No Name Child
A Cutter's Letter to God49 total reviews
Comment from Salus
This is nicely done!!! I used to have friends who cut themselves too. There was a time when cutting oneself was almost a trendy thing to do. How horrible this is!
Being a Christian, I too, pray for forgiveness. Guess the only difference is - I trust that God forgives. I feel bad though, fopr repeating the same mistakes over and over... duh...
thanks for sharing. :)
Salus
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This is nicely done!!! I used to have friends who cut themselves too. There was a time when cutting oneself was almost a trendy thing to do. How horrible this is!
Being a Christian, I too, pray for forgiveness. Guess the only difference is - I trust that God forgives. I feel bad though, fopr repeating the same mistakes over and over... duh...
thanks for sharing. :)
Salus
Comment Written 20-May-2007
Comment from pughwee
This is extraordinary, hence the six stars. I looked at entering this contest and nothing came to my mind. You took a difficult subject and made the choppy dialogue fit so perfectly. Simply astounding, and best of luck with it in the contest...Pughwee
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This is extraordinary, hence the six stars. I looked at entering this contest and nothing came to my mind. You took a difficult subject and made the choppy dialogue fit so perfectly. Simply astounding, and best of luck with it in the contest...Pughwee
Comment Written 20-May-2007
Comment from hopeishigh
This is excellent and so sad that I enjoyed it that it flowed so well and had so much of the feelings in it of the cutters
I had heard of this a while back and the pain they feel cuts deeper than when they are cutting themselves
as I understand it it is to release the pain they feel inside
this piece was so emotional and also true
thanks for sharing this excellent work!!!@
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This is excellent and so sad that I enjoyed it that it flowed so well and had so much of the feelings in it of the cutters
I had heard of this a while back and the pain they feel cuts deeper than when they are cutting themselves
as I understand it it is to release the pain they feel inside
this piece was so emotional and also true
thanks for sharing this excellent work!!!@
Comment Written 20-May-2007
Comment from mslink1
Wow, you did a great job on this poem. I think it's because you have relayed so well with the topic that you penned. Your spirit is in this, and your compassion flows through each line. A great entry and my best to you in winning...Mary.
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Wow, you did a great job on this poem. I think it's because you have relayed so well with the topic that you penned. Your spirit is in this, and your compassion flows through each line. A great entry and my best to you in winning...Mary.
Comment Written 20-May-2007
Comment from Marjorie D.
Oh, Diane! This is so powerful. It's compelling on a deep level. Somehow, I think the two-word requirement worked perfectly for the tone of your piece. It conveys a sense of urgency and desperation in the wording.
Wow!
Thanks very much for joining in. I'm so glad you did!
Marjorie
reply by the author on 20-May-2007
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Oh, Diane! This is so powerful. It's compelling on a deep level. Somehow, I think the two-word requirement worked perfectly for the tone of your piece. It conveys a sense of urgency and desperation in the wording.
Wow!
Thanks very much for joining in. I'm so glad you did!
Marjorie
Comment Written 20-May-2007
reply by the author on 20-May-2007
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Hello Marjorie! Thank you so much for the wonderful review! I've never done anything like this before now. I sat down, and the next thing I knew, the words just started to emerge...Thank you so much for the opportunity to express the sadness and hurt of these young women...Be well...diane
Comment from J. Bond
This story was very well done, and it flowed almost with an almost poetic quality. It made the words seem beautiful, but darkly so. They packed an emotional punch, and you have arranged them in a way which touches the reader and gives them something to think about long after the story is done. Greta piece, nothing negative to say here. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers
J
reply by the author on 20-May-2007
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This story was very well done, and it flowed almost with an almost poetic quality. It made the words seem beautiful, but darkly so. They packed an emotional punch, and you have arranged them in a way which touches the reader and gives them something to think about long after the story is done. Greta piece, nothing negative to say here. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers
J
Comment Written 20-May-2007
reply by the author on 20-May-2007
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Hello J! Never have attempted something like this before - and it was a challenge because I am usually so wordy!!!! Am pleased you enjoyed my offering...diane
Comment from rhymerfortyniner
An excellent write, about a sad but common problem in our society. So many young people feel alone and unloved, insignificant and isolated.
