woman not? I don't know how you can even call him daddy. You poor dear.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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Sorry to say, but what a mean bastard. I hate him and every man like him. How can a woman not? I don't know how you can even call him daddy. You poor dear.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2009
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2009
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Thank you for your genorous, and accurate, adjectives describing my father. Difficult story to write but felt it was important. Thank you for your high rating.
