Lady Detective
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Freezing Rain and Submission"Suspense crime novel with romance.
13 total reviews
Comment from heyjude
Mcdaniel,
I'm glad you're working more on the Lady Detective. I'm anxious
to find out what happens to Burly and Ruckus. I'm continuing to enjoy this story.
reply by the author on 29-May-2008
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Mcdaniel,
I'm glad you're working more on the Lady Detective. I'm anxious
to find out what happens to Burly and Ruckus. I'm continuing to enjoy this story.
Comment Written 28-May-2008
reply by the author on 29-May-2008
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Me too, I will be sad when it is all played out. I have left the end open for a second book, though. We'll have to see what happens. Can't wait to hear, have just sent this manuscript to a group of evaluators (agents and editors) for a writers conference. Thank you for reading.
Comment from Jonez08
Elaine, excellent chapter. Great suspsence and drama, I love the way you incorporated weather into the plot. Makes it more real. And poor Ruckus. Burly will be fine her hero is on the way. Did he say his girlfriend? lol, does Burly know she's his girlfriend? These two are made for each other. Can't wait for the next chapter
Cassandra
reply by the author on 28-May-2008
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Elaine, excellent chapter. Great suspsence and drama, I love the way you incorporated weather into the plot. Makes it more real. And poor Ruckus. Burly will be fine her hero is on the way. Did he say his girlfriend? lol, does Burly know she's his girlfriend? These two are made for each other. Can't wait for the next chapter
Cassandra
Comment Written 28-May-2008
reply by the author on 28-May-2008
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story quickly coming to an end, I hate to see it go. But I have left it open to use her again in a sequal. thank you for reading
Comment from butterflykiss
Oh my she's in a pickle but don't worry help is on the way. It flows very well and kept my interest. I sure like Burly and she's just like all of us women, headstrong.
Good luck.
Butterflykiss
reply by the author on 28-May-2008
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Oh my she's in a pickle but don't worry help is on the way. It flows very well and kept my interest. I sure like Burly and she's just like all of us women, headstrong.
Good luck.
Butterflykiss
Comment Written 27-May-2008
reply by the author on 28-May-2008
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she is a very strong woman, she might not even need help. We'll have to wait and see. thank you for reading.
Comment from FlaFaerie
Hello there
Found another chapter of yours.. :)
Ooh.. she locked him up?? aww.. poor Ryan.. I hope he can still come to help..
Yay.. he got free.. lol.. Interesting twist of things..
hugs
reply by the author on 27-May-2008
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Hello there
Found another chapter of yours.. :)
Ooh.. she locked him up?? aww.. poor Ryan.. I hope he can still come to help..
Yay.. he got free.. lol.. Interesting twist of things..
hugs
Comment Written 26-May-2008
reply by the author on 27-May-2008
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story almost done, sad to see it go. thanks for reading
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Yup.. it's always sad to close a book and let go of the characters.. still.. you can always continue it as a series.. hehe...
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I am leaving it open to where I can expand and write a series with her as the main detective. I am sending out my manuscript now. I am a little on the excited side. How's your book coming?
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Woohoo.. congrats on sending it out.. that's great news.. luck with it..
it's always good to leave it open..series are wonderful..
mine.. slow.. sigh..
another story popped into my head.. 'His Tracker' - i have the first two chapters up and working on the third now.. it's for a paranormal novella.. a little book..
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Have not read it yet, but looking forward to checking it out though.
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cool.. could use the check up on it.. :)
Comment from empire76
Oh no, this is not good. Not good at all. First of all, does she realise she could have put Ryan in danger hand-cuffing him? Somehting should have happened to him--that would have taught her a lesson!
Good chapter. Love the heart-in-your-mouth suspense. Very nice. Nothing to change
Empi
reply by the author on 27-May-2008
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Oh no, this is not good. Not good at all. First of all, does she realise she could have put Ryan in danger hand-cuffing him? Somehting should have happened to him--that would have taught her a lesson!
Good chapter. Love the heart-in-your-mouth suspense. Very nice. Nothing to change
Empi
Comment Written 26-May-2008
reply by the author on 27-May-2008
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thank you for reading, thought of having something happen to him, but it just didn't seem right. good idea though.
Comment from earthlybeing
Great chapter. Lots of realistic action. Dialogue was smooth and easy to follow. I sure hope ruckus had a vest on. Can't wait to see what happens. Well done. Thanks, Jeanette
reply by the author on 26-May-2008
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Great chapter. Lots of realistic action. Dialogue was smooth and easy to follow. I sure hope ruckus had a vest on. Can't wait to see what happens. Well done. Thanks, Jeanette
Comment Written 26-May-2008
reply by the author on 26-May-2008
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Thank you for reading and the review.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good and exciting chapter you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Great job. Hugs, Teri
reply by the author on 26-May-2008
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This is a very good and exciting chapter you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Great job. Hugs, Teri
Comment Written 25-May-2008
reply by the author on 26-May-2008
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Thank you for reading and reviewing.
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Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Elaine :)
Well yo certainly upped the ante.Now ther in no doubt about Greg's guilt. I hope Burly can rescue hersel. It will add strength to her character.
I wasn't expecting Greg to shoot Ruckus. Now you have a real cliffhanger. I know help is on the way, but will it arrive in time? Burly won't know others are comming so I expect a desperate move.
I am ready for more of this excitement.
I noticed one typo: [He could hear the doorknob rattle, then the door [open ==>opened]..}
reply by the author on 26-May-2008
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Hi Elaine :)
Well yo certainly upped the ante.Now ther in no doubt about Greg's guilt. I hope Burly can rescue hersel. It will add strength to her character.
I wasn't expecting Greg to shoot Ruckus. Now you have a real cliffhanger. I know help is on the way, but will it arrive in time? Burly won't know others are comming so I expect a desperate move.
I am ready for more of this excitement.
I noticed one typo: [He could hear the doorknob rattle, then the door [open ==>opened]..}
Comment Written 25-May-2008
reply by the author on 26-May-2008
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Thank you for reading, there are still some tricks up my sleeve, so stick around. Almost done, finally.
Comment from GerryMacNeil
Way cool! You sure can write! Another well-written, fast-moving chapter. I saw no spag at all. Darn good job with an intricate plot. GerryMacNeil
reply by the author on 25-May-2008
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Way cool! You sure can write! Another well-written, fast-moving chapter. I saw no spag at all. Darn good job with an intricate plot. GerryMacNeil
Comment Written 25-May-2008
reply by the author on 25-May-2008
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Thank you for reading, story quickly coming to an end. Next chapter coming soon.
Comment from dportwood
mcdaniel1299,
You have written a story that keeps the reader's attention and have ended it at a place where the reader wants to know more. Good writing and good conversations. One little boo-boo in the last paragraph. I believe Burly was trying to free [herself] not himself.
dportwood
reply by the author on 25-May-2008
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mcdaniel1299,
You have written a story that keeps the reader's attention and have ended it at a place where the reader wants to know more. Good writing and good conversations. One little boo-boo in the last paragraph. I believe Burly was trying to free [herself] not himself.
dportwood
Comment Written 25-May-2008
reply by the author on 25-May-2008
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Yes, it was supposed to be herself, fixing now. Thank you for reading and the review.
