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Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "The Dragon"An orphaned boy finds his destiny
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Comment from Adri7enne
This is the second chapter I read of Runt, but something is missing somewhere. Don't know how Runt ended up with the Magistrate. Last I looked, he was cosying up to a Driad. That must be while you were writing the girly poem, mnn?
You've got me with this. I was completely immersed in this. If I could, I'd take it to bed with me and get comfortable. What a fun read. I suppose I'll discover this is an abandonned project. Shame if it is. Could have been a real fun book.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2009
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This is the second chapter I read of Runt, but something is missing somewhere. Don't know how Runt ended up with the Magistrate. Last I looked, he was cosying up to a Driad. That must be while you were writing the girly poem, mnn?
You've got me with this. I was completely immersed in this. If I could, I'd take it to bed with me and get comfortable. What a fun read. I suppose I'll discover this is an abandonned project. Shame if it is. Could have been a real fun book.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2009
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2009
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Not dead, merely sleeping. I've realised I can only write one book at a time. I'll have a bash at it again sometime and yes, there is a chpater (or two) missing.
I don't read fantasy, except for Terry Pratchett, who doesn't count, so it was an attempt to write a fanatasy that wasn't a clone of either a video game or Tolkien. Thanks for your encouragement.
Comment from Lady & Louis
Well, I hope you do write the other chapters, snodlander, because I enjoyed this and I'd be interested to see more. It has the feel of taking place some while after your Travellers book - maybe a century later, although that plane wouldn't survive so long - but it's got the post-apocalyptic return to medievalish feel about it. I like the tension between Runt and the Magistrate, and the slightly contradictory characters each presents; it gives them spark and interest.
Didn't see any nits, and I hope the other chapters of this will get around to writing themselves!
Cheers,
Louise
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2008
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Well, I hope you do write the other chapters, snodlander, because I enjoyed this and I'd be interested to see more. It has the feel of taking place some while after your Travellers book - maybe a century later, although that plane wouldn't survive so long - but it's got the post-apocalyptic return to medievalish feel about it. I like the tension between Runt and the Magistrate, and the slightly contradictory characters each presents; it gives them spark and interest.
Didn't see any nits, and I hope the other chapters of this will get around to writing themselves!
Cheers,
Louise
Comment Written 14-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2008
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I think this was a pure fantasy story, with magic and spirits and stuff, but yes, with technology long gone lying around. I might do something with it, we shall see.
Thanks for the review and encouragement
Comment from Celtic~Soul
Well, snap to it, boy! This is grand! I love the characters and the interaction is just plain splendid, the psychology of the magistrate is certinaly worthy of more exploration. More, more!
One nit:
Very good, runt. - Runt
Superb, snodlander!
Dawn
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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Well, snap to it, boy! This is grand! I love the characters and the interaction is just plain splendid, the psychology of the magistrate is certinaly worthy of more exploration. More, more!
One nit:
Very good, runt. - Runt
Superb, snodlander!
Dawn
Comment Written 14-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2008
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Oh damn, another book I've started. I'll have to finish one sometime.
Thanks for the generous review.
Comment from babylonia
i didn't know the prompts were limited to two a week. i see so many of the same people in them. hmmm ... i think this would definitely be a good entry into the contest. even if it is chapter three or four. you could make it a first chapter and the make the next couple flashback stories. just an idea.
easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent. keep up the good work~
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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i didn't know the prompts were limited to two a week. i see so many of the same people in them. hmmm ... i think this would definitely be a good entry into the contest. even if it is chapter three or four. you could make it a first chapter and the make the next couple flashback stories. just an idea.
easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent. keep up the good work~
love,
barbara
Comment Written 13-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2008
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Ha, I didn't know either, but there you go. Thanks for your review and encouragement
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you are welcome~
love,
barbara
Comment from chrisweigand
Definately an interesting start to a fantasy. I would really like to see more. The characters seem strong and developed and the story has lots of potential. Keep writing.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2008
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Definately an interesting start to a fantasy. I would really like to see more. The characters seem strong and developed and the story has lots of potential. Keep writing.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2008
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Thank you. I'm glad you liked it
Comment from ericnpetty
I really enjoyed this, enough of a mystery to keep me reading and to keep most readers reading and that's the point of it all, isn't it.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2008
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I really enjoyed this, enough of a mystery to keep me reading and to keep most readers reading and that's the point of it all, isn't it.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2008
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Thank you. I'm glad you liked it
Comment from adewpearl
a donkey with attitude
black magic that sucks the life out of trees and anything else that spends time in the area = this is quite intriguing and entertaining
I am so reading this at the wrong time - I know I should be reading the description of the metal dragon and figuring out what sort of road-clearing machine it is or whatever, and I've had one helluva day and my brain is malfunctioning or nonfunctioning or just plain dead, and there are not other reviews to cheat off. I'm sorry.
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2008
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a donkey with attitude
black magic that sucks the life out of trees and anything else that spends time in the area = this is quite intriguing and entertaining
I am so reading this at the wrong time - I know I should be reading the description of the metal dragon and figuring out what sort of road-clearing machine it is or whatever, and I've had one helluva day and my brain is malfunctioning or nonfunctioning or just plain dead, and there are not other reviews to cheat off. I'm sorry.
Comment Written 12-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2008
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No worries. I've got sort of half an idea about what might happen, but it's all half-formed, so maybe it's my brain and not yours.
But thank you for reading despite your confusion.
