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Hallowseduction

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Comment from darkgreennights
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Gosh, please no apologies needed, That poem rocked, sexy scary, a ton of fun. I was also very interested to note that Absinthe is now legal in the United States, this is most useful information, as if Sarah Palin becomes our next president we will all need a ton of it lol

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2008


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2008
    I'll eat that hockey stick! lol I have the perfect image of her and the button will become known as her mood. I spent some time in Cimarron.

    Thank you very much for your compliments and this reivew. Mike
reply by darkgreennights on 08-Sep-2008
    thanks again your reply made me laugh out loud a sympatico thinker is nice to find these days
Comment from charliecheshire
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i really liked this and I am glad that you posted it. great form and good flow. A story that I would have liked to have gone on further. Really interesting.
All the best
Charlie Chehsire
The Cheese People

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2008


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2008
    I thank you very much for your review and the compliments. I couldn't help but check out your profile. My freezer would scare Homeland Security. I have tried my had at making cheese, but it is a tough enterprise.

    I am satisified with the poem. Perhaps I will go further with age. lol Again thanks.
Comment from Perp Ihebom
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I regard this as a good poem. The author was able to describe vividly the sex act between two lovers, which is a natural phenomenon. Rendering the process in a poem makes it more enchanting. good rhymes.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2008


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2008
    Thank you very much for both the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from mmichelle97219
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You have a good story, but for me the rhyme seems forced and the meter unnatural. The meter stuck in places and moved too fast in others. Just my opinion.
Michelle

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 Comment Written 08-Sep-2008


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2008
    I don't recall seeing you reviewing my poems too often. As a general rule I write freestyle, incorperating meaning in with the imagery. I do use a lose rhyme with some form to keep things flowing and coheasive. One point of problem with this one is with the heart beat, I couldn't hold a form of equally spacing the, "Beat!" because the editor removed the spaces and micelanious characters would look silly. All I really expect from each member is an unbiased, honest review. I believe that you have given me that. I thank you for taking the time to review this poem. Mike
Comment from Judian James
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Halloween erotica. Now there's a first! You never cease to amaze me Mike, and most times, I think your author's notes must take longer to put together than your actual poem! Very interesting piece. "Her sweat makes a conductor of sound,
allowing him her heartbeat to be found" interesting Mike!


 Comment Written 08-Sep-2008


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2008
    Wait until ThanksGIVING, lol. No I don't have plans, but many a holiday erotica book will fill the voids in people's lives. In this case, the notes took about half of the time. Many members enjoy seeing the thoughts that go behind the poem or the clarifications. The Absinthe artical was basically a cut and paste for the Wiki. The notes for Martyr, Congrats! We Now Want A Piece and Ex-Prime Minister took substancial time, far more then the poem because of the research that was involved.

    I have found more uses for a woman's sweat then imagineable. I didn't want to go over the top in describing the image in my mind, so I thought is best to indicate the condition afterwards and I figured anway, that people can use their own imagination. I use it for my poem, "Champaign and Cavier." "Her sweat, his Champaign. Her laughter, it's bubbly" No need to explain Cavier. It is amazing the hoops that I jump through my mind not to have to describe something. lol
    Thank you very much for the compliments, sharing with me your favorite and this review. Have a great day, too. Mike
Comment from lathunder
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I think as writer's we should show our many different sides. That's what makes us writer's. I thought this poem was great. Again you showcased your talent. :) All of us at some point will write things that shock the reader. But that's what keeps them guessing. :) And hopefully coming back for more.

L.A.Thunder

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2008


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2008
    I love this review! I have not only used sexuality, religious belief, but plan to use race as a sort of shock, to draw the reader into the deeper more serious meaning of the poem. I feel that I have found a certain balance between this shock and going to far and turning the reader off of my poems. Thank you so much for your compliments and this review. Mike K2
reply by lathunder on 08-Sep-2008
    I'm glad. The writing world can be brutal sometimes, but at other times, it's a lot of fun.

    L.A.Thunder
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
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Very scary indeed. A wonderfully good read for me. Enjoy pieces that touch on fantasy and darkness. This did it. Hugs and smiles, Susanne

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2008


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2008
    Wow! Thank you very much for the compliments and this review.
    Hugs, Mike
Comment from Terror2s
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The note on absinthe was interesting. I enjoyed your poem and thought your rhyme scheme work well and was unforced. The ending was wonderful. Good luck in the contest. Terror

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2008


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2008
    Thank you very much for your best wishes, the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from Hitcher
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Two of your poems in one sitting Mike, I am the lucky one. I'm going to step out of the shadows and say that this one is my favorite of the two. I like a bit of spice with my herbs so to speak. You move around in some strange circles friend. You have got me wanting to try Absinthe now though and I don't know if that is a good thing or a bad one. I'll keep you informed.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2008


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2008
    Now AI have something to balance out the complaint a while ago about a member having to read two, back to back. lol I would never encourage or discorage someone from trying Absinthe, it is a very interesting liqour. At this time since it has recently been legalized for the US, it might be hard to find. My bottle lastes about five months as I decided to use it sparingly. I got a kick out of walking in strange circles. People tell me this, but I am pretty much a straight shooter. Thank you very much for the compliments and this review, I really enjoyed this one.
    Mike
Comment from Scarlettdreams
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How very interesting. A vampire love story. It is a little creepy, but not too creepy for us not to want more. LOL Very well done. Bravo Bravo

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2008


reply by the author on 07-Sep-2008
    Wow! Thank you very much, I just wanted to cover the vampiress from the male perspective. Thank you very much for your compliments and this review. Mike