Teardrops From Heaven.
A birthday message45 total reviews
Comment from Sue-z-Q
Hi Jan:
Lovely story, so tender and sweet. You write such dear things that always sound like they straight from your heart. Your love of God is conveyed eloquently in every word and gesture. Nicely done.
Sue-z-Q
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Hi Jan:
Lovely story, so tender and sweet. You write such dear things that always sound like they straight from your heart. Your love of God is conveyed eloquently in every word and gesture. Nicely done.
Sue-z-Q
Comment Written 17-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Bless your heart for saying such nice things! :-) I am so glad you liked this one.
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from Ginniegozali
hi janilou,
wish you a happy belated birthday!
it's such a story with a little stir in the end,
i thought.....
it's well done and nice story.
thanks for sharing.^^
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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hi janilou,
wish you a happy belated birthday!
it's such a story with a little stir in the end,
i thought.....
it's well done and nice story.
thanks for sharing.^^
Comment Written 17-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Thank you! :-) So glad you enjoyed this one!
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from sabee
Ah! Nice twist towards the end; at first I thought it was the daughter who had died (the sentence 'She's d...' misled me. Hahaha!) but in the end it's the mother who has passed away....
Didn't manage to find any errors :) Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Ah! Nice twist towards the end; at first I thought it was the daughter who had died (the sentence 'She's d...' misled me. Hahaha!) but in the end it's the mother who has passed away....
Didn't manage to find any errors :) Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Thank you! That was the intention. LOL Glad you enjoyed it. :-)
Jan
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Janilou :)
This is one of the most touching and sensitive stories I've ever read, Surely you can market it to one of the many women's magazines that publish short-shorts.
It would also fit religious magazines or a newspaper syndicate. It would be a nice seasonal piece for next Mother's Day.
There was no noticeable SPAG. I think it is ready for a query letter.Thank you for sharing.
Roger
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Hi Janilou :)
This is one of the most touching and sensitive stories I've ever read, Surely you can market it to one of the many women's magazines that publish short-shorts.
It would also fit religious magazines or a newspaper syndicate. It would be a nice seasonal piece for next Mother's Day.
There was no noticeable SPAG. I think it is ready for a query letter.Thank you for sharing.
Roger
Comment Written 17-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Thank you, Roger. I will see what I can do about marketing this one. Marketing is my weak point! That's for sure. So glad you liked it, and I am honored by the rating. Please forgive me for taking so long to respond.
Jan
Comment from Jewell McChesney
Happy Birthday Jan!! This is such a special story with a great little twist at the end. Oh, yes...the twist:
This line didn't seem right. As the reader, I was unsure of just what twisted exactly.
...Then it twisted and headed up into the sky once more like a messenger on a mission.
This is beautiful just like you!
Jj
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Happy Birthday Jan!! This is such a special story with a great little twist at the end. Oh, yes...the twist:
This line didn't seem right. As the reader, I was unsure of just what twisted exactly.
...Then it twisted and headed up into the sky once more like a messenger on a mission.
This is beautiful just like you!
Jj
Comment Written 17-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Thank you so much! :-) I will take a look at that line! So glad you liked it.
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from Kym Jade
We loved what you did with this story, changing the POV from the mother?s to the daughter?s. We miss our family too. We don?t get to see them as much as we would like.
Love and blessings
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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We loved what you did with this story, changing the POV from the mother?s to the daughter?s. We miss our family too. We don?t get to see them as much as we would like.
Love and blessings
Comment Written 16-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Thank you so much for this review. I am trying to get caught up on answering reviews, with only 147 left to answer! LOL Sorry it has taken so long for me to respond.
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from darkmoonbaby
Jan,
Happy birthday, dearie! This was wonderful. I'm sorry you miss your Mom. I hope all else is well. I didn't spot any errors. :)
Hugs!
Ash
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Jan,
Happy birthday, dearie! This was wonderful. I'm sorry you miss your Mom. I hope all else is well. I didn't spot any errors. :)
Hugs!
Ash
Comment Written 16-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Thank you, Ash! I really love hearing from you.
Hugs,
Jan
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Jan,
You're more than welcome dear. I am hoping for more about the farm soon. :D I've found the website for the farm and I've shown it to Dan.
Hugs,
Ash
Comment from Arlene
First you bring tears, then a twist.
Reallygreat writing. Very emotional and moving. I wouldn't change a thing.
If there are any nits I didn't recognize them.
Arlene
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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First you bring tears, then a twist.
Reallygreat writing. Very emotional and moving. I wouldn't change a thing.
If there are any nits I didn't recognize them.
Arlene
Comment Written 16-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2008
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Thank you so very much, Arlene for the exceptional rating and your kind words. Please forgive me for taking so long to respond.
Hugs,
Jan
Comment from RenieReader
Oh, Jan. This was so beautiful. How did you know I was missing my son--he died on a Friday the 13th many years ago. For some reason Father's Day really hit me this year too. Mine was barely 50 years old when he died. That seems so young to me now. Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece of love and promise. Your writing always inspires me.
Blessings,
Renie
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2008
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Oh, Jan. This was so beautiful. How did you know I was missing my son--he died on a Friday the 13th many years ago. For some reason Father's Day really hit me this year too. Mine was barely 50 years old when he died. That seems so young to me now. Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece of love and promise. Your writing always inspires me.
Blessings,
Renie
Comment Written 16-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2008
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Bless your heart, Renie. I am so glad I was led to write this, then. I think the holidays and birthdays are the hardest times.
Hugs and blessings,
Jan
Comment from Dave M
Janilou,
This is an excellent story with a really good twist. As best I can tell, this is original, each of the two people in an alternate universe. The writing is excellent, but I have one small suggestion:
"I will never forget your first birthday or for that matter, your birth day." I think this might read better as, "I will never forget your first birthday or for that matter, the day you were born."
Dave M
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2008
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Janilou,
This is an excellent story with a really good twist. As best I can tell, this is original, each of the two people in an alternate universe. The writing is excellent, but I have one small suggestion:
"I will never forget your first birthday or for that matter, your birth day." I think this might read better as, "I will never forget your first birthday or for that matter, the day you were born."
Dave M
Comment Written 16-Jun-2008
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2008
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Thanks, Dave. A good point. I will take a look at that!
Jan
