Up On Sullivan's Hill
An Epic Tale: A Little Fact; A Little Fiction64 total reviews
Comment from Judian James
This was a great addition to the Halloween Poetry Contest. It's an engaging tale that should be read every Halloween to kids who want a good story and a scare or two. "but each time I visit that mournful place, I find locks of bright golden hair" Too good!
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2007
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This was a great addition to the Halloween Poetry Contest. It's an engaging tale that should be read every Halloween to kids who want a good story and a scare or two. "but each time I visit that mournful place, I find locks of bright golden hair" Too good!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2007
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2007
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Hello Judian! I just might read it at one of the elementary schools here in my town, but I'd have to clean it up a bit! Take Care...diane
Comment from shimmeringlights
Excellent ghost story and so fitting for this contest. I like how you told the tale and then brought it into the present. I grew up near Salem, Mass which has tons of ghost and witch stories so I can really appreciate how this was passed through the generations. Good Luck!
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Excellent ghost story and so fitting for this contest. I like how you told the tale and then brought it into the present. I grew up near Salem, Mass which has tons of ghost and witch stories so I can really appreciate how this was passed through the generations. Good Luck!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2007
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2007
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Oh! I loved Salem! Tituba and the gals....Thanks so much. Great fun to pen...diane
Comment from Northpal
Thank you very much for this scary tale. Very intriguing and yet so natural. It is very well written and it was a pleasure for me to read and to review. Take care.
Especially when the ghosts are running loose. North Pal
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Thank you very much for this scary tale. Very intriguing and yet so natural. It is very well written and it was a pleasure for me to read and to review. Take care.
Especially when the ghosts are running loose. North Pal
Comment Written 14-Oct-2007
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A little lengthy, but so enjoyable to write! Thank you! diane
Comment from poeticcat2003
This is just a fantastic contest entry. It will be tough to beat. You have the epic down pat. the flow and the story are riveting.
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This is just a fantastic contest entry. It will be tough to beat. You have the epic down pat. the flow and the story are riveting.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2007
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2007
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First epic....a little long-winded, but so much fun! Thank you very much...diane
Comment from sngldad4gd
This would be a wonderful campfire tale to scare the be Jesus out of those who are faint of heart or live close to the hill. I'm sure the eastern seaboard is rich with such tales. Very well done. Ray :>)
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This would be a wonderful campfire tale to scare the be Jesus out of those who are faint of heart or live close to the hill. I'm sure the eastern seaboard is rich with such tales. Very well done. Ray :>)
Comment Written 14-Oct-2007
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Hi Ray! First attempt at something like this....just wonderful fun. Thank you so much....diane
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Your welcomed, Ray :>)
Comment from Max Edon
I really enjoyed this--it was quite a tale! It had a good rythm and flow. You had a lot of nice rhymes in this. This was really scary!
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I really enjoyed this--it was quite a tale! It had a good rythm and flow. You had a lot of nice rhymes in this. This was really scary!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2007
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2007
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Hi Max! So enjoyable to pen. Thank you! diane
Comment from jeana
I enjoyed your poem/story. I love reading folklore and family historic based stories. They are really interesting. Your poem is flowing with descriptive images. You can envision all of the events unfold. jeana
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I enjoyed your poem/story. I love reading folklore and family historic based stories. They are really interesting. Your poem is flowing with descriptive images. You can envision all of the events unfold. jeana
Comment Written 14-Oct-2007
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2007
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Hi jeana! So pleased you enjoyed. take care...diane
Comment from bduckett1
Excellent rhyme and rhythm .. the words so vivd your imagination runs wild..
No one could have writen it better...
thanks for sharing I give it ******
bduckett1
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Excellent rhyme and rhythm .. the words so vivd your imagination runs wild..
No one could have writen it better...
thanks for sharing I give it ******
bduckett1
Comment Written 14-Oct-2007
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2007
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Hello! Much appreciation for you exceptional review; I am deeply honored and humbled. So pleased you enjoyed. diane
Comment from manders
Excellent poem - I only wish I had another six to give it.
Rhymes and format all done correctly.
Very well written with vivid imagery.
"Snuff out the lanterns, and do stay inside
Lock the windows; bolt every door"
"Their ship did shatter upon the north coast
Among treacherous rocks, strong and bold
No moonlight dared brighten the starless sky
Just torrents of rain, biting cold"
"That All Hallow's Eve the moon shone so bright
A hint of snow hung in the air"
Excellent job - thanks for sharing:)
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2007
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Excellent poem - I only wish I had another six to give it.
Rhymes and format all done correctly.
Very well written with vivid imagery.
"Snuff out the lanterns, and do stay inside
Lock the windows; bolt every door"
"Their ship did shatter upon the north coast
Among treacherous rocks, strong and bold
No moonlight dared brighten the starless sky
Just torrents of rain, biting cold"
"That All Hallow's Eve the moon shone so bright
A hint of snow hung in the air"
Excellent job - thanks for sharing:)
Comment Written 14-Oct-2007
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2007
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Hello! So pleased you stopped by and enjoyed your visit. Great fun to pen this piece. diane
Comment from Josipher32
I liked the seasonal picture you provided. Judging by the length of this poem, I can tell you put a lot of time and energy into this. The rhyming scheme was excellent. No changes to suggest or SPAGS to point out. Good luck, D.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2007
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I liked the seasonal picture you provided. Judging by the length of this poem, I can tell you put a lot of time and energy into this. The rhyming scheme was excellent. No changes to suggest or SPAGS to point out. Good luck, D.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2007
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2007
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Hello Josipher: So pleased you enjoyed this offering. Great fun to pen this piece. Just wish my dad could have been here to read it. diane
