The Sparrow And The Savior
For the least of these, He cares. This is for you.64 total reviews
Comment from Donovan
You always on this subject have a great message, one that needs to be told. My preference: The formatting is funny, too many spaces between lines and makes it hard to read, at least on a computer. Too much. You give the message and it is well taken, then you start over again. In the end you give a summation. This is about three good pieces, should not be one....but what do I now...It is a message we all need to hear daily.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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You always on this subject have a great message, one that needs to be told. My preference: The formatting is funny, too many spaces between lines and makes it hard to read, at least on a computer. Too much. You give the message and it is well taken, then you start over again. In the end you give a summation. This is about three good pieces, should not be one....but what do I now...It is a message we all need to hear daily.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much. I have tried to correct the spacing several times. Sometimes the FanStory editor takes exception to correct line spacing! Thanks for the good review.
Jan
Comment from redrider6612
This was absolutely beautiful. You kept it simple and spoke from the heart, the most effective way to tell His truths. Jeremy Camp is my favorite Christian artist. My favorite song of his is "Give Me Jesus". Anyway, I spotted no SPAG at all and the flow was perfect. I wish I had a six to give to this masterpiece. Bless you, friend.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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This was absolutely beautiful. You kept it simple and spoke from the heart, the most effective way to tell His truths. Jeremy Camp is my favorite Christian artist. My favorite song of his is "Give Me Jesus". Anyway, I spotted no SPAG at all and the flow was perfect. I wish I had a six to give to this masterpiece. Bless you, friend.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much. Jeremy is a very talented singer/songwriter, isn't he? Knowing you wanted to give this six stars is good enough for me.
Thank you!
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from wirenut
Janilou,
interestin combination of subjects with a common theme, the love of God for His creation and the salvation given through death, that which we fear most was defeated so that we may live,
preach on, the choir is listening,
rick
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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Janilou,
interestin combination of subjects with a common theme, the love of God for His creation and the salvation given through death, that which we fear most was defeated so that we may live,
preach on, the choir is listening,
rick
Comment Written 14-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much, Rick. Your words mean a great deal to me.
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from PatriciaLiteHickman
I like this very much including the "He knows your pain" part; appreciate the author notes at the bottom too; well done, no corrections to be found. Anything that teaches people the love of the Lord is a very good thing :-)
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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I like this very much including the "He knows your pain" part; appreciate the author notes at the bottom too; well done, no corrections to be found. Anything that teaches people the love of the Lord is a very good thing :-)
Comment Written 14-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much. I really appreciate your review.
Hugs,
Jan
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You are very welcome for the review; blessings on your night (or day) Tricia
Comment from AlvinTEthington
A moving poignant work. The "snapshot" quality of the work gives it a surreal feel, which is nice to experience in a devotional work. To intertwine these kind of vignettes, which mix humanity, fauna, and the divine, is extremely hard to do, for usually the flow is choppy. It isn't here, however; there's almost a seamless quality to the flow. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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A moving poignant work. The "snapshot" quality of the work gives it a surreal feel, which is nice to experience in a devotional work. To intertwine these kind of vignettes, which mix humanity, fauna, and the divine, is extremely hard to do, for usually the flow is choppy. It isn't here, however; there's almost a seamless quality to the flow. Excellent work.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much. I really appreciate your comments, because you are a published author who knows what he is talking about! Many thanks.
Jan
Comment from Ginny
As I read this piece, I thought that you could have ended with the story of the family of sparrows and the message would have gone home. Then I went on to the little boy and the line of insects and I enjoyed the parralel, especially the partnership with nature. I have to say that I found the rest - however beautiful and uplifting, a little too much and I do believe that this piece of fiction would have more impact if it ended with the story of the little boy. Alternatively, each scene could perhaps have been shortened, but that would have been a pity. I think that I prefer my first idea - purely personal of course. The five stars are because it is all beautiful and uplifting. Thank you.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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As I read this piece, I thought that you could have ended with the story of the family of sparrows and the message would have gone home. Then I went on to the little boy and the line of insects and I enjoyed the parralel, especially the partnership with nature. I have to say that I found the rest - however beautiful and uplifting, a little too much and I do believe that this piece of fiction would have more impact if it ended with the story of the little boy. Alternatively, each scene could perhaps have been shortened, but that would have been a pity. I think that I prefer my first idea - purely personal of course. The five stars are because it is all beautiful and uplifting. Thank you.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much, Ginny. I thought about doing that, but for some reason, it just went together the way it did. I really appreciate the review.
Jan
Comment from skye
I do not feel any changes are needed, as this one is so beautifully written, with great attention to detail, to the scenes, to the ultimate showing how our Savior watches out for everyone on this earth, from smallest to largest needes.
Very well done.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2008
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I do not feel any changes are needed, as this one is so beautifully written, with great attention to detail, to the scenes, to the ultimate showing how our Savior watches out for everyone on this earth, from smallest to largest needes.
Very well done.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review. It is much appreciated. :-)
Jan
Comment from Solrac
There is so much love in this story that you can feel it and taste it. Jesus was behind you guiding your hand when you wrote this story. Although some people would tell you to correct some grammatical mistakes. Don't. How can you change what the lord told you to write?
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2008
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There is so much love in this story that you can feel it and taste it. Jesus was behind you guiding your hand when you wrote this story. Although some people would tell you to correct some grammatical mistakes. Don't. How can you change what the lord told you to write?
Comment Written 14-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review. It is much appreciated. :-)
Jan
Comment from Perp Ihebom
THIS IS A BEAUTIFUL AND THOUGHT-PROVOKING CREATIVE WAY OF PREACHING AN AGE-OLD MESSAGE OF HOPE TO A DESPAIRING WORLD . THE WRITE-UP IS PRESENTED IN POETIC DICTION, WHICH MAKES IT A PLEASURE TO READ. I ENJOYED READING IT. THANKS.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2008
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THIS IS A BEAUTIFUL AND THOUGHT-PROVOKING CREATIVE WAY OF PREACHING AN AGE-OLD MESSAGE OF HOPE TO A DESPAIRING WORLD . THE WRITE-UP IS PRESENTED IN POETIC DICTION, WHICH MAKES IT A PLEASURE TO READ. I ENJOYED READING IT. THANKS.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review. It is much appreciated. :-)
Jan
Comment from Nescher Pyscher
"Light lit in the darkness, no matter how feeble, shine the brightest."
it was beautiful, Jani. It spoke directly to my soul.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2008
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"Light lit in the darkness, no matter how feeble, shine the brightest."
it was beautiful, Jani. It spoke directly to my soul.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2008
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This is an honor. Wow. I don't know what to say, but thank you. I am blessed to know it blessed you.
Jan
