The Spirit of Balu
A Pastiche..to honor a writer with inspired piece16 total reviews
Comment from Mrs. KT
Helvi: James Henry Leigh Hunt's poem, Abou Ben Adhem, was my father's favorite poem; I recited it at his funeral. (Leigh Hunt = male poet). Your offering is lyrical and tells a fine story; I especially appreciate your last stanza. Suppose = Supposed; after light = afterlight. diane
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2009
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Helvi: James Henry Leigh Hunt's poem, Abou Ben Adhem, was my father's favorite poem; I recited it at his funeral. (Leigh Hunt = male poet). Your offering is lyrical and tells a fine story; I especially appreciate your last stanza. Suppose = Supposed; after light = afterlight. diane
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2009
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Hi Diane, Thank you for sharing your story about Abou Ben Adhem and your dad. This is one of my favorite poems and I have wanted to something like this for so long. I'm glad I could reach out and touch you with the original and and my own offfering regarding it. I think "Word" seperated "afterlight" when I wrote the poem, but I will check again. Thank you for the wonderful review. Good Luck in the Contest, Helvi :o)
Comment from Signaler
Hello Helvi2, Oh I do wish I had another 6 because I most certainly would award it to you. Your work here is breath taking. Good Luck!
Keep Your Angel On Your Shoulder,
As Always, Signaler
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2009
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Hello Helvi2, Oh I do wish I had another 6 because I most certainly would award it to you. Your work here is breath taking. Good Luck!
Keep Your Angel On Your Shoulder,
As Always, Signaler
Comment Written 21-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2009
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My work is breathtaking? ... and you wanted to give me a six...WOW! Thank you so much! I also want to thank you for voting for me in the contest. I just voted and I saw what you wrote about my poem. Thank you for all the wonderful compliments here and there. I am honored. Smiling
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from ear to ear. Sending a Big Hug, Helvi :o)
Comment from AlvinTEthington
An interesting pastiche. If I am not mistaken, the original is Muslim (it has an Arabic quality to it), and the imitation is Christian. That contextual change is enough to show it is not plagiarism. What I like about the imitation of style is that it is not arrogantly Christian, but shows God's wide love. I like that you show the similarities between Islam and Christianity. This is a very good didactic poem, as well.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2009
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An interesting pastiche. If I am not mistaken, the original is Muslim (it has an Arabic quality to it), and the imitation is Christian. That contextual change is enough to show it is not plagiarism. What I like about the imitation of style is that it is not arrogantly Christian, but shows God's wide love. I like that you show the similarities between Islam and Christianity. This is a very good didactic poem, as well.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2009
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Thanks Al, I am extremely honored by your wonderful remarks. To say this poem is a very good didactic says, you think it has good qualities. Those words from you mean so much. Thank you again, Keep Your Spirit up, Helvi :o)
Comment from Curt Mongold
One can appreciate the beauty of this work by simply seeing the amount of emotion it conveys.
I am impressed on many levels by it's complexity and intriguing word usage. The emotion cannot be denied. It reaches the heart of the reader and remains there.
An exceptional piece.
Sincerely,
Curt
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One can appreciate the beauty of this work by simply seeing the amount of emotion it conveys.
I am impressed on many levels by it's complexity and intriguing word usage. The emotion cannot be denied. It reaches the heart of the reader and remains there.
An exceptional piece.
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009
Comment from Adri7enne
I truly enjoyed both poems. I hadn't read ABA Ben Aden in maybe 20 years. You reminded me how much and why I loved it back then.
I think you did an admirable job imitating the style and the message. Good work.
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I truly enjoyed both poems. I hadn't read ABA Ben Aden in maybe 20 years. You reminded me how much and why I loved it back then.
I think you did an admirable job imitating the style and the message. Good work.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009
Comment from Joan E.
You were very inventive with the creation of the name Balu for the spirit. (In your top notes it should be "supposed".)
I enjoyed your use of a conversational style with quotes and rhyme. The poem is quite parallel to your source material, but retold in a different fashion.
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You were very inventive with the creation of the name Balu for the spirit. (In your top notes it should be "supposed".)
I enjoyed your use of a conversational style with quotes and rhyme. The poem is quite parallel to your source material, but retold in a different fashion.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2009
Comment from bard owl
Your poem is exceptional. It would certainly get six stars if I had them to give. The rhythm and rhyme are flawless and the story in it's perfection, is one that Leigh Hunt would be honored to have had you write. Best of luck in the contest. You have outdone yourself with this one, Helvi. Blessings to you, Linda
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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Your poem is exceptional. It would certainly get six stars if I had them to give. The rhythm and rhyme are flawless and the story in it's perfection, is one that Leigh Hunt would be honored to have had you write. Best of luck in the contest. You have outdone yourself with this one, Helvi. Blessings to you, Linda
Comment Written 19-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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Hi Linda, I really love the original poem so your words mean a great deal to me. I am truly honored to receive such a review of this magnitude from someone like yourself. Thank you so much for the extraordinary review. WOW! Hugs and Smiles, Helvi :o)
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Helvi2
what a calming poem to read helped rasied my spirits to read your rhyming peaceful thoughts.
Looks like you took your time and took very careful thinking to make you poem the direct opposite of the writer of Abou Ben Adhem
Gert
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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Hello Helvi2
what a calming poem to read helped rasied my spirits to read your rhyming peaceful thoughts.
Looks like you took your time and took very careful thinking to make you poem the direct opposite of the writer of Abou Ben Adhem
Gert
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2009
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Hi Gert, Thank you my friend. I wanted this poem to have the same feel as Abou Ben Adhem .I am so glad what I wrote lifted your spirits, because knowing that lifts mine. :o) I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for the wonderful review. Helvi :o)
Comment from smiles
I loved it. Pleasing to the soul.
Good work. Graceful poetic flow.
I like this challenge, pastiche, I believe you met the challenge.
smiles
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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I loved it. Pleasing to the soul.
Good work. Graceful poetic flow.
I like this challenge, pastiche, I believe you met the challenge.
smiles
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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Hi smiles, If if this poem caused you to smile then you've returned it wrapped in gold. Thank you so much for the review. Helvi :o)
Comment from Stuart7
any writer wuold be onoured by this wonderful
piece of work. i have not come across this style
before and must look up the others in te contst
a pleaure to read and review. Regards Stuart
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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any writer wuold be onoured by this wonderful
piece of work. i have not come across this style
before and must look up the others in te contst
a pleaure to read and review. Regards Stuart
Comment Written 18-Jan-2009
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2009
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Thank you!!! I am honored by your kind review. I'm glad you enjoyed what I wrote. Smiles, Helvi :o)
