The Sonnet Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Ashes of Lost Hope"a poetic collage of my sonnets
109 total reviews
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello yeltel,
I think this is a winner. You've penned such an eloquent love poem of an unrequited love. The artwork that accompanies the poem is excellent. (I too am Russian - American born). Where did you get that photo? Please let me know.
This poem reads and flows well and I have no suggestion for improvement. I particularly liked the following lines:
Suddenly gone, all that I thought was real.
Eyes blinded by your sun, I whirled in red,
Good luck in the contest. Regards, LateBloomer
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Hello yeltel,
I think this is a winner. You've penned such an eloquent love poem of an unrequited love. The artwork that accompanies the poem is excellent. (I too am Russian - American born). Where did you get that photo? Please let me know.
This poem reads and flows well and I have no suggestion for improvement. I particularly liked the following lines:
Suddenly gone, all that I thought was real.
Eyes blinded by your sun, I whirled in red,
Good luck in the contest. Regards, LateBloomer
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Thank you so much for the honor of your stars, your great compliment and your faith in my work. I am delighted by your words. If you Google Michael Cheval, you would find this painting - "Unrequited Letters". Very fitting the for contest topic, isn't it? Yes, he is one of the most talented avant-garde poets of our time. Thank you again from the bottom of my heart and please, take care.
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I meant to say, Michael Cheval is one of the most avant-garde ARTISTS of our time. It's getting late here (smile)
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That's ok ... I still enjoyed the Artwork. Regards, LateBloomer
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My friends own an art gallery in New York City and they've exhibited Michael Cheval's work many times. His exhibitions are always a hit! I wish I could afford at least one. But they are priced sky-high.
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where in NYC is the gallery. I was born and raised on the west side of Manhattan - Hell's Kitchen. Regards, LateBloomer
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Gallery's in Soho, lower East Side.
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Nice ... I went to school on Canal & West Broadway ... before Soho was Soho and when they were still building the World Trade Center - I watched it built and I saw it fall ... all in one life time.
I really appreciate you taking the time to answer my questions.
Regards, LateBloomer
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
Well, you should win this one hands down, my friend. It sounds as though Shakespeare himself penned it. It's the most perfect sonnet I've ever read.
Sweet Pea
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Well, you should win this one hands down, my friend. It sounds as though Shakespeare himself penned it. It's the most perfect sonnet I've ever read.
Sweet Pea
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Thank you so much for this great compliment. You really got me blushing. There are so many good sonnets here, and this contest too. I am highly flattered by your words and your kindness, please care. Happy holidays.
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none like yours reads.
Comment from KelinaJ
Fascinating image selection. Good presentation. Most images people use are smaller. It's nice to see some variety. Good color scheme, though I'm not sure about the bright blue around the image. Great use of rhythm and rhyme. Excellent piece. Nailed the topic head on!
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Fascinating image selection. Good presentation. Most images people use are smaller. It's nice to see some variety. Good color scheme, though I'm not sure about the bright blue around the image. Great use of rhythm and rhyme. Excellent piece. Nailed the topic head on!
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Thank you for your compliment and for your delighted words. I had no control over the blue line across the image, the picture host I used produced it on its own.
Comment from Miska
Another of your wonderful sonnets. how do you manage to get it all to flow so beautifully. The story was well told. I enjoyed this poem immensely. best regards Miska
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Another of your wonderful sonnets. how do you manage to get it all to flow so beautifully. The story was well told. I enjoyed this poem immensely. best regards Miska
Comment Written 09-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Thank you so much, my dear, for your warm words. YOU are incredible sonnet writer yourself! I remember your English Sonnet, and that delightful blue flower!
Comment from luna
yeltel,
I have to award this a six because of the absolute beauty as I read it aloud. I cannot write a sonnet to save my life, and you wrote this as if you just breathed it onto the page. The picture is perfect for the words. I don't usually review sonnets because I can't write them, but I know what I like and I enjoyed this very much. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love,
Luna *smile*
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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yeltel,
I have to award this a six because of the absolute beauty as I read it aloud. I cannot write a sonnet to save my life, and you wrote this as if you just breathed it onto the page. The picture is perfect for the words. I don't usually review sonnets because I can't write them, but I know what I like and I enjoyed this very much. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love,
Luna *smile*
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Dear Luna,
Thank you so much for this great honor and your compliment which warmed my heart. Your words mean a lot to me and I am truly honored that a poet of your statue has chosen them for my work. Again, thank you for making my day, I am very happy that you liked my piece so much. Much love, Yelena
Comment from chaswriter
yeltel - Excellent Spenserian Sonnet. The best that I have read in the contest. Great rhyme, excellent rhythm, and a easy to read storyline with good flow/pace. Good luck. Charlie.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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yeltel - Excellent Spenserian Sonnet. The best that I have read in the contest. Great rhyme, excellent rhythm, and a easy to read storyline with good flow/pace. Good luck. Charlie.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Thank you so much for your great review. I appreciate it very much. Please, take care.
Comment from Donovan
It is always good to write in Victorian terms and make flowery language create the image. You have done this well and the message comes through clearly. I think poems that require such ridged structure always get a little stiff because of the nature of forcing words. You seemingly have avoided this pitfall.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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It is always good to write in Victorian terms and make flowery language create the image. You have done this well and the message comes through clearly. I think poems that require such ridged structure always get a little stiff because of the nature of forcing words. You seemingly have avoided this pitfall.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Thank you so much for this delightful review and your compliment. Yes, the danger exists, with the "stringent rhymes". I try to make them sound as unforced as possible (smile).
Comment from Lead Scout
A wonderful poem that truly caters enjoyment into one's heart and mind. The poem flowed well and its really great. Have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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A wonderful poem that truly caters enjoyment into one's heart and mind. The poem flowed well and its really great. Have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review and compliment. It means a lot to me. Please, take care.
Comment from Lois Delaney
This is a very lovely sonnet, dear yeltel. I love the picture you chose to go with, and the lines have a real nice rhythm to them.
I have tried to write one as well. Best wishes in the contest. This looks like a winner.
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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This is a very lovely sonnet, dear yeltel. I love the picture you chose to go with, and the lines have a real nice rhythm to them.
I have tried to write one as well. Best wishes in the contest. This looks like a winner.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Thank you so much, my dear, for your great words. I will read and review your sonne tonight. I am sure it's exquisite. Love, Yelena
Comment from Mapleson
The slant rhyme employed between lines 4 and 5 spoils the effect some. If you converted lines 5 and 7 to present tense (or maybe changed line 7 to another rhyme, such as wheel?), it would make the poem seem more current and improve the rhyme scheme strength.
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The slant rhyme employed between lines 4 and 5 spoils the effect some. If you converted lines 5 and 7 to present tense (or maybe changed line 7 to another rhyme, such as wheel?), it would make the poem seem more current and improve the rhyme scheme strength.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2008
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Mr. Mapleson,
Slant rhymes rescue the work from sounding "sing-songy" and the bigger danger of forced rhymes. They are like litte guards (smile). To make this poem "more current" was not my purpose. Please, take care.
