Ridding Yourself of Demons
Viewing comments for Chapter 26 "The Plan"A man summons a demon but gets more than he wanted
3 total reviews
Comment from mmichelle97219
Sounds like a good plan, and I am eager to hear more. You have got quite an imagination, my friend, and am so glad you decided to develope this more. Excellent post.
Michelle
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2008
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Sounds like a good plan, and I am eager to hear more. You have got quite an imagination, my friend, and am so glad you decided to develope this more. Excellent post.
Michelle
Comment Written 18-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2008
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Wait till the next chapter. It may not be such a good plan after all. I'm glad you have had the stamina to read this much.
Thanks for the review
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Well you have had me hooked from the initial short story.
Michelle
Comment from Blue Crystal
wonderfully written, I will have to look up the first bit of the story so I fully understand what is going on, I like the way you
strung the words into a very promising story, great work, I will look forward to reading more,
Blue
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2008
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wonderfully written, I will have to look up the first bit of the story so I fully understand what is going on, I like the way you
strung the words into a very promising story, great work, I will look forward to reading more,
Blue
Comment Written 18-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2008
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You're very kind. I guess all story-telling is stringing words together. I'm impressed you have any idea at all what's going on, jumping in at this point, but I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from ledford
Good chapter!
Just a few suggestions:
"does is eat {.} people and ice-" ... punctuation nit
"She stopped and glared at Paul. Then she nodded and swept the hair out of her eyes." ... I recommend doing away with some pronouns and not repeating Paul since it is obvious she is looking at him ... "She stopped and glared at him, then nodded and swept the hair out of her eyes."
"Everything is a contest to see who can piss up the wall the highest." ... I recommend "the highest up the wall"
Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2008
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Good chapter!
Just a few suggestions:
"does is eat {.} people and ice-" ... punctuation nit
"She stopped and glared at Paul. Then she nodded and swept the hair out of her eyes." ... I recommend doing away with some pronouns and not repeating Paul since it is obvious she is looking at him ... "She stopped and glared at him, then nodded and swept the hair out of her eyes."
"Everything is a contest to see who can piss up the wall the highest." ... I recommend "the highest up the wall"
Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 18-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2008
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Thanks for your review. Glad you liked it.
