No Name Child
A Cutter's Letter to God49 total reviews
Comment from jlgtiger
It is hard to determine how a child finds themselves in such situations, KT. This practice is but a series of things kids do to belong and be recognized by their peer groups. It speaks much about our society today. Those who cut, get tatoos, want to have babies out of wedlock, choke each other until the margin of death is very close all indicate a problem that has evolved in our more current times ... not to mention the use of drugs and alcohol.
I once organized and ran a school for wayward girls in South Texas ... those who had an option of going to jail or a private school for incorrigibles. None wanted to come to the school!
They all had a basic problem with self worth and feelings of not being accepted ... and it seems 90% of the situations began and ended in the home. Parenting is a learned skill and in today's economy most parents do not wish to be engaged or bothered ... it is the day of cradle to grave gifts and guidance from the government, including the school systems, and parents leave the formation of their children's beliefs and characters up to the system. Sad commentary!
In my school, we simply disciplined the students, took away all of the ingredients of TV and movies, and allowed them to seek a Creator, who once accepted gave them direction and goals for their lives. It apparently worked as we had only about a 10 to 15% recitivism and most of the young ones who had been druggies and prostitutes went on to achieve normal and productive lives.
Your write, done smoothly, hits upon a hard attribute of a godless society ... one that allows the kids to grow up with their peers and follow the group like 'lemmings overy the cliffs.' Until the hearts are changed we will perhaps continue to see these trends continue.
Thanks for a very timely write. You did it well. Very best regards, Jerryd
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It is hard to determine how a child finds themselves in such situations, KT. This practice is but a series of things kids do to belong and be recognized by their peer groups. It speaks much about our society today. Those who cut, get tatoos, want to have babies out of wedlock, choke each other until the margin of death is very close all indicate a problem that has evolved in our more current times ... not to mention the use of drugs and alcohol.
I once organized and ran a school for wayward girls in South Texas ... those who had an option of going to jail or a private school for incorrigibles. None wanted to come to the school!
They all had a basic problem with self worth and feelings of not being accepted ... and it seems 90% of the situations began and ended in the home. Parenting is a learned skill and in today's economy most parents do not wish to be engaged or bothered ... it is the day of cradle to grave gifts and guidance from the government, including the school systems, and parents leave the formation of their children's beliefs and characters up to the system. Sad commentary!
In my school, we simply disciplined the students, took away all of the ingredients of TV and movies, and allowed them to seek a Creator, who once accepted gave them direction and goals for their lives. It apparently worked as we had only about a 10 to 15% recitivism and most of the young ones who had been druggies and prostitutes went on to achieve normal and productive lives.
Your write, done smoothly, hits upon a hard attribute of a godless society ... one that allows the kids to grow up with their peers and follow the group like 'lemmings overy the cliffs.' Until the hearts are changed we will perhaps continue to see these trends continue.
Thanks for a very timely write. You did it well. Very best regards, Jerryd
Comment Written 22-May-2007
Comment from Buctar
MS KT
I thought I was about to read a fiction story. I have to admit that I am not qualified to critique poetry, but I enjoyed reading your work. It is very "heavy" and profound. Thanks for posting it.
Buctar
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MS KT
I thought I was about to read a fiction story. I have to admit that I am not qualified to critique poetry, but I enjoyed reading your work. It is very "heavy" and profound. Thanks for posting it.
Buctar
Comment Written 22-May-2007
Comment from Paul_k
This is a shocking story/poem/prose. It tells a story of someone whose words and pleas seem to go unheard. Cutting is an awful thing that the writer brings to the fore so vividly. Thank you for this eye opener.
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This is a shocking story/poem/prose. It tells a story of someone whose words and pleas seem to go unheard. Cutting is an awful thing that the writer brings to the fore so vividly. Thank you for this eye opener.
Comment Written 21-May-2007
Comment from RenieReader
Mrs. KT: You have told this story of 'cutters' so well. Cutters say it's the only time they feel real. It is so sad and so difficult to overcome. You have expressed their dilemma perfectly. The more they cut, the more worthless they feel, and that leads to more cutting. Good luck.
I'm not sure if the contest allows contracted words. Guess I should ask Marjorie D. about them. If she says, yes, I'll upgrade your rating.
Renie
P.S. Sorry, I meant contractions instead of hyphenated words.
reply by the author on 21-May-2007
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Mrs. KT: You have told this story of 'cutters' so well. Cutters say it's the only time they feel real. It is so sad and so difficult to overcome. You have expressed their dilemma perfectly. The more they cut, the more worthless they feel, and that leads to more cutting. Good luck.
