A Woman Scorned
Patterned after The Midnight Ride of Paul Revere25 total reviews
Comment from Kit Minden
Awful pattern to follow!! Yikes! Still, it's lots of fun - I like when it finally gets rolling in the third verse, of course. Paul Revere is kind of like that too - some parts flow smoothly on first reading and some take a second read to get the rhythm going. Your poem does work, you succeeded at this tough goal!
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2008
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Awful pattern to follow!! Yikes! Still, it's lots of fun - I like when it finally gets rolling in the third verse, of course. Paul Revere is kind of like that too - some parts flow smoothly on first reading and some take a second read to get the rhythm going. Your poem does work, you succeeded at this tough goal!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2008
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Thanks, Kit. I'm trying to figure out why I even selected that particular poem but then I was too stubborn to back down. love, jan
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It was ingrained. Parents started reading that poem to us before we even started school, teachers read it every year as if it were factual, we had no choice. It is permanently embedded in the rhythms of our minds, never to leave us... the most common last request? perhaps.. no one tells because it is so perplexing...
all right - I'll shut up now...
Comment from jdelizondo
I enjoyed this poem, mainly due to its light verse juxtaposed with its heavy content. The woman's scorn comes across as somewhat comical somewhat maniacal, with a kind of Cruella Deville type feel to it. With such dark content as anger and murder, I think you paired it remarkably well in a kind of cartoonish verse. Fun and enjoyable, good job!
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2008
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I enjoyed this poem, mainly due to its light verse juxtaposed with its heavy content. The woman's scorn comes across as somewhat comical somewhat maniacal, with a kind of Cruella Deville type feel to it. With such dark content as anger and murder, I think you paired it remarkably well in a kind of cartoonish verse. Fun and enjoyable, good job!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2008
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jdelizondo, what a review. thanks. love, jan
Comment from ccarp
Good imitation of Longfellow.
The rhythm of the Midnight Ride was keeping time as I read. I'm sure I couldn't do this.
Very different poem from the others I've read for this contest.
good luck.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2008
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Good imitation of Longfellow.
The rhythm of the Midnight Ride was keeping time as I read. I'm sure I couldn't do this.
Very different poem from the others I've read for this contest.
good luck.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2008
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thanks, ccarp. I had a copy while I did this to keep me straight. love, jan
Comment from SweetDreamer
Wow! Your poem rocks!!! You could feel her anger and her satisfaction of sweet revenge. I look forward to reading more of your poems.
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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2008
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Wow! Your poem rocks!!! You could feel her anger and her satisfaction of sweet revenge. I look forward to reading more of your poems.
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Comment Written 09-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2008
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Thanks, ToPonderOn. I appreciate this wonderful review. Love, jan
Comment from Paradox Tremors
Just goes to show you should never tempt the rage of a scorned woman. He got what he deserves I'm sure and she her money back; why bothering to report his death, away he ran and away she left him -- a good write my friend; ah, but is it really fiction? (LOL) I hear tale of a woman's scorn who...
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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2008
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Just goes to show you should never tempt the rage of a scorned woman. He got what he deserves I'm sure and she her money back; why bothering to report his death, away he ran and away she left him -- a good write my friend; ah, but is it really fiction? (LOL) I hear tale of a woman's scorn who...
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Comment Written 09-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2008
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Paradox Tremors, I'll never tell, however, my husband is down the hall asleep as I type. thanks for the kind review. love, jan
