Heaven's Divinity
A short, short story about Christmas Eve at home.47 total reviews
Comment from Country Hermit
A potato candy? That's totally cool! Never heard of it before but it sounds like fun.
My only thought is to make the story a bit longer. This would allow for a more thorough description of the process. Also, by making it a bit longer you could boost the element of anticipation/suspense....get the reader as excited as you were.
You've got my curiousity peeked! Where did such a tradition come from? I'm a Christmas nut and go all-out for the the Holiday. I'm really intrigued by such a unique tradition.
Very good!
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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A potato candy? That's totally cool! Never heard of it before but it sounds like fun.
My only thought is to make the story a bit longer. This would allow for a more thorough description of the process. Also, by making it a bit longer you could boost the element of anticipation/suspense....get the reader as excited as you were.
You've got my curiousity peeked! Where did such a tradition come from? I'm a Christmas nut and go all-out for the the Holiday. I'm really intrigued by such a unique tradition.
Very good!
Comment Written 17-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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Thank you for reading my story and for the review you gave! It's a secret recipe from my mother's family in Ky.
Comment from brightside1099
This is very interesting. I've never heard of using a potato to make candy before. I love peanut butter, so I'm surprised that I've never tried this. Nice story with great family interest.
One nit ...
There was alot of movement -- a lot
-- BB
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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This is very interesting. I've never heard of using a potato to make candy before. I love peanut butter, so I'm surprised that I've never tried this. Nice story with great family interest.
One nit ...
There was alot of movement -- a lot
-- BB
Comment Written 17-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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Thanks for the great review! Using potato was a poor man's delicacy. Thank you for the correction.
Comment from greyhound1
what a great memory I wish I had memories like that kinda short wish there was a little more but It was a great memory and thing to do at xmas
greyhound1
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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what a great memory I wish I had memories like that kinda short wish there was a little more but It was a great memory and thing to do at xmas
greyhound1
Comment Written 17-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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Thank you for the great review! Glad you liked the story.
Comment from Earthwriter
almost made my mouth water i could smell the heavenly scent floating through the air excellent job on this piece thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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almost made my mouth water i could smell the heavenly scent floating through the air excellent job on this piece thanks for sharing
Comment Written 17-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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Thank you for your great rating! I'm glad I made your mouth water! Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from writerjen
Very sweet story about family memories at Christmas. Never heard of potato candy..interesting, thought I might try it out. No spelling errors, no grammatical errors. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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Very sweet story about family memories at Christmas. Never heard of potato candy..interesting, thought I might try it out. No spelling errors, no grammatical errors. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2008
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Thank you for the great rating! I'm glad you liked it. This is an old recipe from Ky. The recipe in the story was not complete, there is a "secret" ingredient. Sorry.
Comment from nitad
What a beautiful memory!
The best gifts to both give and receive are those that come from the heart, especially ones we make (or bake) with our hands.
No spag to report. I thought it was lovely. The only additional piece of information I as the reader would enjoy would be the recipe. Perhaps added to the bottom of the story or maybe in the author's notes.
Blessings, Nitad
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2008
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What a beautiful memory!
The best gifts to both give and receive are those that come from the heart, especially ones we make (or bake) with our hands.
No spag to report. I thought it was lovely. The only additional piece of information I as the reader would enjoy would be the recipe. Perhaps added to the bottom of the story or maybe in the author's notes.
Blessings, Nitad
Comment Written 16-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2008
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Thank you for your lovely review! The recipe? Well, maybe!!
Comment from babylonia
grammatically it looks great. easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent. i am just trying to figure out what it was you were making. it sounds good. keep up teh good work~
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2008
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grammatically it looks great. easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent. i am just trying to figure out what it was you were making. it sounds good. keep up teh good work~
Comment Written 16-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2008
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Thank you for the great rating! Making an old Ky. secret recipe.
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LOL keep up the good work~
you are welcome~
babylonia
Comment from rama devi
It is a sweet memory (pun intended!)
And you have written it with a gentle tone and pace that fit the theme to a tee.
So kind that you share sweetness - made with love- with your community. This story passes on the x-Mac spirit.
I never before heard of confections made with potato!
Warm regards,
rama devi
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2008
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It is a sweet memory (pun intended!)
And you have written it with a gentle tone and pace that fit the theme to a tee.
So kind that you share sweetness - made with love- with your community. This story passes on the x-Mac spirit.
I never before heard of confections made with potato!
Warm regards,
rama devi
Comment Written 16-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2008
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Thank you for the great rating! But, what is x-Mac spirit?! Again, thank you.
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oops...it is a typo!
x-mas
Christmas
Spirit.
Comment from RobertaLee
This is so "sweet" (made me actually hungry--what is the confection called?). Appreciate so much the sharing of one's precious memories, we have a family tradition of baking and distributing sweet rolls on Christmas Eve, it is such a blessing to share the love of Jesus Christ, and family with others. Thanks so much for sharing your story. Blessings, Roberta P.S. You could share the recipe below or in your story if you wanted to, it would add "flavor." (Just a small pun.)
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2008
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This is so "sweet" (made me actually hungry--what is the confection called?). Appreciate so much the sharing of one's precious memories, we have a family tradition of baking and distributing sweet rolls on Christmas Eve, it is such a blessing to share the love of Jesus Christ, and family with others. Thanks so much for sharing your story. Blessings, Roberta P.S. You could share the recipe below or in your story if you wanted to, it would add "flavor." (Just a small pun.)
Comment Written 16-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2008
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Thank you for your high praise! The confection is called "Heaven's Divinity." It is a Ky recipe of my mom's. Think I'll keep the recipe a family secret at present!
Comment from heyjude
Gentlewind,
I enjoyed this story about what your family does on Christmas Eve.
What a beautiful tradition to make candy and send it to people
in your community. The only thing I wondered about was ..in talking about the potato, should it be its skin. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2008
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Gentlewind,
I enjoyed this story about what your family does on Christmas Eve.
What a beautiful tradition to make candy and send it to people
in your community. The only thing I wondered about was ..in talking about the potato, should it be its skin. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2008
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Thank you for your great review! You ask about the potato...Yes and no. When I wrote that part, I had to go back and look at it again myself and wonder why "his" and not "it?" My answer was: somehow there was a personality to that potato so it became a "he!"
