Better Than Any Train Ride
A daughter's remembrance91 total reviews
Comment from Rajasir
This literary ride, I think, was much better than that I was expecting from the title.
The way you began the story created a kind of definite impact on me and I was pulled by the following lines to go up to the last one.
It is a very interesting write , my friend.
Bless you
Rajasir
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2008
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This literary ride, I think, was much better than that I was expecting from the title.
The way you began the story created a kind of definite impact on me and I was pulled by the following lines to go up to the last one.
It is a very interesting write , my friend.
Bless you
Rajasir
Comment Written 28-Jul-2008
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2008
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Hello Rajasir....I have to share with you that it is one of my favorites.....so pleased you enjoyed it as well. Take Care...diane
Comment from Louise Michelle
when northern Michigan's winter winds had shown no mercy. This is a great line.
This is a lovely story and your writing is a pleasure to read.
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when northern Michigan's winter winds had shown no mercy. This is a great line.
This is a lovely story and your writing is a pleasure to read.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2008
Comment from EllieKaye
This is a beautifully written tribute to a wonderful father. I first wondered if it could have been a brother- but as I read on, I realized that the patience this man had, and the deep love had to be that of a parent. You write this so well and the love you have for him shines through in this piece.
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This is a beautifully written tribute to a wonderful father. I first wondered if it could have been a brother- but as I read on, I realized that the patience this man had, and the deep love had to be that of a parent. You write this so well and the love you have for him shines through in this piece.
Comment Written 11-May-2008
Comment from empire76
This was a good read for me. It flowed well, and there were no spaggies spotted.
Maybe you can take that train ride by yourself or with your child if you have any. Would be interesting to tell him/her about how you planned it with your dad
Empi
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This was a good read for me. It flowed well, and there were no spaggies spotted.
Maybe you can take that train ride by yourself or with your child if you have any. Would be interesting to tell him/her about how you planned it with your dad
Empi
Comment Written 09-May-2008
Comment from mshugh
That is a superb, emotional, heart-wrenching piece (take that from a Dad) - you bring back all the memories of my little girl and I *who is now in University) and explain why the things that stand out in this life always seem to revert back to friends and family
Thank you for writing a great piece
Michael
And now I now what you mean in that review
Many thanks
Michael
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That is a superb, emotional, heart-wrenching piece (take that from a Dad) - you bring back all the memories of my little girl and I *who is now in University) and explain why the things that stand out in this life always seem to revert back to friends and family
Thank you for writing a great piece
Michael
And now I now what you mean in that review
Many thanks
Michael
Comment Written 05-May-2008
Comment from heyjude
Mrs. Kt
This is a very poignant story and great tribute to your father.
It was told beautifully and my eyes teared up just reading it. It
made me think of my own father and miss him. He's been dead
for 29 years.
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Mrs. Kt
This is a very poignant story and great tribute to your father.
It was told beautifully and my eyes teared up just reading it. It
made me think of my own father and miss him. He's been dead
for 29 years.
Comment Written 03-May-2008
Comment from capraroj
Dear Mrs. KT: This is a lovely personal narrative and really brings to life for the reader similar reminiscences; enough to bring a tear to the eye, I daresay.
I only have a couple of nits, though because of the overall quality of the piece, I'm not docking points :)
1) "Together we fished for bullheads and sunfishes on Sanford Lake and the Shiawassee Flats, built and painted a five foot tall, one hundred twenty foot long post and rail fence that is still standing and serviceable today, nearly fifty years later, and searched every December of my childhood until we found the "perfect" Christmas tree - the one that still housed a robin's nest and whose crooked branches had obviously offered protection to God's small creatures when northern Michigan's winter winds had shown no mercy."
>>very long sentence, gets a little difficult to keep track of all the thoughts here. Perhaps use semi-colons?
2) Overuse of quotes: not speaking of the dialogues, just a number of instances where a word or phrase is in quotes; I understand why you have them, it just gets a little distracting when they're are too many.
Overall, a fantastic piece. I love your work, since you write of things I think about all the time - my childhood, nostalgia, wonderful memories. I think we are all blessed with a greater awareness of, and appreciation for, our memories because of your fine ability to bring your own to life.
Well done!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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Dear Mrs. KT: This is a lovely personal narrative and really brings to life for the reader similar reminiscences; enough to bring a tear to the eye, I daresay.
I only have a couple of nits, though because of the overall quality of the piece, I'm not docking points :)
1) "Together we fished for bullheads and sunfishes on Sanford Lake and the Shiawassee Flats, built and painted a five foot tall, one hundred twenty foot long post and rail fence that is still standing and serviceable today, nearly fifty years later, and searched every December of my childhood until we found the "perfect" Christmas tree - the one that still housed a robin's nest and whose crooked branches had obviously offered protection to God's small creatures when northern Michigan's winter winds had shown no mercy."
>>very long sentence, gets a little difficult to keep track of all the thoughts here. Perhaps use semi-colons?
2) Overuse of quotes: not speaking of the dialogues, just a number of instances where a word or phrase is in quotes; I understand why you have them, it just gets a little distracting when they're are too many.
Overall, a fantastic piece. I love your work, since you write of things I think about all the time - my childhood, nostalgia, wonderful memories. I think we are all blessed with a greater awareness of, and appreciation for, our memories because of your fine ability to bring your own to life.
Well done!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2008
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Hello! Oh....I love to experiment with unconventional groupings, sentence structures, etc. That said, I also love to write hoping that the reader will read the work aloud. I know conventional wisdom says to do otherwise, but hey, e.e. cummings needs a friend in his corner! Take Care....diane
Comment from GentleWind
An awesome man and story! I feel as though I know your father and you. You did an excellent job. It was as if I was there with you both the whole time!
I had a father like that and I miss him too. God Bless
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An awesome man and story! I feel as though I know your father and you. You did an excellent job. It was as if I was there with you both the whole time!
I had a father like that and I miss him too. God Bless
Comment Written 15-Apr-2008
Comment from louparis
The story is more a beautiful eulogy and worthy of publishing by any family periodical. The emotion it rises to is all too often disguised by readers with no memorable past that has basis in a loving father or mother. Though beautifully done, the piece will not be appreciated by a world of cold and selfish reality. Too bad.
LouParis
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2008
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The story is more a beautiful eulogy and worthy of publishing by any family periodical. The emotion it rises to is all too often disguised by readers with no memorable past that has basis in a loving father or mother. Though beautifully done, the piece will not be appreciated by a world of cold and selfish reality. Too bad.
LouParis
Comment Written 15-Apr-2008
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2008
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Ah Friend! So much appreciation for your kind review. I am deeply honored and humbled. My grandfather, Anton Kenel, emigrated from Lucerne, Switzerland in 1912 - I read your biography and thought you might enjoy that piece of information. From what I understand, "kenels" were like Spanish sherpas. Quite a few Kenels were burned at the stake for relgious purposes during the Middle Ages. . . Again, I thank you for appreciating my work. Do stop by again. . . diane
Comment from mtngalofnc
Hi diane,
Such a heart warming story. You were truly blessed by having a wonderful father to share his world with you. Your memories are very well written and flow very smoothly. A pleasure to read and review. Thank you for sharing this. God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
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Hi diane,
Such a heart warming story. You were truly blessed by having a wonderful father to share his world with you. Your memories are very well written and flow very smoothly. A pleasure to read and review. Thank you for sharing this. God bless and best wishes!
mtngalofnc
Comment Written 15-Apr-2008
