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Comment from Mai Mai
This is an interesting piece. It provides us with wisdom as well as reason to give pause and reflect. Good work and good luck.
Mai Mai
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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This is an interesting piece. It provides us with wisdom as well as reason to give pause and reflect. Good work and good luck.
Mai Mai
Comment Written 28-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR YOUR REASONED NICE REVIEW.
Comment from livingwords
This is good, filled with plenty to chew on. You're a little loose with you references to 'millions'(man in a million centuries) and trillions (each hour, we invest trillions). Your frustration with all things invented by man to make make less worthy is the message I received. Good writing. Dan :))
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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This is good, filled with plenty to chew on. You're a little loose with you references to 'millions'(man in a million centuries) and trillions (each hour, we invest trillions). Your frustration with all things invented by man to make make less worthy is the message I received. Good writing. Dan :))
Comment Written 28-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR YOUR CREDITABLE PROFESSIONAL REVIEW.
Comment from TKField
I am completely against man achieving human rank status! It is unthinkable! Badger rank status is all we deserve to aspire to! Mollusk rank status on a good day!
We can all agree that we need a lot more bio scientists! They are currently on the verge of a breakthrough discovery proving the existence of a micro world mirroring our own in every way except they don't have indoor plumbing! I think the prophet Jolson said it best: Swaaanee, how I love ya, how I love ya, my dear old Swanee!
A trillion billion?! That's a lot of salami, chief! Where would we hide all that salaam?! In the upper-U.S, that's where! Upper-U.S! Just ask my buddy Hugh! The honorable Sir Hugh G. Rection! He's a hard man, erect in bearing, but basically a good egg!
So to reiterate, I completely agree with your stance that man should not achieve human rank status under any circumstances! Women yes, but not man! Men may be rank, but that's just the smell. Open a window, podnah! Just say nyet to human rank status!
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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I am completely against man achieving human rank status! It is unthinkable! Badger rank status is all we deserve to aspire to! Mollusk rank status on a good day!
We can all agree that we need a lot more bio scientists! They are currently on the verge of a breakthrough discovery proving the existence of a micro world mirroring our own in every way except they don't have indoor plumbing! I think the prophet Jolson said it best: Swaaanee, how I love ya, how I love ya, my dear old Swanee!
A trillion billion?! That's a lot of salami, chief! Where would we hide all that salaam?! In the upper-U.S, that's where! Upper-U.S! Just ask my buddy Hugh! The honorable Sir Hugh G. Rection! He's a hard man, erect in bearing, but basically a good egg!
So to reiterate, I completely agree with your stance that man should not achieve human rank status under any circumstances! Women yes, but not man! Men may be rank, but that's just the smell. Open a window, podnah! Just say nyet to human rank status!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from justatuna
Yours is a difficult style to understand, but I'm hesitant to judge because I like the underlying message. Just because I don't understand the style doesn't mean it's not good. I'll keep trying.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Yours is a difficult style to understand, but I'm hesitant to judge because I like the underlying message. Just because I don't understand the style doesn't mean it's not good. I'll keep trying.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR YOUR HEARTY QUEST REVIEW.
Comment from guinea
Man does have his gods whether they are other people or possessions. If they come before God they are gods to them. Your words flow smoothly and with truth. Shows deep thinking.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Man does have his gods whether they are other people or possessions. If they come before God they are gods to them. Your words flow smoothly and with truth. Shows deep thinking.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR YOUR PHILOSOPHICAL INSPIRING REVIEW.
Comment from OLA THOMAS
Good ahievemnt. This is really an acrosstic poem, done with consciousness of the tecnicalties of an acrosstic. I love how use the target word of each stanzer to start the stanza.
ola thomas
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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Good ahievemnt. This is really an acrosstic poem, done with consciousness of the tecnicalties of an acrosstic. I love how use the target word of each stanzer to start the stanza.
ola thomas
Comment Written 28-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR YOUR INTERESTING PROFESSIONAL REVIEW.
Comment from rhymelord
This work does contain some deep insights into the human condition and our relationships with each other and with God(s). However, its staccato presentation of "one liners", with no recognisable flow of thought and its lack of grammatical structure detracts from what might be a meaningful piece of writing.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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This work does contain some deep insights into the human condition and our relationships with each other and with God(s). However, its staccato presentation of "one liners", with no recognisable flow of thought and its lack of grammatical structure detracts from what might be a meaningful piece of writing.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 28-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from Elares
This is a work of art! I have no criticism, only admiration for this piece! It is so full of feeling and its rhythm flows so perfectly to convey your thoughts. In my mind, as I am reading this, my inner voice is shouting the words and leaping across a darkened stage, lit by a single harsh spotlight. I feel this, truly. Excellent poetry.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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This is a work of art! I have no criticism, only admiration for this piece! It is so full of feeling and its rhythm flows so perfectly to convey your thoughts. In my mind, as I am reading this, my inner voice is shouting the words and leaping across a darkened stage, lit by a single harsh spotlight. I feel this, truly. Excellent poetry.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR 6-STAR RATED EXCELLENT PROFESSIONAL REVIEW.
Comment from Econ Teacher
The wording and way this is written makes it very difficult to understand the message. I see your "punctuation is intentional indeed." However, the excessive use of the exclamation point makes it less readable and lowers the power and effectiveness of the punctuation.
Also, upto is not a word. It's two words.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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The wording and way this is written makes it very difficult to understand the message. I see your "punctuation is intentional indeed." However, the excessive use of the exclamation point makes it less readable and lowers the power and effectiveness of the punctuation.
Also, upto is not a word. It's two words.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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THANKS.
Comment from GarthL
I think you've done well by creating this as an acrostic poem with each stanza from your title. I also think you've made some good points here but they don't have enough impact because of the verbose nature of your write. I believe in the notion of less is more and allows the reader to create their own understanding. There are some lines here I don't understand at all but that may be my inadequacy.
I give the 5 stars for the obvious effort that went into this piece but encourage you to be more precise and leave some breathing space in your writing. LiveLove'n'Peace, Garth
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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I think you've done well by creating this as an acrostic poem with each stanza from your title. I also think you've made some good points here but they don't have enough impact because of the verbose nature of your write. I believe in the notion of less is more and allows the reader to create their own understanding. There are some lines here I don't understand at all but that may be my inadequacy.
I give the 5 stars for the obvious effort that went into this piece but encourage you to be more precise and leave some breathing space in your writing. LiveLove'n'Peace, Garth
Comment Written 27-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2013
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THANKS FOR EXCELLENT PROFESSIONAL REVIEW.
