Paint Me An Angel
An amazing vision I had last night.81 total reviews
Comment from redrider6612
Wow, what an amazing vision! Beautifully told, nice flow, eloquent and concise.
Just a couple minor nits:
Entire scenes [sprung] to life before my eyes--sprang
It seemed like just seconds[,] since I'd heard
Over all, very well done and enjoyable. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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Wow, what an amazing vision! Beautifully told, nice flow, eloquent and concise.
Just a couple minor nits:
Entire scenes [sprung] to life before my eyes--sprang
It seemed like just seconds[,] since I'd heard
Over all, very well done and enjoyable. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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Thank you so much for this review or comment. I have reached a point where I cannot hope to catch up with my reviews in need of answering without resorting to a carbon copied response. I hate doing it, but with 700 plus unanswered, I can't keep up! Goat kidding season is looming, and we are spending more and more time outside preparing our buildings. My muse is driving me crazy trying to write as much as she can, before we end up on our three-to-four month sabbatical. LOL. I'm hoping you will forgive me. I have read every review, corrected nits and errors found and carefully considered every suggestion made. I am so glad you have enjoyed my work, or at felt it worthy of a comment.
I am trying to review your work as much as I can also, and by using a C.C. here, I have more time left to read all your wonderful stories, articles and poems, as well!
Hugs,
Jani
Comment from Dave M
Janilou,
This is an excellent short story, without any problems or nits that I could find. Purple trees for real? As you said in the vision, "Why not?"
Dave M
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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Janilou,
This is an excellent short story, without any problems or nits that I could find. Purple trees for real? As you said in the vision, "Why not?"
Dave M
Comment Written 13-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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Thank you so much for this review or comment. I have reached a point where I cannot hope to catch up with my reviews in need of answering without resorting to a carbon copied response. I hate doing it, but with 700 plus unanswered, I can't keep up! Goat kidding season is looming, and we are spending more and more time outside preparing our buildings. My muse is driving me crazy trying to write as much as she can, before we end up on our three-to-four month sabbatical. LOL. I'm hoping you will forgive me. I have read every review, corrected nits and errors found and carefully considered every suggestion made. I am so glad you have enjoyed my work, or at felt it worthy of a comment.
I am trying to review your work as much as I can also, and by using a C.C. here, I have more time left to read all your wonderful stories, articles and poems, as well!
Hugs,
Jani
Comment from Signaler
Hello janilou, Believe it or not, my middle name is Louise. My mother's middle name was Louise, my Grandmother's middle name was also, Louise. This is one of the most captivating story I have read in a long time. I believe in that place beyond where God's love is so apparent and we are the perfect age and health. Doing what we loved and what he gifted us with. Perhaps you and i will be writing when we come to our loved ones.Wish I had a six, you deserve them
Keep Your Angel On Your Shoulder,
As Always, Signaler
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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Hello janilou, Believe it or not, my middle name is Louise. My mother's middle name was Louise, my Grandmother's middle name was also, Louise. This is one of the most captivating story I have read in a long time. I believe in that place beyond where God's love is so apparent and we are the perfect age and health. Doing what we loved and what he gifted us with. Perhaps you and i will be writing when we come to our loved ones.Wish I had a six, you deserve them
Keep Your Angel On Your Shoulder,
As Always, Signaler
Comment Written 13-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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Thank you so much for this review or comment. I have reached a point where I cannot hope to catch up with my reviews in need of answering without resorting to a carbon copied response. I hate doing it, but with 700 plus unanswered, I can't keep up! Goat kidding season is looming, and we are spending more and more time outside preparing our buildings. My muse is driving me crazy trying to write as much as she can, before we end up on our three-to-four month sabbatical. LOL. I'm hoping you will forgive me. I have read every review, corrected nits and errors found and carefully considered every suggestion made. I am so glad you have enjoyed my work, or at felt it worthy of a comment.