I'm not sure if the contest allows contracted words. Guess I should ask Marjorie D. about them. If she says, yes, I'll upgrade your rating.
Renie
P.S. Sorry, I meant contractions instead of hyphenated words.
Comment Written 21-May-2007
reply by the author on 21-May-2007
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Hello Renie...So pleased that you enjoyed my offering. I have to share, however, that I went back to my piece, and I couldn't find any hyphenated words!! Yikes! Not sure what you mean...perhaps, cntractions> Like, it's? If so, contractions are considered one word - Oh...do let me know what you find out. Take Care...diane
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Yes, I meant contractions. Sorry, I missed that part in the instructions, so I wasn't sure. I'll go in and change my rating.
Renie
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Thanks Renie....I appreciate that! This was so interesting to pen! diiane
Comment from D. Longo
This seems to sum up a "cutter's" view, Mrs KT. Wouldn't really know as I've known only one girl who suffered from this. JJ's categorically brilliant; makes it even more difficult to understand. In JJ's case, she seems ill at ease with her existence. Puzzling. Anyhow, this work is emotive and superbly executed. My acquaintance came immediately to mind. Good luck in the contest, my Friend. D.
reply by the author on 21-May-2007
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This seems to sum up a "cutter's" view, Mrs KT. Wouldn't really know as I've known only one girl who suffered from this. JJ's categorically brilliant; makes it even more difficult to understand. In JJ's case, she seems ill at ease with her existence. Puzzling. Anyhow, this work is emotive and superbly executed. My acquaintance came immediately to mind. Good luck in the contest, my Friend. D.
Comment Written 21-May-2007
reply by the author on 21-May-2007
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Hello Friend! I was shocked the first time I came into contact with one of these young women in my classroom. The young lady was reading a book about cutting, and I happened to see it on her desk. I inquired as to why she was reading it; she looked at me and simply drew back her sleeve. Pretty startling, to say the least. She has since received help, but what a nightmare. I don't know if I managed to capture anything in this offering, but it has really garnered a huge spectrum of opinions, I just wanted to try to write an offering under the constraints of the contest - and the subject just worked. Take Care...Visit again!! diane
Comment from mmichelle97219
I have worked and lived with some of these people, mostly girls, and they break my heart. The trama they go through to get to this point would have killed most of them. This is a very good posting, and an eye opener for those unaware of the condition.
Michelle
reply by the author on 21-May-2007
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I have worked and lived with some of these people, mostly girls, and they break my heart. The trama they go through to get to this point would have killed most of them. This is a very good posting, and an eye opener for those unaware of the condition.
Michelle
Comment Written 21-May-2007
reply by the author on 21-May-2007
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So pleased you enjoyed my offering! diane
Comment from Chgraphicurt
Very choppy, which can be cool if you keep rhythm consistent. For the most part, you did, but there were some places that could have used a break.
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reply by the author on 21-May-2007
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Very choppy, which can be cool if you keep rhythm consistent. For the most part, you did, but there were some places that could have used a break.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-May-2007
reply by the author on 21-May-2007
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You missed the whole point.
Comment from greeneyes
This is so sad... mainly since its so true to life. I used to know a cutter, who ended up committing suicide. By accident? I dont know.
This was a great contest entry, well done!
Good luck
reply by the author on 21-May-2007
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This is so sad... mainly since its so true to life. I used to know a cutter, who ended up committing suicide. By accident? I dont know.
This was a great contest entry, well done!
Good luck
Comment Written 21-May-2007
reply by the author on 21-May-2007
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Hello! Thank you so much for your kind review...diane
Comment from dragonqueen1983
you have an interesting poem here. tis well written and i love the langauge you used. the idea if a letter to god from someone small and unknown. well done
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you have an interesting poem here. tis well written and i love the langauge you used. the idea if a letter to god from someone small and unknown. well done
Comment Written 21-May-2007
Comment from Vennan
I, too, have dealt with teenage girls caught up in this cycle. Your piece rang true for me, strong and authentic. By keeping it spare and linear, you increased its impact more than any bushel of adjectives could have accomplished. Well done!
All the best,
Vennan
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I, too, have dealt with teenage girls caught up in this cycle. Your piece rang true for me, strong and authentic. By keeping it spare and linear, you increased its impact more than any bushel of adjectives could have accomplished. Well done!
All the best,
Vennan
Comment Written 21-May-2007
