O Evils!
5-7-5. Short-lived dark pleasure or long-lived white joy?186 total reviews
Comment from Fish
Like the song says: it's better to burn out then
to fade away, my my, hey hey. LOL
I'm not so sure what "white joy" is... or maybe
I am... is it a bodily fluid emitted upon
ejaculation? that's my best guess! :)
Fish
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Like the song says: it's better to burn out then
to fade away, my my, hey hey. LOL
I'm not so sure what "white joy" is... or maybe
I am... is it a bodily fluid emitted upon
ejaculation? that's my best guess! :)
Fish
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR QUEST REVIEW.
Comment from garrymc5
dark and black are too much alike omit one then there's 'dark' Repettition can dilutes effect, not increase it. Short-lived. Nothing wrong with that. Illusive, How can pleasure be 'illusive' else" illusionary? Which? What?
If is a condition, your 'condition is an opposite, Thus is impossible.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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dark and black are too much alike omit one then there's 'dark' Repettition can dilutes effect, not increase it. Short-lived. Nothing wrong with that. Illusive, How can pleasure be 'illusive' else" illusionary? Which? What?
If is a condition, your 'condition is an opposite, Thus is impossible.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from dmt1967
Now this poem I like and the picture very nice on a cold night lol love the blue background and the roll of the poem very well done thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Now this poem I like and the picture very nice on a cold night lol love the blue background and the roll of the poem very well done thank you for sharing
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR GOOD REVIEW.
Comment from Aletheia
Hmmm this poem made me think of a not so well known Elvis song that happens to be one of my favorites, called A Little Less Conversation. Good job with the form and delivery of your message.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Hmmm this poem made me think of a not so well known Elvis song that happens to be one of my favorites, called A Little Less Conversation. Good job with the form and delivery of your message.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR LOVELY REVIEW.
Comment from TonyD
Your poem flows with a dynamic interjection of words
"Happy with short-lived
Dark, illusive, black pleasure?"
My question is why the obsession with black and white?
Tony
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Your poem flows with a dynamic interjection of words
"Happy with short-lived
Dark, illusive, black pleasure?"
My question is why the obsession with black and white?
Tony
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Alcreator,
Sometimes we think pleasure is more important than the white joy of life. It's true that dark pleasure can't out shine our need for something more stable and meaningful. But we are creatures that sin and take what we can get to make us happy. That is a sad state of affairs. Well done, chey
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Hi Alcreator,
Sometimes we think pleasure is more important than the white joy of life. It's true that dark pleasure can't out shine our need for something more stable and meaningful. But we are creatures that sin and take what we can get to make us happy. That is a sad state of affairs. Well done, chey
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR SUGGESTIVE REVIEW.
Comment from donaldww
Given your request for "original reviews", let me then, simply say this about that: Dark chocolate tastes better than white, and it's also much better for you. Neither has more longevity than the other, but black offers more.
DW
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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Given your request for "original reviews", let me then, simply say this about that: Dark chocolate tastes better than white, and it's also much better for you. Neither has more longevity than the other, but black offers more.
DW
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from isurp
What I gather form this somewhat cryptic 5-7-5 is that if people would only get a taste of "white joy" they would never again be satisfied with the tainted sweetness of sin's guilty pleasures. Thanks for making me think. -Steve
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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What I gather form this somewhat cryptic 5-7-5 is that if people would only get a taste of "white joy" they would never again be satisfied with the tainted sweetness of sin's guilty pleasures. Thanks for making me think. -Steve
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR THOUGHTFUL REVIEW.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This thought-provoking poem makes me think of people who reject the Gospel because they fear that being a believer will banish all chances of fun! They don't realize how much fun being a Christian can be.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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This thought-provoking poem makes me think of people who reject the Gospel because they fear that being a believer will banish all chances of fun! They don't realize how much fun being a Christian can be.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR INSPIRATIONAL REVIEW.
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
I enjoyed reading your well written poem. I liked how you described feelings and experience by using the contrasting values of black and white. The poem is expressivde and strong. Thanks for sharing. Warm regards, W ^-^
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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I enjoyed reading your well written poem. I liked how you described feelings and experience by using the contrasting values of black and white. The poem is expressivde and strong. Thanks for sharing. Warm regards, W ^-^
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR NICE REVIEW.