I am trying to review your work as much as I can also, and by using a C.C. here, I have more time left to read all your wonderful stories, articles and poems, as well!
Hugs,
Jani
Comment from becky7777
I lost my mom 7 months ago so this really hit the heart strings. it is so beautiful and has brought tears streaming down my face. but not sad ones happy ones. thank you so much for sharing your inspiring story with us.
Only thing I saw was to capitalize Earth. thanks so much
Becky
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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I lost my mom 7 months ago so this really hit the heart strings. it is so beautiful and has brought tears streaming down my face. but not sad ones happy ones. thank you so much for sharing your inspiring story with us.
Only thing I saw was to capitalize Earth. thanks so much
Becky
Comment Written 13-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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Wow! Thank you so much for the exceptional rating. I am so sorry to hear of your loss. It hurts so much.
Hugs,
Jani
Comment from Celtic~Soul
Lovely, Jani, and captured so beautifully! Many years ago, after my mother passed I visited with her in a couple of dreams, very briefly, nothing as delightful as this, but equally as touching and memorable.
A couple of thoughts for you:
crystal clear brook between the rocks with her hands - I think it would be more powerful if you dropped 'with her hands'
comes to life." I wanted to shout for joy!
- I'd put the exclamation after life and drop the wanting to shout line...says it all that way!
Take care, dear!
Dawn
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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Lovely, Jani, and captured so beautifully! Many years ago, after my mother passed I visited with her in a couple of dreams, very briefly, nothing as delightful as this, but equally as touching and memorable.
A couple of thoughts for you:
crystal clear brook between the rocks with her hands - I think it would be more powerful if you dropped 'with her hands'
comes to life." I wanted to shout for joy!
- I'd put the exclamation after life and drop the wanting to shout line...says it all that way!
Take care, dear!
Dawn
Comment Written 13-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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Oh, Dawn, I deeply appreciate this review and the exceptional rating! I will take a look at those lines.
Many thanks for this wonderful review.
Hugs,
Jani
Comment from tteach
Interesting! So real, yet the veil over the scene. Your mother's voice and image, transformed. Words of acceptance and forgiveness. All there, and more.
"Mum, everything you paint comes to life." I wanted to shout for joy!
For some reason, I wouldn't use the exclamation point. Your words express the feeling...not needed to be echoed in punctuation.
EVerything else looked pretty good.
You were truly blessed!
Oh...congrats on the Story of the Month.
terry
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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Interesting! So real, yet the veil over the scene. Your mother's voice and image, transformed. Words of acceptance and forgiveness. All there, and more.
"Mum, everything you paint comes to life." I wanted to shout for joy!
For some reason, I wouldn't use the exclamation point. Your words express the feeling...not needed to be echoed in punctuation.
EVerything else looked pretty good.
You were truly blessed!
Oh...congrats on the Story of the Month.
terry
Comment Written 13-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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Thank you so much for this review or comment. I have reached a point where I cannot hope to catch up with my reviews in need of answering without resorting to a carbon copied response. I hate doing it, but with 700 plus unanswered, I can't keep up! Goat kidding season is looming, and we are spending more and more time outside preparing our buildings. My muse is driving me crazy trying to write as much as she can, before we end up on our three-to-four month sabbatical. LOL. I'm hoping you will forgive me. I have read every review, corrected nits and errors found and carefully considered every suggestion made. I am so glad you have enjoyed my work, or at felt it worthy of a comment.
I am trying to review your work as much as I can also, and by using a C.C. here, I have more time left to read all your wonderful stories, articles and poems, as well!
Hugs,
Jani
Comment from allborn66
It's a beautiful story, and a wonderful vision. I did not see any SPAG, but it has to be blaring for me to find it. The story moves along nicely, it must have been a strong vision.
Barbara
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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It's a beautiful story, and a wonderful vision. I did not see any SPAG, but it has to be blaring for me to find it. The story moves along nicely, it must have been a strong vision.
