If The Jester Cried At Night
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Scales"A collection of favourite poems by mrgrunty.
64 total reviews
Comment from Erhie
Hi mrgrunty,
If you read this, take it from me that you're a good poet. And, I don't want my views changed about how esteem I regard this work of yours which was why, with a honest mind I scored you five stars.
However, what I regard as a minus appears as a view that your art work should have garnered more credence, if it had been allowed some extention, so as to efford the reader longer presence.
The last line is, to me the bomb every writer needs, in order to end his work explosively. You earned my stars solely because you're simply and strainght to the point. I love your practical calculative thinking.
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Hi mrgrunty,
If you read this, take it from me that you're a good poet. And, I don't want my views changed about how esteem I regard this work of yours which was why, with a honest mind I scored you five stars.
However, what I regard as a minus appears as a view that your art work should have garnered more credence, if it had been allowed some extention, so as to efford the reader longer presence.
The last line is, to me the bomb every writer needs, in order to end his work explosively. You earned my stars solely because you're simply and strainght to the point. I love your practical calculative thinking.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2005
Comment from Tally
That is happy and sad in the same breath...you call it opposites and I call them coins...always two sides to a coin. So many truths held so tightly in this poem. The saddest truth is when you have some really silly thought to share that doesn't matter two bits to the rest of the world and the one you thought so dear and close to heart is no longer there to share it with. Always a hard truth.
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That is happy and sad in the same breath...you call it opposites and I call them coins...always two sides to a coin. So many truths held so tightly in this poem. The saddest truth is when you have some really silly thought to share that doesn't matter two bits to the rest of the world and the one you thought so dear and close to heart is no longer there to share it with. Always a hard truth.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2004
Comment from hootenany
intreaguing idea.... i've always been fascinated with opposits, and what they can tell us about the world. short and sweet- i read it once, and it was just begging to be read aloud, so i did... the word that comes to mind is refreshing, and it made me think... which i enjoy. my only advice is for the second lines of the second and third stanzas: you end both of the lines with "waiting." i don't know if you did that on purpose, but it sounds kind of repetitive, or redundant... one of the best things about the poem is how you pick simple words, and use them in such a way as to reveal complex ideas; using the same word twice kinda doesn't seem like it fits. anyways, your poem, your call... i don't believe anyone can really tell you how to make your poem better... we can suggest, but in the end, it's up to you... that 's the beauty of poetry, huh? it sounds like you had fun with this poem... i wish you many inspirations for future writing!
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intreaguing idea.... i've always been fascinated with opposits, and what they can tell us about the world. short and sweet- i read it once, and it was just begging to be read aloud, so i did... the word that comes to mind is refreshing, and it made me think... which i enjoy. my only advice is for the second lines of the second and third stanzas: you end both of the lines with "waiting." i don't know if you did that on purpose, but it sounds kind of repetitive, or redundant... one of the best things about the poem is how you pick simple words, and use them in such a way as to reveal complex ideas; using the same word twice kinda doesn't seem like it fits. anyways, your poem, your call... i don't believe anyone can really tell you how to make your poem better... we can suggest, but in the end, it's up to you... that 's the beauty of poetry, huh? it sounds like you had fun with this poem... i wish you many inspirations for future writing!
Comment Written 18-Jun-2004
Comment from jammin john
Where did you pull this out of? I freakin loved it. The offbeat of each stanza was kick ass. What's really weird is that I could read this and recognize it as yours...without your name on it. Probably the odor of mescal wafting through. Whats even weirder is type freakin and to a spell check. I personally am thoroughly disgusted, and I'm not even Jewish.
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Where did you pull this out of? I freakin loved it. The offbeat of each stanza was kick ass. What's really weird is that I could read this and recognize it as yours...without your name on it. Probably the odor of mescal wafting through. Whats even weirder is type freakin and to a spell check. I personally am thoroughly disgusted, and I'm not even Jewish.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2004
Comment from New Day Rising
This was a very unusual poem, but one of the most thought provoking of any I've read before. So, few words but so much thought needed. A truly consuming poem. Almost a challenge to read. But, the little messages and words of wisdom force the reader to read on. Great poem. I will vote it poem of the month.
Maxx
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This was a very unusual poem, but one of the most thought provoking of any I've read before. So, few words but so much thought needed. A truly consuming poem. Almost a challenge to read. But, the little messages and words of wisdom force the reader to read on. Great poem. I will vote it poem of the month.
Maxx
Comment Written 17-Jun-2004
Comment from Victoreahh
Oh Wow! This poem of few lines packs much into a small space. These words hold so much truth and I am so glad I read this. This one is a "keeper" for the bookcase. Well done!
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Oh Wow! This poem of few lines packs much into a small space. These words hold so much truth and I am so glad I read this. This one is a "keeper" for the bookcase. Well done!
Comment Written 16-Jun-2004
Comment from Rx kingpen
I never actually reviewed this one bro. Sorry i've missed out on much of your work. I know, what a selfish motherf97-0..no excuses but i have my reasons...the bmd is still under construction though. How are you doing these days bro?
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I never actually reviewed this one bro. Sorry i've missed out on much of your work. I know, what a selfish motherf97-0..no excuses but i have my reasons...the bmd is still under construction though. How are you doing these days bro?
Comment Written 16-Jun-2004
Comment from dotdb
I really love this. Revelations abound in "Scale." Especially
love the last stanza. I Like the way the poet relates human experience.
Poem has great flow and great structure. CHEERS.
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I really love this. Revelations abound in "Scale." Especially
love the last stanza. I Like the way the poet relates human experience.
Poem has great flow and great structure. CHEERS.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2004
Comment from RUBY REDWINE
Hi sweetie, I leave for just a little while and what happens? One of my favorite PERSONALITIES on this web site turns into a KICK ASS poet. Could not believe what I was reading, an emerging writer and I knew you way back when, BABY. GOOD LUCK MY FRIEND, WILL CHECK BACK OFTEN.
RUBY ( in case you forgot ) REDWINE
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Hi sweetie, I leave for just a little while and what happens? One of my favorite PERSONALITIES on this web site turns into a KICK ASS poet. Could not believe what I was reading, an emerging writer and I knew you way back when, BABY. GOOD LUCK MY FRIEND, WILL CHECK BACK OFTEN.
RUBY ( in case you forgot ) REDWINE
Comment Written 16-Jun-2004
Comment from MelSargent
I really enjoyed this and I voted for you too:) This poem displayed emotional strength and your images tied with your theme very well. I liked,
In every tear,
the sound of laughter drowns...
Best of luck with the competition.
Cheers
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I really enjoyed this and I voted for you too:) This poem displayed emotional strength and your images tied with your theme very well. I liked,
In every tear,
the sound of laughter drowns...
Best of luck with the competition.
Cheers
Comment Written 15-Jun-2004
