Oh Life!
Viewing comments for Chapter 22 "Shouldn't Man Achieve Human Rank Status?"Experiences of living
132 total reviews
Comment from Robin Gilmor
Interesting thoughts, a bit jumbled but true. A look at where
God or gods came from and how they affect man. Where are we going? I like your clever lead off of each section with the letter from your title. Definitely makes one
think. Smiles. Robin :)
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
  |
Interesting thoughts, a bit jumbled but true. A look at where
God or gods came from and how they affect man. Where are we going? I like your clever lead off of each section with the letter from your title. Definitely makes one
think. Smiles. Robin :)
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
-
THANKS FOR YOUR NICE PROFESSIONAL REVIEW.
Comment from Crystal Carey
It is a good poem, although I think maybe a little work on the flow would help. I do like your over all idea with this poetry, and I think it is pointing us to the right path. Nice job.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
 |
It is a good poem, although I think maybe a little work on the flow would help. I do like your over all idea with this poetry, and I think it is pointing us to the right path. Nice job.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
-
THANKS.
Comment from Fish
You'd probably be amazing if your first
language were English... but it's obviously
not... keep trying tho... we all need
another dreamer, another Rimbaud in the
world.
Fish
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
|
You'd probably be amazing if your first
language were English... but it's obviously
not... keep trying tho... we all need
another dreamer, another Rimbaud in the
world.
Fish
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
-
THANKS.
Comment from RedGryffyn
Great poem. I like your style and wording. This piece makes the reader reflect prior to reading and the words really sink in. Powerful and great use of figurative language. Thank you for sharing.
Red Gryffyn
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
|
Great poem. I like your style and wording. This piece makes the reader reflect prior to reading and the words really sink in. Powerful and great use of figurative language. Thank you for sharing.
Red Gryffyn
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
-
THANKS FOR YOUR NICE REVIEW.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
No Heavens! Our democratic human gods control on earth
Rank! We've humans with nominated, elected annual gods
Alas, no more old creations! We're run by our gods now
Brilliant and true. Good insights in this piece, but the fact is that it's always been this way. We created God the way Moses did--as an unquestionable source of what WE want to impose on others. Man is a social animal... needs others like himherself to survive, yet that is hisher very downfall. It's a catch 22 and we're on the downside now, slidin down the slippery slope. Hope the next batch of dinosaurs have better luck than the last. :)
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
|
No Heavens! Our democratic human gods control on earth
Rank! We've humans with nominated, elected annual gods
Alas, no more old creations! We're run by our gods now
Brilliant and true. Good insights in this piece, but the fact is that it's always been this way. We created God the way Moses did--as an unquestionable source of what WE want to impose on others. Man is a social animal... needs others like himherself to survive, yet that is hisher very downfall. It's a catch 22 and we're on the downside now, slidin down the slippery slope. Hope the next batch of dinosaurs have better luck than the last. :)
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
-
THANKS FOR YOUR EXCELLENT REVIEW.
Comment from joann r romei
Hate to do this but, This seems like a rant, It has powerful statements and effects yet it is not puled together enough for the reader to ponder.
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
|
Hate to do this but, This seems like a rant, It has powerful statements and effects yet it is not puled together enough for the reader to ponder.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2013
-
THANKS.
Comment from Bill Schott
I just realized that the title, Shouldn't Man Achieve Human Rank Status, is made up of the first words of each stanza. I don't know which came first, but it works. I feel as though I'm reading the thoughts of an unraveling mind that is blessing and condemning, taking stock and mourning losses, and predicting as well as assessing the state of mankind.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
|
I just realized that the title, Shouldn't Man Achieve Human Rank Status, is made up of the first words of each stanza. I don't know which came first, but it works. I feel as though I'm reading the thoughts of an unraveling mind that is blessing and condemning, taking stock and mourning losses, and predicting as well as assessing the state of mankind.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
-
Thanks for your clear review.
Comment from Indie Skreet
this is posted under humour genre, and unless I am lacking a sense of humour which I find highly unlikely, I do not see one funny sentence in here. Indie
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
|
this is posted under humour genre, and unless I am lacking a sense of humour which I find highly unlikely, I do not see one funny sentence in here. Indie
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
-
thanks for your feedback...
it was wisely written...
appreciate your wisdom...
but i feel sick receiving your reviews...
please stop reviewing me henceforth...
hope you would escape me and my works...
i shall always be grateful if you please stop reviewing my works...
wishing you every success in your chosen goal...
-
Good.
Comment from write hand blue
An interesting picture, suitable for a futuristic write.
This writing follows the rules for an acrostic poem.
I think you need to sort out your ideas a bit. Writing is about communicating and it's all very well filling sentences with impressive almost random words. But it's no good if it reads like a mobile phone with bad reception.
Your first line says we should achieve Human rank status? Well I have news for you we are HUMAN BEINGS. Just look in the mirror...
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
|
An interesting picture, suitable for a futuristic write.
This writing follows the rules for an acrostic poem.
I think you need to sort out your ideas a bit. Writing is about communicating and it's all very well filling sentences with impressive almost random words. But it's no good if it reads like a mobile phone with bad reception.
Your first line says we should achieve Human rank status? Well I have news for you we are HUMAN BEINGS. Just look in the mirror...
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
-
Nice.
Comment from Mastery
Hi ALD. You do realize that if you shortened your name to be called something shorter, it would be friendlier and a lot easier to correspond with fanstory members. LOL..
Your poem here is atypical of your continued intelligent writings which are always food for thought. Thank you again....Bob
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
|
Hi ALD. You do realize that if you shortened your name to be called something shorter, it would be friendlier and a lot easier to correspond with fanstory members. LOL..
Your poem here is atypical of your continued intelligent writings which are always food for thought. Thank you again....Bob
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
-
thanks for such a nice review
