Dear Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Dear Mr.Valentine"Addressing different themes in a form of a letter
19 total reviews
Comment from jeana
I ejoyed your poetic letter of Valentine It is touching and sentimental to acknowledge your thoughts and emotions the expression of love searching is well conceived and shared. Should you find a twin I would not mind taking the spare. hehe. jeana
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2008
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I ejoyed your poetic letter of Valentine It is touching and sentimental to acknowledge your thoughts and emotions the expression of love searching is well conceived and shared. Should you find a twin I would not mind taking the spare. hehe. jeana
Comment Written 19-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2008
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Haha, what are friends for? Would gladly help in this direction, if only!!!
Thanks for a great and encouraging review, you are always so sweet and kind.
Love
Pupa
Comment from Wendyanne
Hi PUPA. This is such a sweet piece of romantic poetry written for Valentine's day. You have used some lovely imagery to express your thoughts
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2008
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Hi PUPA. This is such a sweet piece of romantic poetry written for Valentine's day. You have used some lovely imagery to express your thoughts
Comment Written 16-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2008
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Thanks Wendy, appreciate your kind review, glad you liked it.
Love
Pupa
Comment from Lady & Louis
Dear Pupa, what a lovely letter/poem, and such a touching ending! The imagery there is very strong indeed, the lost and lonely lover...
I like the abcb rhyme scheme - I think it's my favourite type, it's less intrusive than some and allows a more natural feel to the read, which with a letter like this is important.
The only suggestion I'd make is to perhaps make the line "they lose sense of responsibility", "they lose their sense of responsibility".
Love,
Louise xxxx
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2008
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Dear Pupa, what a lovely letter/poem, and such a touching ending! The imagery there is very strong indeed, the lost and lonely lover...
I like the abcb rhyme scheme - I think it's my favourite type, it's less intrusive than some and allows a more natural feel to the read, which with a letter like this is important.
The only suggestion I'd make is to perhaps make the line "they lose sense of responsibility", "they lose their sense of responsibility".
Love,
Louise xxxx
Comment Written 16-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2008
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Thanks Louise for your lovely review. Appreciate your suggestion, will see into it.
Love
Pupa
Comment from wizard_of_oz
Lovely wish, Mr, Valentine would surely grant your wish. I like it, words flow nicely and the message is easy to understand. If the world is filled with love maybe we can celebrate love truly happy, not just hallucination. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2008
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Lovely wish, Mr, Valentine would surely grant your wish. I like it, words flow nicely and the message is easy to understand. If the world is filled with love maybe we can celebrate love truly happy, not just hallucination. Well done.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2008
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Thanks for a great review, appreciate your kind rating too.
Yes, I wish he would grant me my wish!!
Love
Pupa
Comment from maggieJo
How neat! A sweet verse with so much truth and you are so kind at
the love sstruck lovers in their uterly idiotic insanity.
Nice read Pupa. You need to keep this handy for future use to some 'star
gazing 'lovers' who don't know they can't see stars in broad daylight.(Humor with your humor in verse)
maggiejo
magiejo
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2008
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How neat! A sweet verse with so much truth and you are so kind at
the love sstruck lovers in their uterly idiotic insanity.
Nice read Pupa. You need to keep this handy for future use to some 'star
gazing 'lovers' who don't know they can't see stars in broad daylight.(Humor with your humor in verse)
maggiejo
magiejo
Comment Written 16-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2008
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Haha, loved your review, thanks maggie.
I also appreciate your kind rating and glad you liked my writing.
Love
Pupa
Comment from nora arjuna
But if you by chance meet a lost and lonely lover, send him to me, let him be mine
A beautiful read Pupa. You made me dream and sigh.
What if I already have my share and want more?
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2008
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But if you by chance meet a lost and lonely lover, send him to me, let him be mine
A beautiful read Pupa. You made me dream and sigh.
What if I already have my share and want more?
Comment Written 16-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2008
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Hey, romantic friend! Isn't what you have satisfying enough??? lol.
I don't know why I want to ask you that: did you have an arranged marriage?
I don't mean to be nosy though... Loved your comments.
Love
Pupa
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LOL, I was just being playful my friend. Of course it's almost impossible to have someone who has everything you dream of, but you should be thankful and focus on those traits you adore. No, not an arranged marriage. :)
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OK, fair enough. Keep on dreaming and sighing then, why not.
Glad it wasn't arranged. Pupa
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Isn't that what we writers do, dreaming and sighing? lol.
Comment from kassey
This poem is a whole different look at valentine, talking to him and asking him to see if there are any out there for you. The emotions you describe about love are great.
"Heartbeats and sighs can be heard eavrywhere"
then a little further down
sweet dreams sway to the sound of violins"
All very lovely sentiments that you want your share of Kay
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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This poem is a whole different look at valentine, talking to him and asking him to see if there are any out there for you. The emotions you describe about love are great.
"Heartbeats and sighs can be heard eavrywhere"
then a little further down
sweet dreams sway to the sound of violins"
All very lovely sentiments that you want your share of Kay
Comment Written 15-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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Kay, thanks for your sweet review. I'm glad you liked my letter/poem.
Well, I am waiting for my share!!
Love
Pupa
Comment from ledford
This was sweet:-)
I like these lines best:
"the gardens are full of blossoming love
magic creates a chain of emotions
beauty around seems like heaven above"
Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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This was sweet:-)
I like these lines best:
"the gardens are full of blossoming love
magic creates a chain of emotions
beauty around seems like heaven above"
Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 15-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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Thanks for your review and kind rating. Glad you liked my letter/poem.
Love
Pupa
Comment from empire76
Neat. I like this poem. Partuicularly towards the end.
This is the part that I like best:
sweet dreams sway to the sound of violins
the gardens are full of blossoming love
magic creates a chain of emotions
beauty around seems like heaven above
Empi
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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Neat. I like this poem. Partuicularly towards the end.
This is the part that I like best:
sweet dreams sway to the sound of violins
the gardens are full of blossoming love
magic creates a chain of emotions
beauty around seems like heaven above
Empi
Comment Written 15-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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Empi, nice of you to drop by. Thanks for a kind review and rating.
Glad you liked it.
Love
Pupa
Comment from Kentucky Sweet Pea
LOL! Well done, Pupa. I like your letters you write and love you even more. I know I've been scarce and I hope to be able to be around more than I've been to read your beautiful words.
Love,
Pea
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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LOL! Well done, Pupa. I like your letters you write and love you even more. I know I've been scarce and I hope to be able to be around more than I've been to read your beautiful words.
Love,
Pea
Comment Written 14-Feb-2008
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2008
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Sweetest Pea of them all! Thanks, I also haven't been around too much lately, waiting for my "storm" to arrive next Tuesday!! But I am well equiped and ready for it.
Love
Pupa
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are you divorcing? what is going on my sweet?
