Disconnected Connectedness
Free Verse: Spoken silence30 total reviews
Comment from grassroots08
A very different sort of poem, iunlike most I have encountered and I have seen a few. Very good lines here, easily imagined. Thanks for the feelings you have projected. This was a winner. I most remember to try something like this some time. Cheers, Don
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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A very different sort of poem, iunlike most I have encountered and I have seen a few. Very good lines here, easily imagined. Thanks for the feelings you have projected. This was a winner. I most remember to try something like this some time. Cheers, Don
Comment Written 25-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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Hello Don! So pleased you stopped by and enjoyed my rambling offering! diane
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi Diane,
There is a lot of thought within this write. I like your formation. It gives just the right amount of pause needed. Maybe we should remain silent first and trust God to help us with the decision. I'd say the answer to your question lies within the individual and how much forgiveness they hold in their heart. Thank you for sharing the insight within this piece. God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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Hi Diane,
There is a lot of thought within this write. I like your formation. It gives just the right amount of pause needed. Maybe we should remain silent first and trust God to help us with the decision. I'd say the answer to your question lies within the individual and how much forgiveness they hold in their heart. Thank you for sharing the insight within this piece. God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
Comment Written 25-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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Hello Friend! You are correct when you say that there "is a lot of thought within this write." There are a number of things going on - the speaker's feelings, the perceived feelings of the individual to whom she is speaking, the stream of consciousness of the speaker, and the larger audience posing the question: Are there really times to remain silent? Ah well....thank you so much for your thoughtful review! diane
Comment from c_lucas
Yet, across the miles,
Upon a summer's sweet breeze,
A beautifully written poem. I ask myself what would be the results if left unattended. Words in ( ) are my interpretation of the results. Very good job.
In the soft whisper of the night wind,
I feel your sorrow, (Depression)
I embrace your grief,
And I pray that somehow,
In the midst of such indescribable despair, (manic depression)
You will find
Comfort, Strength, and Faith (SALVATION)
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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Yet, across the miles,
Upon a summer's sweet breeze,
A beautifully written poem. I ask myself what would be the results if left unattended. Words in ( ) are my interpretation of the results. Very good job.
In the soft whisper of the night wind,
I feel your sorrow, (Depression)
I embrace your grief,
And I pray that somehow,
In the midst of such indescribable despair, (manic depression)
You will find
Comfort, Strength, and Faith (SALVATION)
Comment Written 25-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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Hello! A very interesting interpretation! Thank you so much for your thoughtful review! diane
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You're welcome, Diane. Charlie
Comment from Kingsland
this poem has a lot of depth within its thoughts and phrases
and I liked the way you started this piece out
as it draws the reader in to see what more is there to be gained
this poem has it all going to correctness
to borrow a piece of your poem there
this was my pleasure to have read and reviewed it... John
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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this poem has a lot of depth within its thoughts and phrases
and I liked the way you started this piece out
as it draws the reader in to see what more is there to be gained
this poem has it all going to correctness
to borrow a piece of your poem there
this was my pleasure to have read and reviewed it... John
Comment Written 25-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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Hello John! Thank you for your thoughtful review. There are a number of levels to this offering; I am pleased you enjoyed it. diane
Comment from Judian James
Beautifully written, painful piece to bear. I would reach out subtley with a card, flowers or e-mail and see if you get any response. It sounds as if they're the ones who bear the guilt and this could be a very cathartic time for you both, plus you'll be helping someone in need with their burden.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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Beautifully written, painful piece to bear. I would reach out subtley with a card, flowers or e-mail and see if you get any response. It sounds as if they're the ones who bear the guilt and this could be a very cathartic time for you both, plus you'll be helping someone in need with their burden.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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Ah Friend, I can just see you saying these words - over a glass of wine - watching the sun set in Maine - and gently telling me the above!!!! Thank you so much for your thoughtful review!!! diane
Comment from auswag
A lovely poem yet again, Mrs. KT.
