The Meeting
Scary Fiction29 total reviews
Comment from hedcas
I dont generally like diliberate preaching but i do very much like the word sheeple. And, it is true that the fat-cats are the one who really run the sho wand rape the masses!
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2008
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I dont generally like diliberate preaching but i do very much like the word sheeple. And, it is true that the fat-cats are the one who really run the sho wand rape the masses!
Comment Written 27-Dec-2008
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2008
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Thank you for reading and leaving a review. ZeeZee
Comment from maxer
Great!
I could just see Pallin serving the drinks dressed in a leather miniskirt.
I love the way you've done this, quite imaginative, ALTHOUGH I'm nearly convinced this does exist.
Fight the Power! Okay that was kinda gay, but you get my meaning.
Thanks for this, it gives me hope that we can change as a people and stand-up to those cigar sucking psycho's. Let us hope the naive can be educated to the reality of things.
Maxer
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2008
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Great!
I could just see Pallin serving the drinks dressed in a leather miniskirt.
I love the way you've done this, quite imaginative, ALTHOUGH I'm nearly convinced this does exist.
Fight the Power! Okay that was kinda gay, but you get my meaning.
Thanks for this, it gives me hope that we can change as a people and stand-up to those cigar sucking psycho's. Let us hope the naive can be educated to the reality of things.
Maxer
Comment Written 28-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2008
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Why thank you kind sir. I am trying now to come up with something to write as icky as your recent post. I don't think I can get the icky though. Maybe you could tell me what you wanted to write that your wife nixed.. ha ha.
Thanks for reading this story.. it may very well be true, and that is scary enough. Thanks hon. ZeeZee
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Well, I had good 'ole dad hooking up a webcam and doing some nasty shit online for a few extra bucks. That seems right up your alley.
Their was also some poopy stuff...
I really tried to put myself in the place of someone who has zero self restraint or morals.
I like the idea of a parent who crosses the line because I'm such the opposite of that. I'm soo over protective of my kids, so I thought what if I just let them do their own thing... no rules, no line. FUN!
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Poopy .... ewwww...ZeeZee does not do poopy.. ewwwww.... lmao
I just ran into Watts in the T-Minus story. No wonder he is such a creep, he's dead. lol.. you are too good honey. ZeeZee
Comment from RenieReader
Oh, my stars, Zeezee, this is a remarkable piece that is so close to the truth, it is truly frightening. I don't think your imagination is OVERactive at all, unfortunately. You have a remarkable talent. Thanks for sharing it with us.
Renie
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2008
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Oh, my stars, Zeezee, this is a remarkable piece that is so close to the truth, it is truly frightening. I don't think your imagination is OVERactive at all, unfortunately. You have a remarkable talent. Thanks for sharing it with us.
Renie
Comment Written 04-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2008
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Thank you, Renie. I appreciate your reading and leaving the such a generous review. ZeeZee
Comment from cherry_rose
A somewhat scary scenario...I have to hope that you are way off the mark...but what if you aren't. Very well written and presented. This was an enjoyable if frightening read.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2008
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A somewhat scary scenario...I have to hope that you are way off the mark...but what if you aren't. Very well written and presented. This was an enjoyable if frightening read.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2008
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Very scary scenario, Cherry_rose. I certainly hope this is pure fiction. Thank you for reading and commenting. ZeeZee
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The funny...or maybe not so funny...thing is that this reminded me a little bit of the story I am currently working on which is the idea of America falling from within with the help of a powerful, secret organization. I don't like to think such a thing exists, but rumors have floated up throughout history that such an organization does exist. For the sake of the world and especially of our nation, I truly hope no such thing does exist
Comment from chaswriter
ZeeZee - I guess you heard that the bailout bill got passed and signed into law today. They added $150 billion of earmarks to get the reluctant congressmen to turn their votes. Unbelievable. I enjoyed your essay. Charlie.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2008
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ZeeZee - I guess you heard that the bailout bill got passed and signed into law today. They added $150 billion of earmarks to get the reluctant congressmen to turn their votes. Unbelievable. I enjoyed your essay. Charlie.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2008
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Hi Charlie, I saw that the bill was passed. Good grief.. what next? Thanks for reading and leaving a comment. ZeeZee
Comment from pitmanette
Yeeep! I don't want to be a sheeple! Very nicely done. I can find no mistakes in your writing and I enjoyed the selection with hopes that it turns out to be fiction and not fact. Hope that you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2008
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Yeeep! I don't want to be a sheeple! Very nicely done. I can find no mistakes in your writing and I enjoyed the selection with hopes that it turns out to be fiction and not fact. Hope that you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2008
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2008
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Thank you so much for reading and leaving the generous review. I appreciate it. ZeeZee
Comment from ledford
Wow! Powerful!
