When We Were Once Five
Contest Entry: Children's Poem37 total reviews
Comment from K-Patrick
This poem is more than wonderful. It is definitely well written and flows smoothly.
With all that said, if a 11 year old read this I think they would cry. "Why are they gone?" As general poetry, a beautiful piece. As a children's poem (as indicated in the contest), I feel it is too much. As poem about the poetry that made us who we are - it is awesome.
Beauty is no quality in things themselves: it exists merely in the mind which contemplates them. -- David Hume (1757)
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2009
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This poem is more than wonderful. It is definitely well written and flows smoothly.
With all that said, if a 11 year old read this I think they would cry. "Why are they gone?" As general poetry, a beautiful piece. As a children's poem (as indicated in the contest), I feel it is too much. As poem about the poetry that made us who we are - it is awesome.
Beauty is no quality in things themselves: it exists merely in the mind which contemplates them. -- David Hume (1757)
Comment Written 21-Feb-2009
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2009
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Hello K-Patrick!
Oh I know!!!! I wrote it after discussing with one of my classes if their parents had read to them as children and how so many young kids today do not even have knowledge of Mother Goose! I really dated myself!!! :>)D Thank you for your kind review! Stop by again!
diane
Comment from Readywriter52
Fairy tales have influenced our lives and our cultures. It has allowed children to use their imaginations. Our world would be duller without fairy tales.
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Fairy tales have influenced our lives and our cultures. It has allowed children to use their imaginations. Our world would be duller without fairy tales.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2009
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hello Mrs. KT,
I certainly enjoyed your well written poem. What a clever idea to work your poem around nursery rhymes and children's poetry... all of which children would be familiar with. Your beautiful 'supposing' would definitely give wee minds a workout. I know it did mine. Fun and fantastic!
All the best,
Whizpurr ^-^
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Hello Mrs. KT,
I certainly enjoyed your well written poem. What a clever idea to work your poem around nursery rhymes and children's poetry... all of which children would be familiar with. Your beautiful 'supposing' would definitely give wee minds a workout. I know it did mine. Fun and fantastic!
All the best,
Whizpurr ^-^
Comment Written 20-Feb-2009
Comment from Twomoon
Mrs, KT..this was just lovely and creative touch here! The thoughts and beauty of this piece is grand! I enjoyed reading this one and your fun play with this contest! Suppose is right! have a beautiful day, much love twomoon
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Mrs, KT..this was just lovely and creative touch here! The thoughts and beauty of this piece is grand! I enjoyed reading this one and your fun play with this contest! Suppose is right! have a beautiful day, much love twomoon
Comment Written 20-Feb-2009
Comment from Amfunny
This is a great poem. I truly enjoyed it. I like how you captured the fairy tales into the poem. Great job and nice choice of artwork.
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This is a great poem. I truly enjoyed it. I like how you captured the fairy tales into the poem. Great job and nice choice of artwork.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
Comment from Terror2s
This was lovely, and as a fellow teacher, I enjoyed all your specific words about our childhood nursery rhymes. Although I suppose we would have had others instead. Terror
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This was lovely, and as a fellow teacher, I enjoyed all your specific words about our childhood nursery rhymes. Although I suppose we would have had others instead. Terror
Comment Written 18-Feb-2009
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I never knew nursery rhymes til I was 17 and working at a daycare. I learned them with the three year olds when I was in their room. I went never went to a daycare or anything so my babysitter watched her soaps and I colored. THis is a great write from you.
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I never knew nursery rhymes til I was 17 and working at a daycare. I learned them with the three year olds when I was in their room. I went never went to a daycare or anything so my babysitter watched her soaps and I colored. THis is a great write from you.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2009
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good contest entry you have written. I love the poem. You used very good wording and I loved the art work you chose. Good luck. Hugs, Teri
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This is a very good contest entry you have written. I love the poem. You used very good wording and I loved the art work you chose. Good luck. Hugs, Teri
Comment Written 06-Feb-2009
Comment from MsRefusenik
This is a delightful poem fit for the parent reading it as well as the child being read to. The voice inflections for enthusiastic reading are built into the verse. A real pleasure to read.
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This is a delightful poem fit for the parent reading it as well as the child being read to. The voice inflections for enthusiastic reading are built into the verse. A real pleasure to read.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
Comment from LexieMannix
What an inventive poem, based on how the world of our imagination shapes us all. A wonderful entry in the com. Good luck, I hope it wins.
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What an inventive poem, based on how the world of our imagination shapes us all. A wonderful entry in the com. Good luck, I hope it wins.
Comment Written 05-Feb-2009
