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Precious Gems: An Anthology

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A Rhyming Collection of Treasured Works

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Comment from Seraphim Delphinium
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Oh, how this makes my heart ache! (I remember your telling me about his biological mother.) Darling, I KNOW you have done him well. I know in my bones you have done all you could. Sometimes we just must deal with "the odds." Odds are, he will find himself, one way or the other, and one of these days, he will wake up, drop to his knees, and thank his Creator, that you were there for him. An EXCEPTIONAL piece, composed from your beautiful heart. Brava! Brava! Brava!
Much love to you,
Seraph ~ xoxoxox

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2008


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2008
    As said in pm, THANKYOU. Have still not recovered enough to write anything sufficient here, so thank you hugely, warmly and appreciatively is the best I can come up with. You surely live up to your name my dear xooxoxoxoxxo
Comment from jshep
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This was so sad. "Godspeed Petey"- made me well with tears. This poem has so much depth and personal emotions it is overwhelming. Found no changes to recommend and know how difficult this must have been for you. thank God he had you and your family to influence him for part of his life. He was very lucky, and someday, he will realize it. Well done and thanks for sharing such a meaningful experience in your life. Joyce xoxo

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2008


reply by the author on 19-Oct-2008
    Thanks so much Joyce. It has been an interesting road to say the least. Frustrating, hard work and very thankless. Yet I wouldn't trade this last four years for the world. The experience has given me an added depth and attitude towards life I wouldn't have had otherwise I think. Our Brookey's gonna miss him heaps she says! They got quite close in the last two years. I'll miss the great galoot too, even if he's nothing but hard work. Time will tell. Again, thanks so much for your kindness here, and supportive comments which are always truly appreciated xoxoxoxoxo
Comment from bard owl
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It is very hard for me to cry. The lump of sorrow gets larger and larger in my chest until I can hardly breathe. Then, I cry. This poem made me cry. There is such sadness and longing and as a mother, I know the frustration you are feeling. Doesn't matter whether or not you gave birth to this child. Mother love goes far beyond the physical act of bearing a child. Someday this boy will realize what a tender and loving "other mother" he had in you. This poem is so very exceptional ... expressing such love. Your heart is SO in the right place.
Love and blessings to you, Linda

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2008


reply by the author on 17-Oct-2008
    I wonder sometimes, about the "heart being in the right place". At times, I've got so ANGRY at his incredible indifference and selfishness, then his expectation that I'm going to bow down and kiss his feet at the tiny little things he might do. Gah! Love him, but in so many ways, it's a good thing he's going to live his own life and find out what it's like to have to do things for himself. Though I won't be surprised if he turns up here with a bag of washing... and a hand out for a loan. Ah well.

    Again, I thank you for such inspiring comments here; I apologise for making you cry, but in truth, I had a howl after writing this. He'll never read this, at least not for a very long time, nor will he read the other one I wrote about him. He simply wouldn't understand or appreciate any of it yet. So thank you, for your consistent support, encouragement and friendship. My sad heart is all aglow after reading this xoxoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment from mmichelle97219
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You say farewell to the little boy
And welcome the man as you throw away the toys
He will stumble and he will fall
let him know you'll be ther through it all
He'll come back to you, you'll see
Until then just let him be


I know your heartache, but now you job is done, and all you can be now is a supportive mother when all others have abandoned him. Good post.
Michelle

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2008


reply by the author on 17-Oct-2008
    Thanks Michelle. While I won't miss the extra work he makes(!), I'll miss HIM and worry about him. Guess that's what mothers are for! Thanks again friend xoxoxoxo
Comment from carolm5415
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I've gathered of late that things have been a bit stressful on the station as Pete has reached some semblance of maturity. He will be back in time, older and wiser, for visits and you will know that his time with you was well spent.

 Comment Written 17-Oct-2008


reply by the author on 17-Oct-2008
    Thanks Carol. Your words of wisdom are a great comfort and I appreciate it xoxoxoxoxo
Comment from earthlybeing
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Oh my such a sad time for you. I know that your heart will year, cry and worry as all mothers hearts so. Well written and very heartfelt. I will say a prayer that the Lord may help keep him safe. Thanks, Jeanette

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2008


reply by the author on 17-Oct-2008
    Thanks so much Jeanette. There'll be two of us praying for him, so he should do okay! Bless you for continued kindness and support my friend xoxoxoxo
Comment from skye
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Fabulous artwork to lead into this strong poem about loss - leaving your home to live a life on his own.
We do worry, we do because we love and care so much.
Such a sad sad thing... when nothing more can be done.
Terrific lines, wonderful emotions.
Very well done.

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2008


reply by the author on 17-Oct-2008
    Thanks so very much skye. Hubby was surprised when I said I was upset he was leaving, but it's as you say: we're mothers, even if they're not our own. And I feel that my job with him was far from done, but time'll tell. Again, thanks so much for stopping by and for your kind words xoxoxox
Comment from Russel Chale
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A very passionate and moving poem. One can feel the tangible emotion in your words.

While I pray we taught you well enough to face your fears
[I don't believe the plural "fears" is necessary. "fear" can play the role of a collective noun.]

And hope one day, my Son, your heart will fondly think of me [Don't capitalize "son". Regardless of how you feel, it is grammatically incorrect. I suggest placing it in single quote marks or non-italics.]

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2008


reply by the author on 17-Oct-2008
    Believe it or not, I changed that fear[s] bit before reading this, and have taken your advice about the [S]on bit.

    Thanks as always, for your comments, help and practical advice. I should become a very polished writer with the advice I get from you my friend! You're very much appreciated xoxoxoxoxo
Comment from joan marie
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Boy, this blew me away. I am going to have to read the other. Going out on your own is such a big step and so much of society pushes this as the status quo. I wonder how many are really ready? Touched my heart with this. I have not children. But your words were so carefully chosen that I could feel you and you anguish and fear for the child. joan marie

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2008


reply by the author on 16-Oct-2008
    Thanks Joan. I can only hope we've given him enough stability to live a good life out there. Bless you for your comments and review my friend xoxoxoxxo
reply by joan marie on 17-Oct-2008
    Sounds like you've done the best you can. We can only pray now for his safety. I don't know the whole background but I think writer's put their hearts and souls into their work and it says a lot about them. Our work is an insight to who we really are. I belive he'll remember the lessons you've taught him. jm
Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman
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This is heartfelt and touching; never easy when the nest empties; (although the average is they come back 3 times) lol.

Blessings to you and Petey to. Anytime you can answer the question: "did you do your best" then let your heart know that you did your job well.

well written; a tad bit small and hard on older eyes but I got through it.

Well Done Mom!

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2008


reply by the author on 16-Oct-2008
    3 times eh? We'll see...

    Thanks so much astrolite for your blessings, your kind words and review comments. Sorry 'bout the small print ... I thought it was big enough!

    Again, thanks so much for stopping by and your encouragement. Hoepfully we've done right by him and he has a good life xoxoxoxoxo
reply by PatriciaLiteHickman on 16-Oct-2008
    You are very welcome for the review; I'm sure you did the best you could; at least he will later come to realize from the experience with you that there are good people in the world; and that is an important lesson too. Blessings on your night (or day) Tricia