Water Colors
Reflections in Water34 total reviews
Comment from hwbw
Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful. Did I mention beautiful? This is such a sweet flowing poem. It's as if the movement of the water is speaking. Welcome back. Please more.
Bill
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Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful. Did I mention beautiful? This is such a sweet flowing poem. It's as if the movement of the water is speaking. Welcome back. Please more.
Bill
Comment Written 01-May-2008
Comment from jshep
Absolutely stunning poem. Written flawlessly, you, through your descriptions and presentation, perfectly described reflections in water. I am also a photographer, and I could never have defined it a eloquently as you have. The work is flawless and beautifully written.
Exceptional poem. Well done.
reply by the author on 01-May-2008
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Absolutely stunning poem. Written flawlessly, you, through your descriptions and presentation, perfectly described reflections in water. I am also a photographer, and I could never have defined it a eloquently as you have. The work is flawless and beautifully written.
Exceptional poem. Well done.
Comment Written 01-May-2008
reply by the author on 01-May-2008
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Hi jshep, Thank you for such a lovely review. I am extremely honored that you think my poem deserves a sixth star rating. I took the image that goes with the poem. It was my inspiration to write it. I was overwhelmed with the words that poppped into my head and I'm so happy you enjoyed it. Thank you so much for all the wondeful compliments. Bless You Helvi :o)
Comment from cindydijk
An entire year with all its seasons is described, all forms and faces of nature's best. What a nice comeback!
Even the textcolours are very natural and soft.
Nature never stops to amaze us.
Cindy
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An entire year with all its seasons is described, all forms and faces of nature's best. What a nice comeback!
Even the textcolours are very natural and soft.
Nature never stops to amaze us.
Cindy
Comment Written 01-May-2008
Comment from Mischief's Momma
This beautiful, very well done.
I see what you mean about the meter but it does flow with a life almost of it's own. I don't see any SPAGS.
This is a lovely poem based on a gorgeous photo. It's funny, but the colors that are reflected are actually deeper and bolder than the ones on trees. You know stillness is a very beautiful thing, even when it relates to life in general, not just in water.
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This beautiful, very well done.
I see what you mean about the meter but it does flow with a life almost of it's own. I don't see any SPAGS.
This is a lovely poem based on a gorgeous photo. It's funny, but the colors that are reflected are actually deeper and bolder than the ones on trees. You know stillness is a very beautiful thing, even when it relates to life in general, not just in water.
Comment Written 01-May-2008
Comment from llaliberte
This is my first time reading your work and you immediately transformed me to the sights and sounds and words , that I could not say to the picture. You are talented and thank you for sharing this with everyone. You hit this one right, the spirit, the colors and words are a two thumbs up. Keep writing
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This is my first time reading your work and you immediately transformed me to the sights and sounds and words , that I could not say to the picture. You are talented and thank you for sharing this with everyone. You hit this one right, the spirit, the colors and words are a two thumbs up. Keep writing
Comment Written 01-May-2008
Comment from rama devi
I enjoyed this tremendously. it has the vivacity of shimmering colors an a beautiful sense of melody and music in every line. The free flow rhythm works marvelously when read aloud and your descriptions bring the scene alive (as does the photo!). Superb rhyme choices augment the caliber of this fine write.
Extraordinary encores of their grandeur leave us blest
(and your poem echoing these gives us a vicarious blessing too!)
Your title drew my attention, and the verses held that attention captive until the end. I also delighted in your use of alliteration. your phrases have melody and meaning combined beautifully.
I found no blaring faults with this. However, if i had to find a spot to tweak (or consider a tweak) it would be this one:
"On this mirror of blue-silver you'll find breathtaking views
Where pretty water colors splash in photogenic hues"
because even though the line reads smoothly when read aloud, in order to do so one is forced to but emphasis on a syllable that is naturally unstressed. I know you are not using a particular meter, but when read aloud it happens that way... for me anyway.
here is how my ear hears it (Stresses in CAPS)
"On this MIRror of blue-SILver you'll find BREATHtaking views"
I would alter the line:
"On this mirror of blue silver you will find breathtaking views" (But it still puts the emphasis unatrually...so i would consider reworking the line.)
