Do No Harm
For anyone who has contemplated self-harm43 total reviews
Comment from chaswriter
Very nicely written. I have several people who had suicidal tendencies in the past and your poem has reminded me of those people. Good rhyme and great rhythm. Thanks for sharing. Charlie.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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Very nicely written. I have several people who had suicidal tendencies in the past and your poem has reminded me of those people. Good rhyme and great rhythm. Thanks for sharing. Charlie.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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thanks, Charlie. I'm dealing with a few with the tendencies right now; but I've also suffered the loss of those who've completed the task. love, jan
Comment from Fleedleflump
I think there's often a romantic feeling associated with suicude, and a definite "I'll show them" attitude. I liked your poem very much!
Fleedleflump
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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I think there's often a romantic feeling associated with suicude, and a definite "I'll show them" attitude. I liked your poem very much!
Fleedleflump
Comment Written 27-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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You know, I think you are right, Fleedleflump. It's one way to get the last word, for sure. thanks for sharing. love, jan
Comment from LadyMary
There is a sense of fearing for someone's thoughts of suicide. The required words are utilized in what appears to be an unforced manner. Well done. LadyMary
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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There is a sense of fearing for someone's thoughts of suicide. The required words are utilized in what appears to be an unforced manner. Well done. LadyMary
Comment Written 26-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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thanks, LadyMary. love, jan
Comment from bard owl
Suicide is sad, but it is also sometimes a very selfish act that causes irrepairable pain and suffering to those left behind. I know the suicidal mind is not functioning properly - at least not in sync with the heart and soul. This poem is an excellent plea of hope to those whose depression has driven them to the edge. Excellent emotional imagery in this one. Blessings, Linda
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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Suicide is sad, but it is also sometimes a very selfish act that causes irrepairable pain and suffering to those left behind. I know the suicidal mind is not functioning properly - at least not in sync with the heart and soul. This poem is an excellent plea of hope to those whose depression has driven them to the edge. Excellent emotional imagery in this one. Blessings, Linda
Comment Written 26-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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Linda, I appreciate your input. I agree so much with the suicidal mind not functioning in sync with the heart and soul. love, jan
Comment from LynnRadford
Jan,
You have once again managed to make me think.
You poem seems to be quite different than other enries I hav eread for this contest. That yours stands out is indeed a good thing.
I think that you have a fine entry here and I wish you the very best of luck in the contest.
Lynn
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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Jan,
You have once again managed to make me think.
You poem seems to be quite different than other enries I hav eread for this contest. That yours stands out is indeed a good thing.
I think that you have a fine entry here and I wish you the very best of luck in the contest.
Lynn
Comment Written 26-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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thanks, Lynn. I have this thing about wanting to be a little different than others although I rarely read other entries until I do my own. love, jan
Comment from Soloneili
Seems like you did a really fine job here. It's often easy enough to use word lists but placing them to form a very good poem is quite another. I feel yours is strong and rounded. I too have friends who have done this and I feel so incredibly sad about it too.
If only.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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Seems like you did a really fine job here. It's often easy enough to use word lists but placing them to form a very good poem is quite another. I feel yours is strong and rounded. I too have friends who have done this and I feel so incredibly sad about it too.
If only.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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If only is exactly right, Soloneili. If this prevents just one, it would make all my writings worthwhile. love, jan
Comment from MercyWrites
Your poem flow naturally and had a good pace about a
difficult subject. I think most people know at least one
person who thought they couldn't go on and decide to
end it. I know of one person who tried several times before
she got it right. I never knew she was in so much pain and I
didn't know about the her attempts. Her mother told a friend
about the other attempts. If she had only turned her life over
to God, I know what he has done for me. He would have done the same for her.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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Your poem flow naturally and had a good pace about a
difficult subject. I think most people know at least one
person who thought they couldn't go on and decide to
end it. I know of one person who tried several times before
she got it right. I never knew she was in so much pain and I
didn't know about the her attempts. Her mother told a friend
about the other attempts. If she had only turned her life over
to God, I know what he has done for me. He would have done the same for her.
Comment Written 26-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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yes, He will do the same for each of us, MercyWrites. thanks. love, jan
Comment from kassey
Great entry for the contest for which I have also entered a poem. I have to say yours is better than my submission, it read as from the point of one who really knew the pain and suffering behind this terrible affliction. Excellent poem Kay
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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Great entry for the contest for which I have also entered a poem. I have to say yours is better than my submission, it read as from the point of one who really knew the pain and suffering behind this terrible affliction. Excellent poem Kay
Comment Written 26-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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Kay, I'm not embarrassed tp say I've been dangerously close to crossing the line which gives me a different insight than some. I always try to remember the extreme pain I've felt when someone I love has done the same. love, jan
Comment from Twomoon
jan, a beautifully written poem for the contest, that embraces a powerful message with passion and your touch of compassion, along with rhyme, wow..your words were easy and flowed with your gentle yet strong impact..hoping your message helps others..much love twomoon
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jan, a beautifully written poem for the contest, that embraces a powerful message with passion and your touch of compassion, along with rhyme, wow..your words were easy and flowed with your gentle yet strong impact..hoping your message helps others..much love twomoon
Comment Written 26-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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thanks, Twomoon. I hope you're having a wonderful trip. Sorry I missed you when I was in Wisconsin/Illinois recently. love, jan
Comment from Mirrorwall
You have created an excellent poem for the contest
Your words are a great advice and they makes the reader to think twice
Well done
Apt Picture too
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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You have created an excellent poem for the contest
Your words are a great advice and they makes the reader to think twice
Well done
Apt Picture too
Comment Written 26-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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thanks, Mirrorwall. love, jan
