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Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "~ inside shadows ~"
keep your hope alive....

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Comment from Morning Glory
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The first thing that came into my mind when reading this was
that here is a happy poem. An uplifting poem. This is a poem
that makes one feel better, yet was taken from the same
instructions as a preceding poem that was solid gloom. It
is good to be up-lifted as you read poetry, yet sometimes a
sad poem is good. It depends on the circumstances. I like
this poem. Thanks for posting. Excellent. __Morning Glory

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2008


reply by the author on 07-Jun-2008
    thank you much :-)
Comment from naslund
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Hi, shelley kay

Beautiful poem full of hope.
Nice take on the song
Thank you for sharing
Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2008


reply by the author on 06-Jun-2008
    thank you much :-)
Comment from pasinger
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Music can set the mood or change a mood. This poem set a mood with the following feelings as if the music was playing softly in the background as I read.
The poem gave a feeling of comfort. Peace and quiet
Warmth and love.

A smooth read.
Nothing to correct.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2008


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2008
    thanx lots! :-)
Comment from Teri7
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This is a very good contest entry you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Great job. Hugs, Teri

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2008


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2008
    thank you much :-)
Comment from YodaOnCrack
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While I struggle rating poetry, I did like this very much. It seems to have a great message and was told in a distinct voice with an interesting, yet simple format. Good luck to you with the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2008


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2008
    thank you much :-)
Comment from hvysmker
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My not having much interest in poetry, Shelley, you'll have to settle with me answering your questions at the bottom. Oh, and I can't stand R&R, so I've never heard the song.

~ What was the first word or thought that came to mind after reading and why?
I think the "Inside Shadows" is distracting. Why? Because the rest of the poem doesn't continue the reference to shadows. Sort of an incomplete thought, with no transition from one section to the next. What kind of shadows and why? Above those lines, you mention emotions, after them you mention love and light. Maybe something in between that ties the two together, like "Inside shadows, a torch finds its way."

~ How did this writing make you feel?
Not being a poet or very religious, not a whole lot of feeling for me.

~ Was it a smooth read throughout? If not, where did it trip?
As noted above.

~ Were there any typos?
I didn't see any.

Charlie -- hvysmker

 Comment Written 19-May-2008


reply by the author on 19-May-2008
    i never heard the song either lol
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hi shelly God is always with a cap look at your introduction.

What a very pleasant and warm feeling you gave to your reader, Yes it's so reasuuring that God is watching us at all times.
Good luck
Gert

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2008


reply by the author on 16-Apr-2008
    will check it out - thanx! :-)
reply by Gert sherwood on 16-Apr-2008
    Good I belive you should
    Gert
Comment from mcdaniel1299
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I really liked your piece, and I agree, God is watching. He lets us make mistakes to help us learn. I love the way you write, it is light and airey, maybe the font you use helps that point come across. Thank you for sharing :)

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2008


reply by the author on 16-Apr-2008
    cool! thank you so much! :-)
Comment from mmichelle97219
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God watches from a distance, and from a distance everything looks so perfect. Like looking down from a plane. A very good contest entry.
Michelle

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2008


reply by the author on 16-Apr-2008
    your review reminds me of bette midler's song 'from a distance' lol
Comment from bigmoondogg2004
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Happiness, anything having to do with God is cause for happiness. I felt a sort of peace within as I read this. Reading about how he is watching over us and from the read, I get a sort of protection from it. I guess just the feeling of knowing. Excellent.

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2008


reply by the author on 15-Apr-2008
    thank you much :-)
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2008
    thank you much :-)