Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Darkness can not survive in the light. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013

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You're welcome.

Comment from Harlequin

Excellent

Strong, vivid imagery with a poem that I uniquely don't fully understand but I can see where are you coming. A thought-ptrovoking piece, that's for sure.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2013

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Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Good

Happy with short-lived
Dark, illusive, black pleasure?
If tasted white joy!


Happy WITH short-lived - would this not be better as
Happy was short-lived


Margaret

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2013

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Comment from Child of the King

Excellent

Please forgive me for asking a question that may make me appear stupid. Are you referring to Elvis's addiction to drugs? If so, what is black pleasure and is white pleasure cocaine? Thank you Happy Easter my friend

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013

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reply by Child of the King on 01-Apr-2013

Could you answer my questions please my friend? Thanks so much

Comment from Cornetist

Average

OK - Another "poem" that makes little or no sense. This also has the danger of being interpreted as racist...
("Dark, illusive, black pleasure....white joy")
(Do you mean "illusive" as in "illusionary"? or "elusive" as in "hard to grasp"? - either way. it stands weakly)
Cornetist

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2013

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Comment from TKField

Needs Improvement

I found the imagery here unsettling and weirdly racial. I agree that we need to have more dark pleasures to be happy. Yes, white joy is evil as your state in your Hi-Coo thingy. Purple melancholy vs. pink ennui. Texas cage match. Overtones of ugliness. Reminds me of Miami Beach 1964 when Clay met Liston for the first time and nobody knew what the outcome would be.

So to reiterate the point of your thingy; Say yes to black, dark pleasures, which are really good, and avoid like el plague-o, evil white joy which is really bad. Otherwise we would have no Oreo cookies. Capisce paisano?!

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 Comment Written 31-Mar-2013

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Comment from redrider6612

Good

The 5-7-5 form is perfect. I'm guessing "black pleasure" is meant to convey sinful pursuits. I have no idea what "white joy" is. Over all, a pretty good poem. Cheers!

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2013

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Comment from amada

Excellent

This is a very iconic work, it leads me to think, I like that.
I'm thrilled by the word "joy." We are all searching for that magic thrill. Well done!

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2013

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Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes this is very well written my friend again very thought provoking in this short form you have done well I liked this regards Jill

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2013

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Comment from Adri7enne

Excellent

I know you want to say that one is wiser to seek long-term peace and contentment rather than the thrill of momentary pleasure. Your words don't quite say it, forcing the reader to assume your meaning. Who knows? Maybe this was your intent.
Interesting poetry.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013

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