The Sonnet Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Emerald Abyss "a poetic collage of my sonnets
201 total reviews
Comment from Gloria ....
This is a lovely sonnet, Yelena. Excellent metre and rhyme and most importantly sumptuous atmosphere.
It is very difficult to see with an ultra-light grey type on a white background. Is there a way you can edit your type to black?
I can see why you earned the Seal. Thank you for sharing.
Gloria
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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This is a lovely sonnet, Yelena. Excellent metre and rhyme and most importantly sumptuous atmosphere.
It is very difficult to see with an ultra-light grey type on a white background. Is there a way you can edit your type to black?
I can see why you earned the Seal. Thank you for sharing.
Gloria
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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Thank you so much for the great review, Gloria. I was playing with colors yesterday - I should have left it the way it was. Well, I changed the color scheme again, hopefully it's better.
Comment from Douglas Goff
Either this is hard to see or my eyes have taken a &)&%#*^%!
The words and flow are excellent. I can see why this earned a deal of quality. Nice job!
D
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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Either this is hard to see or my eyes have taken a &)&%#*^%!
The words and flow are excellent. I can see why this earned a deal of quality. Nice job!
D
Comment Written 20-Apr-2023
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2023
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Thank you for the great review. I changed the color scheme - hopefully it's clearer now.
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I just checked it. Very nice!
Comment from greyson ernst
this is mad this is most likely the best poem i have ever seen i have no suggestion you deserve every review and as always keep writing and stay safe have a happy holiday
sincerely Greyson Ernst
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2020
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this is mad this is most likely the best poem i have ever seen i have no suggestion you deserve every review and as always keep writing and stay safe have a happy holiday
sincerely Greyson Ernst
Comment Written 13-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2020
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Thank you very much.
Comment from greyson ernst
this is mad this is most likely the best poem i have ever seen i have no suggestion you deserve every review and as always keep writing and stay safe have a happy holiday
sincerely Greyson Ernst
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2020
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this is mad this is most likely the best poem i have ever seen i have no suggestion you deserve every review and as always keep writing and stay safe have a happy holiday
sincerely Greyson Ernst
Comment Written 13-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for the great review, Greyson. I am glad that you liked my sonnet.
Comment from karenina
Lovely as ever! Few can compare to your natural rhyming and meter... I've known that for over a decade! Easy to see why you'd share this one with us again...it's one of your classics!--Karenina
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2020
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Lovely as ever! Few can compare to your natural rhyming and meter... I've known that for over a decade! Easy to see why you'd share this one with us again...it's one of your classics!--Karenina
Comment Written 12-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2020
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Thanks for the great review, Karen. This is one of my own favorites.
Comment from catch22
Hi Y, this is a very lovely and the subject is fitting for the sonnet form. I thought the iambic meter was well done, except for the following line read a little bit forced with respect to the stresses:
Lifegiving dew I craved, but there was none,
I think the first word threw me off because it incorporates a spondee that I normally stress in the first syllable, but that could be an accenting issue.
Regardless, you have some very pleasant imagery and phrasing in this write.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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Hi Y, this is a very lovely and the subject is fitting for the sonnet form. I thought the iambic meter was well done, except for the following line read a little bit forced with respect to the stresses:
Lifegiving dew I craved, but there was none,
I think the first word threw me off because it incorporates a spondee that I normally stress in the first syllable, but that could be an accenting issue.
Regardless, you have some very pleasant imagery and phrasing in this write.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the great review, Catch. I'll ponder over that line you brought up.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine sonnet about this amazing scene and I loved the use of emerald and opal to draw us into this gem of a write. The flow is superb and your well chosen words left me with a yearning to get out into the country, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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A fine sonnet about this amazing scene and I loved the use of emerald and opal to draw us into this gem of a write. The flow is superb and your well chosen words left me with a yearning to get out into the country, love Dolly x
Comment Written 11-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the great review.
Comment from royowen
A beautifully written sonnet with the penultimate line with 9 syllables, but beautifully written, with image projection captivatingly lovely with a very lovely flow, and with deft timing and smooth delivery, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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A beautifully written sonnet with the penultimate line with 9 syllables, but beautifully written, with image projection captivatingly lovely with a very lovely flow, and with deft timing and smooth delivery, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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Thank you very much, Roy, for the great review and feedback.
My penultimate line is 10 syllables I don't know why you thought otherwise
I travelled endlessly in search of light - 10 sylls
A seaman, lost at sea, I sought my pier - 10 sylls
My friends, black raven and a starless night - 10 sylls
To them alone did I confine my fear - 10 sylls
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No big deal, you are normally very meticulous, I did count three times,
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So you agree that the line in question is 10 syllables?
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If it means so much to you...yes. I fall short, sometimes, but I will never grieve over it.
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Remember, my concern remains with you, not for myself.
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Thanks. Have a great holiday!
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This sonnet is part of the Seal of quality submission to the committee. I remember, they were very tough on me, and something like a line with not enough iambic syllables they would eat alive (lol). I got a seal from a second try - they got back to me with lots and lots of suggestions for improvements which including weeding out some sonnets, but said I was "very close". I resubmitted in two weeks and got the seal approved.
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I?m sure they were tough, Please don?t think I think less of you because of a mistaken count, I have no desire to attract your ire or disapproval, you don?t have to prove anything to me. I?ve never attempted to present a poem to them, nor will I, but well done, you don?t need to prove anything to me. I approve of you anyway, Roy
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You too.
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Roy, I think your poetry is excellent and deserves the Seal of Quality. Why don't you submit it? It has a very good chance.
Comment from djsaxon
True to form. A very gentle journey. I did not see any real volta in the write. It just seemed like a through line of thought, albeit rich in imagery.
"Lifegiving dew I craved, but there was none,
I longed for winter, but there was no snow."
Why the double 'but'?
I tried but could not get lost on this. Sorry. It ultimately felt clever pen contrived - DJ
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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True to form. A very gentle journey. I did not see any real volta in the write. It just seemed like a through line of thought, albeit rich in imagery.
"Lifegiving dew I craved, but there was none,
I longed for winter, but there was no snow."
Why the double 'but'?
I tried but could not get lost on this. Sorry. It ultimately felt clever pen contrived - DJ
Comment Written 11-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the review and feedback. The seal of quality committee must given the green light for those two 2 "but's" (lol)
Happy Holidays!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written sonnet about the dreams of an emerald abyss where we can get lost in its beauty as far as the eyes can see. We cannot get tired of looking at nature's bliss.
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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A very well-written sonnet about the dreams of an emerald abyss where we can get lost in its beauty as far as the eyes can see. We cannot get tired of looking at nature's bliss.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2020
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Thank you for the great review.
