O Evils!
5-7-5. Short-lived dark pleasure or long-lived white joy?186 total reviews
Comment from whispersofthesoul
hiya,
your writing is addictive and most of what you write i dont get, and i love the 5-7-5 form. again this is one of those pieces, although i do have an interpretation of this piece which i cant say.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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hiya,
your writing is addictive and most of what you write i dont get, and i love the 5-7-5 form. again this is one of those pieces, although i do have an interpretation of this piece which i cant say.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from misscookie
It always amazes me how a writer can use so few words
Yet release such a strong meaningful statement
as you just done.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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It always amazes me how a writer can use so few words
Yet release such a strong meaningful statement
as you just done.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
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Your very welcome, until next time.
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer does a good job of getting the point across. The writer says so much using so little words as the emotion comes out through the words.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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The writer does a good job of getting the point across. The writer says so much using so little words as the emotion comes out through the words.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from Caressa_08
Yes, this is one poem to try to understand man does enjoy evils that aren't the greatest thing to do morally, etc. though finds pleasure still the same in doing so.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Yes, this is one poem to try to understand man does enjoy evils that aren't the greatest thing to do morally, etc. though finds pleasure still the same in doing so.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for the review
Comment from Joan E.
I admired the extreme contrast between the "black pleasure" and the "white joy." Your tiny 5-7-5 is quite thought provoking. Cheers- Joan
8/6/18
I did not remember the reinforcing picture and am glad you re-posted this compelling poem. More cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I admired the extreme contrast between the "black pleasure" and the "white joy." Your tiny 5-7-5 is quite thought provoking. Cheers- Joan
8/6/18
I did not remember the reinforcing picture and am glad you re-posted this compelling poem. More cheers- Joan
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from Gungalo
Happy with short-lived
Dark, illusive, black pleasure
If tasted white joy!
Welcome to FS Alcreator. I enjoyed reading you post and found it to be very progressive. Awesome if I might say so.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Happy with short-lived
Dark, illusive, black pleasure
If tasted white joy!
Welcome to FS Alcreator. I enjoyed reading you post and found it to be very progressive. Awesome if I might say so.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
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Comment from Lise Deangelo
The pure joy of indulging in "sins". Yes, that joy does not sustain. Your contrasts work well and good word choices, especially "illusive" Thanks for sharing :) Lise
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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The pure joy of indulging in "sins". Yes, that joy does not sustain. Your contrasts work well and good word choices, especially "illusive" Thanks for sharing :) Lise
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from Treischel
A wonderfully written 5-7-5 formatted poem about short lived pleasure. Nice juxtaposition of black and white. Joy, so elusive at times. Your question, black or white? The tension becomes palpable.
Congrats. Looks like you got sponsored.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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A wonderfully written 5-7-5 formatted poem about short lived pleasure. Nice juxtaposition of black and white. Joy, so elusive at times. Your question, black or white? The tension becomes palpable.
Congrats. Looks like you got sponsored.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for nice review
Comment from neharika.m
hi, the poem apparently talk of the two emotions, the two sides of the coin. if you want to enjoy the bounties, the scarcities provide the contrast.thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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hi, the poem apparently talk of the two emotions, the two sides of the coin. if you want to enjoy the bounties, the scarcities provide the contrast.thanks for sharing
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for nice review
Comment from ravenblack
good, ironic use of colors. engagement w/taboo pleasures brings short-lived happiness to the dark imbiber , but when indulged, bring a flash of white ( good) joy. at least good to the perceiver.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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good, ironic use of colors. engagement w/taboo pleasures brings short-lived happiness to the dark imbiber , but when indulged, bring a flash of white ( good) joy. at least good to the perceiver.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
