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A Painful Encounter

An immature's 'stab' at humour! :-)

20 total reviews 
Comment from charissw
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Great play on words. Good job although different from the others entries, I liked it. Good luck on the contest.
Blessings, Chariss

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2008

reply by the author on 17-Jun-2008
    Thanks chariss, for your kind review and for the stars. I'm glad you found my poem different from the others. I've always believed that variety is the spice of life!
    It is true my poems are often off the wall... kinda like this senior lady! Takes all kinds, eh? ;-) Thanks again and have a bright and be-you-to-the-full day!
    Sincerely, Whizpurr
Comment from babylonia
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LOL especially if you sleep in a room full of people. :P
easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent. made me smile. made me laugh. keep up the good work~
good luck~

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2008

reply by the author on 17-Jun-2008
    Yessss.... it might be rather a touchy subject if one were sleeping in a room full of people!:-) Thanks, babylonia, for reviewing my poem and for the generous rating. Glad the poem made you smile and laugh.
    Sincerely, Whizpurr
reply by babylonia on 17-Jun-2008
    you are very welcome~
    babylonia
Comment from Annmuma
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Well you made me laugh! I've just begun to read the entries but this looks like a contender to me. Great presentation. ann

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2008

reply by the author on 16-Jun-2008
    Thank you, Annmuma, I appreciate your kind comments. Glad my poem made you laugh. I had fun writing it. Maybe it is laughter and not only love that makes the world go 'round? ;-)
    Sincerely, Whizpurr ^-^
Comment from Readywriter52
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A very funny poem. I have heard eating certain foods at night can cause nightmares. Your poem is a warning to watch what you eat at night. Every bite of sauerkraut can cause pain.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2008

reply by the author on 16-Jun-2008
    Hi Ready,
    Yes Siree! Saurkraut can really bite! :-) Thanks for your interesting remarks. Glad you enjoyed 'A Painful Encounter." I appreciate those stars too!
    Sincerely, Whizpurr
Comment from bard owl
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Oh what too much roughage can do to the body! This was the first funny nightmare contest entry I have read and it made me laugh out loud. I love Reuben sandwiches and they have sauerkraut. Anyway, thank you for a laugh. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Linda

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2008

reply by the author on 04-Jun-2008
    Hi Linda,,
    Thank you for the sparkly rating and for your kind words. Glad you got a laugh out of this one! :-)
    Whizpurr ^-^
Comment from NaughtieScribe
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Ok this work really made me think of all the late, late nights fast food was not my best friend. I found this to be a really cute entry. I did think the meter was a little off, and had to read it a second time to get it right. Other than that I found nothing to change. Good luck.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2008

reply by the author on 29-Apr-2008
    Thanks for your review.
    Whizpurr
Comment from Josipher32
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This is just an opinion. An acrostic should have the title the same as the acrostic itself, but this is not a rule.

Good overall flow.

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2008

reply by the author on 25-Apr-2008
    Thanks Josipher. Having the title be the same as the acrostic sounds like a good idea to me. I know in the contest sample given, ELIZABETH, this was so... only I didn't make the connection until you called my attention to it.
    Whizpurr
Comment from aviddbrut
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I think this is a very good attempt at humor. nice job, whizpurr (clever pen name!!) what I really like it that you say this so well, we all know what you are talking about, you lead us up to the fateful moment and you DON'T just pull a crude and cheap fart joke. this is fart humor with class. nice job. david

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2008

reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
    WoW! Fart humor with class! ;-) Thank you for that excellent compliment!
    I really had fun writing the poem. Whiz
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello whizpurr , I love this ditty of a poem so funny
I know that beans can give you the same problem
thank you for placing a smile on my face
Gert

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2008

reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
    Thank you, Gert. It was a really fun one to write! Good job we all have "experiences in common'!!! :-)
    Whiz
reply by Gert sherwood on 11-Apr-2008
    Whiz you are so welcome
    Gert
Comment from Sleep
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Hi Whiz,

Lol - gets my wife the same way, even worse because I lay awake listening and savouring the aroma whilst she sleeps on oblivious to the remnants of her task.

If ever there was a motive to cure your insomnia!

I think you did very, very well with tihs.

Regards,

Sleep................

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2008

reply by the author on 10-Apr-2008
    Hi
    Glad you enjoyed my fun! Never thought of it as a remedy for curing insomnia!!! But, for sure, it'd be a good one! ;-)
    Whiz