Barbara
Comment Written 13-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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Thank you so much for this review or comment. I have reached a point where I cannot hope to catch up with my reviews in need of answering without resorting to a carbon copied response. I hate doing it, but with 700 plus unanswered, I can't keep up! Goat kidding season is looming, and we are spending more and more time outside preparing our buildings. My muse is driving me crazy trying to write as much as she can, before we end up on our three-to-four month sabbatical. LOL. I'm hoping you will forgive me. I have read every review, corrected nits and errors found and carefully considered every suggestion made. I am so glad you have enjoyed my work, or at felt it worthy of a comment.
I am trying to review your work as much as I can also, and by using a C.C. here, I have more time left to read all your wonderful stories, articles and poems, as well!
Hugs,
Jani
Comment from lovemyta
What a beautiful dread that you had about you "Mum" I don't dream about my mom. I don't know why, I guess that is because she causes a lot of grief for me right now. I dream about my dad sho died when I was 14. I am 52 now so he died a long time ago. Good job recalling it.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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What a beautiful dread that you had about you "Mum" I don't dream about my mom. I don't know why, I guess that is because she causes a lot of grief for me right now. I dream about my dad sho died when I was 14. I am 52 now so he died a long time ago. Good job recalling it.
Comment Written 13-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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Sorry to hear about the loss of your dad. My mother and I didn't see eye-to-eye either when she was alive. That made it even more wonderful to see her so happy and accepting there.
Thanks for the wonderful review.
Hugs,
Jani
Comment from Lady & Louis
Jani, Jani, how beautiful for you both! For her to be able to visit, and for you to see her ... and the artwork she does! That's a true painter, one who lives and breathes her art - literally, now! (Himself doesn't paint that way, I think he settles for a more ordinary sort of level, lol.)
Your closing note has me so intrigued but I can't ask about it here ... I've PM'd you.
There's one bit of spag, and a question:
invisible and im-penetrable - impenetrable
since I'd heard that trusted voice take my hand - intriguing phrasing, Jani: was this one of those times when the senses combine?
BIG hugs!
Louise xxxxx
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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Jani, Jani, how beautiful for you both! For her to be able to visit, and for you to see her ... and the artwork she does! That's a true painter, one who lives and breathes her art - literally, now! (Himself doesn't paint that way, I think he settles for a more ordinary sort of level, lol.)
Your closing note has me so intrigued but I can't ask about it here ... I've PM'd you.
There's one bit of spag, and a question:
invisible and im-penetrable - impenetrable
since I'd heard that trusted voice take my hand - intriguing phrasing, Jani: was this one of those times when the senses combine?
BIG hugs!
Louise xxxxx
Comment Written 13-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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It was beautiful. Yes, it was one of those times. So hard to describe or explain! :-) Thanks for the wonderful review!
Hugs,
Jani
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is a beautiful piece you have written for us all too share it must have been lovely for you seeing your mother at peace and very happy well done regards Fuller
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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This is a beautiful piece you have written for us all too share it must have been lovely for you seeing your mother at peace and very happy well done regards Fuller
Comment Written 13-Nov-2008
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2008
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Thank you so much for this review or comment. I have reached a point where I cannot hope to catch up with my reviews in need of answering without resorting to a carbon copied response. I hate doing it, but with 700 plus unanswered, I can't keep up! Goat kidding season is looming, and we are spending more and more time outside preparing our buildings. My muse is driving me crazy trying to write as much as she can, before we end up on our three-to-four month sabbatical. LOL. I'm hoping you will forgive me. I have read every review, corrected nits and errors found and carefully considered every suggestion made. I am so glad you have enjoyed my work, or at felt it worthy of a comment.
I am trying to review your work as much as I can also, and by using a C.C. here, I have more time left to read all your wonderful stories, articles and poems, as well!
Hugs,
Jani
