The Online Voyeur
Naughty Bits II Contest15 total reviews
Comment from Adri7enne
The real live women are crying all over the place about the guys spending all their time, and energy on the damned computer. Guess it's true. Good rhyming, good rhythm. Good subject, well done. Not my thing, but hey, you described it well.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
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The real live women are crying all over the place about the guys spending all their time, and energy on the damned computer. Guess it's true. Good rhyming, good rhythm. Good subject, well done. Not my thing, but hey, you described it well.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2009
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Thank you for your comments. They are appreciated.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from Brandenpaul
Can't say I'm surprised-there was a warning. I have to give you credit, for stepping out there. Content may have been rather risque, but otherwise well written. Definately worth reading.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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Can't say I'm surprised-there was a warning. I have to give you credit, for stepping out there. Content may have been rather risque, but otherwise well written. Definately worth reading.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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Thank you for your comments!
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from joan marie
Well quite the risque write. But I am a liberal. Internet porn keeps a lots of guys at home and not getting busted. So it's cool. Good writing. joan marie
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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Well quite the risque write. But I am a liberal. Internet porn keeps a lots of guys at home and not getting busted. So it's cool. Good writing. joan marie
Comment Written 26-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2009
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Thank you Joan.
Sincerely,
Curt
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You're Welcome, jm
Comment from MJMuraco
Wow! Your imagery is blunt and shocking but I knew it would be when I read the warning. As far as poetry goes, you did a great job of rhythm and rhyming. Good work
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Wow! Your imagery is blunt and shocking but I knew it would be when I read the warning. As far as poetry goes, you did a great job of rhythm and rhyming. Good work
Comment Written 26-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Thanks MJ!
I apreciate your thoughts on this piece.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from malachi1206
Well certainly raw and graphic as you say content is self-explanatory form and rhyme were well done I don't think there is anything to change malachi1206
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Well certainly raw and graphic as you say content is self-explanatory form and rhyme were well done I don't think there is anything to change malachi1206
Comment Written 26-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Thanks friend.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from minopavlic
Beautifully crafted poem where the author takes us to ponder our own feelings of self worth, within those haunting demons in us that we hide from.
The burden of guilt rests on his shoulders. We are all creatures of a lustful nature to one extent or another. "most of us can overcome anything short of TEMPTATION itself".
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Beautifully crafted poem where the author takes us to ponder our own feelings of self worth, within those haunting demons in us that we hide from.
The burden of guilt rests on his shoulders. We are all creatures of a lustful nature to one extent or another. "most of us can overcome anything short of TEMPTATION itself".
Comment Written 26-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Thank you for your insightful comments!
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from Joan E.
Sorry, Curt, I think this one is too extreme, unless I read it as a comment on a society that drives individuals to sexual addiction. Unfortunately, I suspect that most of those who read it would be more focused on the salaciousness. Although I personally found the language unacceptable, objectively I can see that your work is well written. So, on balance, I have to down rate it, because it's purpose is unclear to me and the contest's title seems to request something more lighthearted.
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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Sorry, Curt, I think this one is too extreme, unless I read it as a comment on a society that drives individuals to sexual addiction. Unfortunately, I suspect that most of those who read it would be more focused on the salaciousness. Although I personally found the language unacceptable, objectively I can see that your work is well written. So, on balance, I have to down rate it, because it's purpose is unclear to me and the contest's title seems to request something more lighthearted.
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Comment Written 26-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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We all have our own demons to wrestle with Joan. Some battle drugs, some gambling, while others have an addiction to sex. This is just one small facet of society, but I can promise you it's real. There is a voyeur to some extent in all of us. Why do you think traffic gets so congested around an accident? Voyeurs, wanting a peek.
Thanks for your comments,
Curt
Comment from adewpearl
No, Curt, please explain! LOL Doesn't spraying things onto one's keyboard and computer screen mess with the electronics??
I ain't touching the rest of the content - good rhyming couplets. That's enough. :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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No, Curt, please explain! LOL Doesn't spraying things onto one's keyboard and computer screen mess with the electronics??
I ain't touching the rest of the content - good rhyming couplets. That's enough. :-) Brooke
Comment Written 26-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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I'm not touching nothing about this work except to say thank you for your comments!
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment from Judian James
Whoa, this is far from funny. Very well written and poignantly sad. You can sense the loneliness throughout this piece and how desperation brings this guy to live this life ... behind closed doors, late at night ... alone, lonely, with the world in his lap. well done Curt
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Whoa, this is far from funny. Very well written and poignantly sad. You can sense the loneliness throughout this piece and how desperation brings this guy to live this life ... behind closed doors, late at night ... alone, lonely, with the world in his lap. well done Curt
Comment Written 26-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Ppeople wonder what happend to communnication and closeness, I think part of the answer is in this piece.
Thanks Jude,
Curt
Comment from Domino
Hi, Curt
If this aint 'self-explanatory', then I dunno what is. LOL.
I suspect ya may be tellin the truth here mate. Oh, what the hell - wankin don't hurt anyone. If it was obligatory there'd be a lot less sex-crime IMHO!
Brilliantly written, rather darkly, but with humour.
Anyway, gotta dash n check out that site ya mention :-) xx
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Hi, Curt
If this aint 'self-explanatory', then I dunno what is. LOL.
I suspect ya may be tellin the truth here mate. Oh, what the hell - wankin don't hurt anyone. If it was obligatory there'd be a lot less sex-crime IMHO!
Brilliantly written, rather darkly, but with humour.
Anyway, gotta dash n check out that site ya mention :-) xx
Comment Written 26-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2009
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Ray,
The site I mention is a fictitious one, however, there are a few that do deliver!
Thanks for t5he kind words friend,
Curt