I have never heard of sheeple. I thought it was a combined term and when I looked it up, in my slang dictionary, sure enough that's what it was;-) Great term for this story.
Just a couple nits:
that was and closed-door handshakes abound. ... to stay in the same tense, I recommend "abounded"
A regal photo moment, but no cameras allowed. ... I recommend "were allowed"
Then {,} together, they smashed their chalises
Love your creativity!
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2008
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Wow! Powerful!
I have never heard of sheeple. I thought it was a combined term and when I looked it up, in my slang dictionary, sure enough that's what it was;-) Great term for this story.
Just a couple nits:
that was and closed-door handshakes abound. ... to stay in the same tense, I recommend "abounded"
A regal photo moment, but no cameras allowed. ... I recommend "were allowed"
Then {,} together, they smashed their chalises
Love your creativity!
Comment Written 25-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2008
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Thanks Ledford, I made note of the problems and will fix them. Your attention to detail is much appreciated. ZeeZee
Comment from Jonesy
Ah yes, the illuminati, an oft-feared group of super dudes who secretly rule the world.
It is scary to think of it, although some feel that type of coven does exist, never mind this kind of conspiracy has been around for hundreds of years without any real shred of proof to support it.
That doesn't change the impact of this story though, which would most certainly fall under horror if it were true.
The only reason I gave a four was a few too many SPAG-related problems in such a short story.
***all; or at least for themselves.*** Don't think a semi-colon is the way to go because what follows is not an independant thought, it relies on what comes before it to give it meaning
***Calls were made, players played, and closed-door handshakes abound***
The "handshakes abound" doesn't fit the parallel structure of the past tense writing that precedes it
***The meeting place, a viper's den surrounded by hornets, no nest needed, as they gathered in plain view of each other.***
Not sure what you're saying here, the "no nest needed" doesn't seem to fit
***sheeple. *** Nice!
***Corporations *** Not a proper noun so should not be capped
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reply by the author on 25-Sep-2008
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Ah yes, the illuminati, an oft-feared group of super dudes who secretly rule the world.
It is scary to think of it, although some feel that type of coven does exist, never mind this kind of conspiracy has been around for hundreds of years without any real shred of proof to support it.
That doesn't change the impact of this story though, which would most certainly fall under horror if it were true.
The only reason I gave a four was a few too many SPAG-related problems in such a short story.
***all; or at least for themselves.*** Don't think a semi-colon is the way to go because what follows is not an independant thought, it relies on what comes before it to give it meaning
***Calls were made, players played, and closed-door handshakes abound***
The "handshakes abound" doesn't fit the parallel structure of the past tense writing that precedes it
***The meeting place, a viper's den surrounded by hornets, no nest needed, as they gathered in plain view of each other.***
Not sure what you're saying here, the "no nest needed" doesn't seem to fit
***sheeple. *** Nice!
***Corporations *** Not a proper noun so should not be capped
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2008
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Thanks much Jonesy. I will copy your suggestions and go over them. Much thanks for the help. ZeeZee
Comment from IndianaIrish
You are so clever, ZZ!! I love your writing and I'm so glad you're here on FS sharing your work. How lucky we are. This product of your imagination is waaaaaay believable and I bet Camp David has a pack of them dudes at a meeting as we write. LOL Congratulations on this great story, Zee.
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2008
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You are so clever, ZZ!! I love your writing and I'm so glad you're here on FS sharing your work. How lucky we are. This product of your imagination is waaaaaay believable and I bet Camp David has a pack of them dudes at a meeting as we write. LOL Congratulations on this great story, Zee.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 25-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2008
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Thank you dear. My serious side. ZeeZee
Comment from earthlybeing
Well I have read much on this type of theory and it is very scary to think of all that goes on that we never get to know. After all war is a money making machine and man is greedy. Well written and deeply thought out. Thanks, Jeanette
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2008
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Well I have read much on this type of theory and it is very scary to think of all that goes on that we never get to know. After all war is a money making machine and man is greedy. Well written and deeply thought out. Thanks, Jeanette
Comment Written 24-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2008
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Thank you Jeanette. I am weary of this. I need a rest from reality. Thanks for reading. ZeeZee
