Comment from S.Yocom

Excellent

This is a pretty haiku, Shelley Kay, to go with a pretty picture. You followed the rules for the correct number of syllables in each line, and made it a lovely little poem. Good luck in the contest.
Sally

 Comment Written 06-May-2008

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reply by the author on 06-May-2008

thanx lots! :-)

Comment from Hurricane Dean

Excellent

I can see why you like this one. You paint a lovely picture and the piece is nicely accompanied with that awesome photo. It looks like a perfect greeting card and you stayed within the rules of a haiku. Expressing an essential moment in nature. Good job. Sincerely, Dean

 Comment Written 06-May-2008

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reply by the author on 06-May-2008

hehe thank you thank you :-)

Comment from babylonia

Excellent

the picture is awesome as well as the words. i feel happiness. i feel joy. i smile. this one is amazing. LOL
easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent. even without the picture it would read well. keep up the good work~

 Comment Written 06-May-2008

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reply by the author on 06-May-2008

thanx lots!! :-)

reply by babylonia on 06-May-2008

you are very welcome~
babylonia

Comment from heyjude

Excellent

Shelley,
This is beautiful and the picture is so lovely and accentuates
the poem. I love that ... a lullaby in rainbow sun whispers goodnight. Good luck on the contest.

 Comment Written 06-May-2008

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reply by the author on 06-May-2008

hehe thanx lots! :-)

Comment from PoesyPoet

Good

I like the picture and the haiku certainly describes it well. Done in the traditional 5,7,5 format, for me, it offered no originality for a contest entry. Still I wish you the best of luck.
PP

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 Comment Written 06-May-2008

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reply by the author on 06-May-2008

thanx lots :-)

Comment from Irrelevant

Excellent

Shelley, this just sends me drifting away at the end of a day. That was a very touching write and the thought you capture here just fills me with silent longing and wonder. Thanks for sharing this and good luck with the contest.

Scott

 Comment Written 06-May-2008

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reply by the author on 06-May-2008

cool - thanx :-)

Comment from kassey

Excellent

A really beautiful presentation for a really beautiful haiku. It is the best I have seen so far, the wording is perfect, good luck in the contest Kay

 Comment Written 06-May-2008

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reply by the author on 06-May-2008

thanx so much :-)

Comment from Mike K2

Excellent

I enjoyed both the well written haiku and the image that it is combined with. To me both combine to have a vacationy feel where one is relaxed enough to fully appreciate this. Good job!

 Comment Written 06-May-2008

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reply by the author on 06-May-2008

thanx lots! :-)

Comment from nitad

Excellent

I like it as well, so I'm glad you promoted it!
Beautiful words matched by beautiful artwork.
I am always amazed at the talented poets here at FS who can say so much, paint such a vivid picture, with so few words.
Well done! nitad

 Comment Written 06-May-2008

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reply by the author on 06-May-2008

hehe thanx much! :-)

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

I love this haiku. Sparkling with originality!~
Especially lines two and three.

i think line one could lose the 'in the". the syllables need not be five... .in modern english haiku. but if you wish to stick to the standard syllable count, then why not add a two syllabled word that is descriptive , since "in and the" do not add meaning.

For example:

golden glowing sky

Loved this haiku!

Warm regards,
rama devi

 Comment Written 06-May-2008

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reply by the author on 06-May-2008

will keep it in my mind - don't want to change anything while the cert is on it
thanx lots :-)