And then there is this line:
Where pretty water colors splash in photogenic hues
Where PREtty water COlors splash in PHOTOgenic hues
It sounds good only if the stress is placed upon the first syllables in the words pretty, colors and photogenic. But that is not how we normally pronounce those words.
This is a minor point... and i would love this poem even if you do not choose to revise those two lines.
Warm regards,
rama devi
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I enjoyed this tremendously. it has the vivacity of shimmering colors an a beautiful sense of melody and music in every line. The free flow rhythm works marvelously when read aloud and your descriptions bring the scene alive (as does the photo!). Superb rhyme choices augment the caliber of this fine write.
Extraordinary encores of their grandeur leave us blest
(and your poem echoing these gives us a vicarious blessing too!)
Your title drew my attention, and the verses held that attention captive until the end. I also delighted in your use of alliteration. your phrases have melody and meaning combined beautifully.
I found no blaring faults with this. However, if i had to find a spot to tweak (or consider a tweak) it would be this one:
"On this mirror of blue-silver you'll find breathtaking views
Where pretty water colors splash in photogenic hues"
because even though the line reads smoothly when read aloud, in order to do so one is forced to but emphasis on a syllable that is naturally unstressed. I know you are not using a particular meter, but when read aloud it happens that way... for me anyway.
here is how my ear hears it (Stresses in CAPS)
"On this MIRror of blue-SILver you'll find BREATHtaking views"
I would alter the line:
"On this mirror of blue silver you will find breathtaking views" (But it still puts the emphasis unatrually...so i would consider reworking the line.)
And then there is this line:
Where pretty water colors splash in photogenic hues
Where PREtty water COlors splash in PHOTOgenic hues
It sounds good only if the stress is placed upon the first syllables in the words pretty, colors and photogenic. But that is not how we normally pronounce those words.
This is a minor point... and i would love this poem even if you do not choose to revise those two lines.
Warm regards,
rama devi
Comment Written 01-May-2008
Comment from iamwrite
What beautiful words to grace such a beautiful photograph!
I had a hard time picking my favorite stanza, but finally settled on the first one:
In delicate surrender they succumb to water's edge
And delicately affirm the frame with their vivacious pledge
The radiant perceptions of what clearly isn't there
Will somehow reinvent itself in captivating flare
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What beautiful words to grace such a beautiful photograph!
I had a hard time picking my favorite stanza, but finally settled on the first one:
In delicate surrender they succumb to water's edge
And delicately affirm the frame with their vivacious pledge
The radiant perceptions of what clearly isn't there
Will somehow reinvent itself in captivating flare
Comment Written 01-May-2008
Comment from kassey
While you are writing like this it would be a shame not to share it, Welcome Home and to start with such a beautiful poem is wonderful, your beautiful descriptions of the colors imaging themselves in the water are too many to quote, too lovely to have a favourite. It is an awesome poem Kay
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While you are writing like this it would be a shame not to share it, Welcome Home and to start with such a beautiful poem is wonderful, your beautiful descriptions of the colors imaging themselves in the water are too many to quote, too lovely to have a favourite. It is an awesome poem Kay
Comment Written 01-May-2008
Comment from pbrprasad
Lines are poetic with colorful photo's support.
Some of the line which I would like to apapreciate are
"As reflections of true beauty come back to us once more "
"Resplendent rosy sunsets that are picturesque and pure "
"The artistry of nature is revealed in stunning scenes "
and many
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Lines are poetic with colorful photo's support.
Some of the line which I would like to apapreciate are
"As reflections of true beauty come back to us once more "
"Resplendent rosy sunsets that are picturesque and pure "
"The artistry of nature is revealed in stunning scenes "
and many
Comment Written 01-May-2008
Comment from nitad
The image you painted with your words was stunning.
Fall is my favorite season and one of the reasons is the change of colors and all of the beautiful sights that happen naturally as a result.
You captured it all beautifully.
Nitad
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The image you painted with your words was stunning.
Fall is my favorite season and one of the reasons is the change of colors and all of the beautiful sights that happen naturally as a result.
You captured it all beautifully.
Nitad
Comment Written 01-May-2008
