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19 total reviews
Comment from Terror2s
Funny how one just automatically assumes that it is a typical make driver refusing to ask for directions. (You didn't even mention a car, but the reader knows exactly where your characters are.) Good luck. Terror
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2008
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Funny how one just automatically assumes that it is a typical make driver refusing to ask for directions. (You didn't even mention a car, but the reader knows exactly where your characters are.) Good luck. Terror
Comment Written 15-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2008
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well that was the contest lol :)
Comment from eveeator
excellent, I think I may have been on this journey a few times through my life, I love the way you have written this and thought it through and it is so natural and likely to happen, good luck in the contest I really enjoyed the read
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
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excellent, I think I may have been on this journey a few times through my life, I love the way you have written this and thought it through and it is so natural and likely to happen, good luck in the contest I really enjoyed the read
Comment Written 15-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
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haha haven't we all? LOL!
Comment from knowledge
The war of the egos continues, or the war of the sexes rages on. I had to laugh all the way through this. Luck on the contest.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
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The war of the egos continues, or the war of the sexes rages on. I had to laugh all the way through this. Luck on the contest.
Thank You My Friend,
Knowledge
Comment Written 15-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
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LOL! thanx! :)
Comment from wierdgrace
This contest is so perfect, and funny, I am so great at this when i was younger, my x got us lost all the times, and reading this made me laugh. thank you so much for a great writing.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
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This contest is so perfect, and funny, I am so great at this when i was younger, my x got us lost all the times, and reading this made me laugh. thank you so much for a great writing.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
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hehe thanx! :)
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u r welcome
Comment from benjan
Fun, fun, fun, Shelley. Well, maybe not for them. This is a universal theme. What married couple hasn't been through this? Very fluid. The dialogue moves smoothly and you have emphasized all the right places. Good luck in the contest. Warmly, Barb ;o)
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
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Fun, fun, fun, Shelley. Well, maybe not for them. This is a universal theme. What married couple hasn't been through this? Very fluid. The dialogue moves smoothly and you have emphasized all the right places. Good luck in the contest. Warmly, Barb ;o)
Comment Written 15-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
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hehe thanx lots! :)
Comment from mmichelle97219
Oh my god I am back in the car with my parents. Except in their case my mother never got lost we were exploring. Good luck in the contest, shelley
Michelle
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
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Oh my god I am back in the car with my parents. Except in their case my mother never got lost we were exploring. Good luck in the contest, shelley
Michelle
Comment Written 15-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
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LOL! glad i could take ya back ;-)
Comment from MJMuraco
This story had cute dialogue. Sometimes we do talk to each other in this way. I would have liked to know what happens after they find out that they are really lost.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
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This story had cute dialogue. Sometimes we do talk to each other in this way. I would have liked to know what happens after they find out that they are really lost.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
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thanx! :)
Comment from BillBologna
Probably a very real conversation that happens every day. This did not go anywhere for me. I think it lacked creativity and in esscence, not much dialogue.
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reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
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Probably a very real conversation that happens every day. This did not go anywhere for me. I think it lacked creativity and in esscence, not much dialogue.
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Comment Written 15-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
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thanx lots! :)
Comment from adewpearl
My husband was a typical man when driving - he refused to stop at a damn station to ask even if we were hopelessly late - you capture our conversations perfectly, as if you were eavesdropping!
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
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My husband was a typical man when driving - he refused to stop at a damn station to ask even if we were hopelessly late - you capture our conversations perfectly, as if you were eavesdropping!
Comment Written 15-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2008
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LOL! thanx! :)
Comment from EllieKaye
Hi Shelly- This is so cute! I like this part- I had a good laugh-
"Yea, right. Idiot."
"Bitch."
"Baldy."
"Frigid."
"Unsatisfying."
"Whiner."
"Oh, just admit you're lost."
"Can't. I'm not lost."
I love these contests where you are forced to use a prompt. It really stretches my imagination. Fun stuff, huh?
: ) Ellie
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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Hi Shelly- This is so cute! I like this part- I had a good laugh-
"Yea, right. Idiot."
"Bitch."
"Baldy."
"Frigid."
"Unsatisfying."
"Whiner."
"Oh, just admit you're lost."
"Can't. I'm not lost."
I love these contests where you are forced to use a prompt. It really stretches my imagination. Fun stuff, huh?
: ) Ellie
Comment Written 14-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2008
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and addicting too LOL!