Often it is difficult to know ourselves, and knowing others is all the more impossible. Tragedy, mistakes, wrong turns; each has a price to pay and a burden to carry.
Sometimes for me, the road I plod is too wearysome and I buckle at the knees. The tears fall, and I wonder if my silence is the burden. Yet always some beautiful part of nature that surrounds us, makes an entrance to wash away the despair. Once more you have the sun shining and the wind in your face, so you can tackle the road again. The opposing feelings are unfathomable.
A poem that was easy to connect with, and beautiful expression.
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A lovely poem yet again, Mrs. KT.
Often it is difficult to know ourselves, and knowing others is all the more impossible. Tragedy, mistakes, wrong turns; each has a price to pay and a burden to carry.
Sometimes for me, the road I plod is too wearysome and I buckle at the knees. The tears fall, and I wonder if my silence is the burden. Yet always some beautiful part of nature that surrounds us, makes an entrance to wash away the despair. Once more you have the sun shining and the wind in your face, so you can tackle the road again. The opposing feelings are unfathomable.
A poem that was easy to connect with, and beautiful expression.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2008
Comment from Goinup
Hey Mrs. KT
That was very beautiful. A lovely message. It flowed very well. It was an easy read. You painted wonderful images with your words. I enjoyed it.
Have a nice week.
Goinup
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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Hey Mrs. KT
That was very beautiful. A lovely message. It flowed very well. It was an easy read. You painted wonderful images with your words. I enjoyed it.
Have a nice week.
Goinup
Comment Written 25-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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So pleased you stopped by. Thank you for your kind review. diane
Comment from Gypsymooncat
Mrs KT
A tough choice indeed. This rings true when I think of my own situation - it hasn't come to the "choice" stage this poem speaks of, but I know it will some day. As you say here, sometimes silence is the best course to take.
This was a cleverly written poem I thought. I like how you started off with those three lines, then ended with them again; a beaut way to open and close this. The whole poem was riveting, and although I'm not a huge fan of free verse, this one is amongst those I've read on here that are skilfully crafted and breathtaking in their content and impact.
Great work, and thank you for sharing this gem with us! xoxoxoxox
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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Mrs KT
A tough choice indeed. This rings true when I think of my own situation - it hasn't come to the "choice" stage this poem speaks of, but I know it will some day. As you say here, sometimes silence is the best course to take.
This was a cleverly written poem I thought. I like how you started off with those three lines, then ended with them again; a beaut way to open and close this. The whole poem was riveting, and although I'm not a huge fan of free verse, this one is amongst those I've read on here that are skilfully crafted and breathtaking in their content and impact.
Great work, and thank you for sharing this gem with us! xoxoxoxox
Comment Written 25-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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Hello! I was attempting to portray the duality between the two characters - and their individual circumstances revolving around their broken relationship. Thank you for stopping by and your kind review...diane
Comment from BarnCat
Wow, very interesting questions are raised by this poem, and the author's notes. Your poem has strength and conviction as well as some lovely imagery. I'll be thinking about this one for a while -- dilemmas are provoking. DBL
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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Wow, very interesting questions are raised by this poem, and the author's notes. Your poem has strength and conviction as well as some lovely imagery. I'll be thinking about this one for a while -- dilemmas are provoking. DBL
Comment Written 25-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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So plelased you enjoyed my offering! thank you! diane
Comment from RaymondJohn
My mother and my aunt didn't speak for years. They finally patched things up. Neither would be the first to call. It finally ended when mother answered when my aunt called me. You have a very poignant story, and tell it well. Best wishes. Ray
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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My mother and my aunt didn't speak for years. They finally patched things up. Neither would be the first to call. It finally ended when mother answered when my aunt called me. You have a very poignant story, and tell it well. Best wishes. Ray
Comment Written 24-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2008
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So pleased you could relate to this offering. Thank you for your kind review. diane