Parents need to be informed and educated so they can help their children deal with and overcome these feelings.
Have a great day. Verna
reply by the author on 20-May-2007
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An excellent write, about a sad but common problem in our society. So many young people feel alone and unloved, insignificant and isolated.
Parents need to be informed and educated so they can help their children deal with and overcome these feelings.
Have a great day. Verna
Comment Written 20-May-2007
reply by the author on 20-May-2007
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Hello Verna, You are so right...so many walking wounded. Just hope I can help some...take care...diane
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You are very welccome. Yes, we all need to try and help. My young foster sone is one of the walking wounded, as you call them. He is not into cutting, but he wants to kill himself every time life gets a little hard, or someone disappoints him. Very difficult to deal with. Blessings, Verna
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I so hope he has someone he can talk to...that is so important...Take Care. . . diane
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I'm the only one he can talk to, and he does, but is it ever draining for me. I'm glad I can listen though, and bring him back to reality, where he knows that people love him. Blessings, Verna
Comment from DEKS
Dear Mrs. KT
Brilliant! Brilliant! Brilliant! I loved it. The agony of the no name child cutting themselves was truly heart felt and deeply touching. It's so beautifully crafted and descriptive of our own daily struggle to live the good life, but to yet fail again and again and again, until it can drive us up the walls. We as humans are not prepared to be weak, so God can be our strength. We want to do it ourselves over and over again. Cutters experience the agony more on a deep physical plane and want to hurt themselves looking for redemption, which they will never find this way.
Your poem is deeply moving and touches the deepest despair of the cutters in a real human compassionate way.
Well done!
Warm regards
Deks
reply by the author on 20-May-2007
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Dear Mrs. KT
Brilliant! Brilliant! Brilliant! I loved it. The agony of the no name child cutting themselves was truly heart felt and deeply touching. It's so beautifully crafted and descriptive of our own daily struggle to live the good life, but to yet fail again and again and again, until it can drive us up the walls. We as humans are not prepared to be weak, so God can be our strength. We want to do it ourselves over and over again. Cutters experience the agony more on a deep physical plane and want to hurt themselves looking for redemption, which they will never find this way.
Your poem is deeply moving and touches the deepest despair of the cutters in a real human compassionate way.
Well done!
Warm regards
Deks
Comment Written 20-May-2007
reply by the author on 20-May-2007
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Hello DEKS: I am deeply honored and humbled by your extraordinary review. I started writing, and the words just came. I can't get one girl out of my mind. Take Care. . . and be well...diane
Dear Diane
You're welcome.
I hope my prayers for the spesific girl you have in mind will set her free.
I also have a patient who'm has just started doing this, but at least she confided in me as her dentist mind you! I wish I had the skills to help her, but it seems it helps her a lot if I just listen to her and hug her. Unfortunately it does'nt help me to restore her teeth. I have referred her for proffesional help now, though.
Take care and keep up the good work
Warm regards
Deks
Comment from drivenbackward
That's pretty scary, Mrs. KT. I heard about this a few weeks ago, and didn't realize it was that bad. Family life isn't as strong as it used to be, I guess, leaving these kids to fend for themselves in an often cruel world. I liked the way you set this poem up. Original, fast, and easy to understand.
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reply by the author on 20-May-2007
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That's pretty scary, Mrs. KT. I heard about this a few weeks ago, and didn't realize it was that bad. Family life isn't as strong as it used to be, I guess, leaving these kids to fend for themselves in an often cruel world. I liked the way you set this poem up. Original, fast, and easy to understand.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-May-2007
reply by the author on 20-May-2007
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It is scary....really scary....So pleased that you enjoyed my offering. diane
