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Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "The Story of Jen and Ren"I dare you....
6 total reviews
Comment from Beatlegirl61
THIS IS FANTABULOUS SHELLEY!!!
I think you've done a brilliant job here with these two challenges and wish you all the best in the competition!! Nice work...Good reading too!!!!
Take care and be well...Carol ::)
'beatle' quote today: "Give me love...give me peace on earth..."
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2006
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THIS IS FANTABULOUS SHELLEY!!!
I think you've done a brilliant job here with these two challenges and wish you all the best in the competition!! Nice work...Good reading too!!!!
Take care and be well...Carol ::)
'beatle' quote today: "Give me love...give me peace on earth..."
Comment Written 24-Sep-2006
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2006
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thank you so much :-)
Comment from GregoryC
What shall we call this Greek tragedy? This has all the trappings of either the "Oedipus Rex," and the Oedipus Complex (sexual relations between Mother and Son) or the Electra Complex (a daughter's unconscious libidinal desire for her father). Here, in your poem you create another dilemma. It's not an incestuous relationship because neither the brother or sister know each other. Just a tragic twist of fate brings them together. A very creative and imaginative situation that you've penned.
You have devised a pure literary composition written to be performed by actors in which a central character called a tragic protagonist or hero suffers some serious misfortune which is not exactly accidental and therefore is significant in that the misfortune is logically connected with the hero's actions. Tragedy stresses the vulnerability of human beings whose suffering is brought on by a combination of human and divine actions, but is generally undeserved with regard to its harshness. This genre, however, is not totally pessimistic in its outlook. Although many tragedies end in misery for the characters, there are also tragedies in which a satisfactory solution of the tragic situation is attained. You've devised a clever ending and a rather humorous, tongue-in-cheek 'climax' so to speak!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2006
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What shall we call this Greek tragedy? This has all the trappings of either the "Oedipus Rex," and the Oedipus Complex (sexual relations between Mother and Son) or the Electra Complex (a daughter's unconscious libidinal desire for her father). Here, in your poem you create another dilemma. It's not an incestuous relationship because neither the brother or sister know each other. Just a tragic twist of fate brings them together. A very creative and imaginative situation that you've penned.
You have devised a pure literary composition written to be performed by actors in which a central character called a tragic protagonist or hero suffers some serious misfortune which is not exactly accidental and therefore is significant in that the misfortune is logically connected with the hero's actions. Tragedy stresses the vulnerability of human beings whose suffering is brought on by a combination of human and divine actions, but is generally undeserved with regard to its harshness. This genre, however, is not totally pessimistic in its outlook. Although many tragedies end in misery for the characters, there are also tragedies in which a satisfactory solution of the tragic situation is attained. You've devised a clever ending and a rather humorous, tongue-in-cheek 'climax' so to speak!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2006
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2006
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LOL!
COOL!
thanx lots! :-)
Comment from rl dubour
The Story of Jen and Ren --- was very good and I would say you met the challents well, the imagery was very thought provoking as most woman tend to do. I know I said that phrase but don't think I ment it LOL great job, ron
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2006
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The Story of Jen and Ren --- was very good and I would say you met the challents well, the imagery was very thought provoking as most woman tend to do. I know I said that phrase but don't think I ment it LOL great job, ron
Comment Written 22-Sep-2006
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2006
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hehehe
thanx lots :-)
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lol--you done good!! :)
Comment from luna
Ok Pix, you did it. Congratulations on meeting our combined challenge! I'm glad the cretin lawyer didn't perform the ceremony, as I REALLY don't want to tie the proverbial knot again (except with Christopher Walken and he's taken). Another challenge to come soon...be on the lookout!
yf,
J *smile*
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2006
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Ok Pix, you did it. Congratulations on meeting our combined challenge! I'm glad the cretin lawyer didn't perform the ceremony, as I REALLY don't want to tie the proverbial knot again (except with Christopher Walken and he's taken). Another challenge to come soon...be on the lookout!
yf,
J *smile*
Comment Written 22-Sep-2006
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2006
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LOL!
thanx lots!
:-)
Comment from RaymondJohn
I can't tell if any of your poem is autobriographical, but both my wife and I found our birthmothers. My wife had to go through the agency. I found my totally by accident. My parents had a copy of my original baptismal certificate with my mother's name. We're both very pleased that we found our birth families. My birth-mother died five years after I was born giving birth to twins. Weird, huh? Thanks for a great poem. Ray.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2006
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I can't tell if any of your poem is autobriographical, but both my wife and I found our birthmothers. My wife had to go through the agency. I found my totally by accident. My parents had a copy of my original baptismal certificate with my mother's name. We're both very pleased that we found our birth families. My birth-mother died five years after I was born giving birth to twins. Weird, huh? Thanks for a great poem. Ray.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2006
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2006
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yea weird
nah nothing real in this one
just fun lol
thanx much :-)
Comment from ennahanid
Interesting challenges and very well met here...you done good, real good.
When ren sees this...Ren
Enjoyed this very much.
Thank you.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2006
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Interesting challenges and very well met here...you done good, real good.
When ren sees this...Ren
Enjoyed this very much.
Thank you.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2006
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2006
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fixing it now
was that the only reason for the 4?
thanx much :-)
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Well you know I am kind of new at this and still fumbling around in the dark so's to speak. I found today on reading Q and As that a 5 should be Should be rare. Outstanding: Ready for submission. I am really mixed up a bit with these ratings to be perfectly honest, I've been giving out 5s like they were M & Ms in abundant supply. I thought your piece was excellent...totally confuddled over this.
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no problem
just kinda wanna know if there was anything specific to work on in the poem itself, know what i mean?
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I changed it...I've been giving out so many M & Ms and I am partial to them myself. I just have got to quit reading the rules and regulations to get over this. LOL
