Summer Dresses
Enjoying a downtime mood.70 total reviews
Comment from Bryana
Hi my friend, I believe we need those dresses now that the weather is so beautiful.
You've written a cute little poem about summer clothing. Very clever of you.
(My computer is broken I hope to have it going soon)
Good luck in the contest. Ana
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Hi my friend, I believe we need those dresses now that the weather is so beautiful.
You've written a cute little poem about summer clothing. Very clever of you.
(My computer is broken I hope to have it going soon)
Good luck in the contest. Ana
Comment Written 17-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Thank you Anita. Very beautiful weather, walking wearing a dress made me feel so special. That's from where the poem came from.
Comment from MercyWrites
I like the poem it made me think about some of
my own summer clothing. I especially like this lines
Women walk upright, shoulder high feeling pretty
swaying in the July's step. The poem had that
summer quality about it.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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I like the poem it made me think about some of
my own summer clothing. I especially like this lines
Women walk upright, shoulder high feeling pretty
swaying in the July's step. The poem had that
summer quality about it.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Thank you MercyWrites for the great summery comments.
Comment from RazberryBullet
You bring out a part of summer that I've lived yearly, but never thought of in this way. Summer clothes are freeing, even fanciful. You said it all with these words:
Joy therapy:
A whimsical summer dress.
:)
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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You bring out a part of summer that I've lived yearly, but never thought of in this way. Summer clothes are freeing, even fanciful. You said it all with these words:
Joy therapy:
A whimsical summer dress.
:)
Comment Written 16-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Thank you for the awesome review, dear RazberryBullet. Happy Summer:)
Comment from Kaze
Great summertime poem! I loved the imagery, it made me feel like I was sitting by a pool or on the beach tanning! Boy what would I give for that...
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2008
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Great summertime poem! I loved the imagery, it made me feel like I was sitting by a pool or on the beach tanning! Boy what would I give for that...
Comment Written 16-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2008
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Thank you Kaze for the great review.
Comment from wierdgrace
the poem is so much of the truth, how you could write such a simple story and it is so true. I enjoyed this so much. hope you keep writing it was awesome
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2008
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the poem is so much of the truth, how you could write such a simple story and it is so true. I enjoyed this so much. hope you keep writing it was awesome
Comment Written 16-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2008
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Thank you, wierdgrace, your comments are lovely.
Comment from Nuthatch
This is another lovely read for me today. It's a good poem that has potential, for sure.
My recommendations:
Those nifty summer dresses - delete "those"
Touch skin
With gentle soft petals. - with soft, gentle petals. (word order)
All glitter and glow - delete "all"
On sun-splashed days
Make a body flow.
Above or below bronzed knees
Staying cool
Keeping beat with the wind.
Above or below bronzed knees
women stay cool (or woman of all ages, something along those lines)
and keep beat with the wind
Women walk upright, shoulders high - "They" instead of women since I mentioned it above.
Feeling prettier
Swaying in July's steps - and sway in July's steps
I hope that helps.Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2008
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This is another lovely read for me today. It's a good poem that has potential, for sure.
My recommendations:
Those nifty summer dresses - delete "those"
Touch skin
With gentle soft petals. - with soft, gentle petals. (word order)
All glitter and glow - delete "all"
On sun-splashed days
Make a body flow.
Above or below bronzed knees
Staying cool
Keeping beat with the wind.
Above or below bronzed knees
women stay cool (or woman of all ages, something along those lines)
and keep beat with the wind
Women walk upright, shoulders high - "They" instead of women since I mentioned it above.
Feeling prettier
Swaying in July's steps - and sway in July's steps
I hope that helps.Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2008
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Thank you Nuthatch for the great review and the corrections.
Comment from Adam Smith
A very creative look at summertime via the clothing women don. There's something captivating about a summer dress (sun dress?) worn by the right woman at the right time. Nothing fresher, freer, more feminine. I loved the line "Swaying in July's steps"
Thanks for a terrific read. Adam
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2008
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A very creative look at summertime via the clothing women don. There's something captivating about a summer dress (sun dress?) worn by the right woman at the right time. Nothing fresher, freer, more feminine. I loved the line "Swaying in July's steps"
Thanks for a terrific read. Adam
Comment Written 16-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2008
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Thank you, Adam. I appreciate your great review.
Comment from Wiley
Joy therapy. Nice saying. I liked this piece. It was written well, no nasty spag, and it went well with the picture you provided. Good job. Wiley
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2008
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Joy therapy. Nice saying. I liked this piece. It was written well, no nasty spag, and it went well with the picture you provided. Good job. Wiley
Comment Written 16-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2008
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Thank you for stopping by and review this poetry, fellow writer Wiley.
Comment from fastdigits
A writing as fresh as a cool
summer breeze.
You paint a picture with your words
of summertime when pretty things
strut their stuff an look so alluring,
making the day so bright.
Well done
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2008
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A writing as fresh as a cool
summer breeze.
You paint a picture with your words
of summertime when pretty things
strut their stuff an look so alluring,
making the day so bright.
Well done
Comment Written 16-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2008
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Your comments are lovely, thank you, fastdigits.
Comment from lawriemac
This certainly brings summer to me.
A lovely poem which is very descriptive.
An enjoyable read.
A simple, lovely summer dress certainly beats the looks of all those pampered film stars.
A lovely, enjoyable poem.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2008
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This certainly brings summer to me.
A lovely poem which is very descriptive.
An enjoyable read.
A simple, lovely summer dress certainly beats the looks of all those pampered film stars.
A lovely, enjoyable poem.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2008
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Thank you for enjoying this poem, dear lawriemac.
