Oh Life!
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Promote Humanity Serve Mankind B' Human"Experiences of living
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Mankind does much to self, others, and nature. I am not sure why. It really doesn't need to be that way. I am not a poet so I can't review your poem on the poet aspects.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Mankind does much to self, others, and nature. I am not sure why. It really doesn't need to be that way. I am not a poet so I can't review your poem on the poet aspects.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for the review
Comment from JM daSilva
I'm trying to understand the general philosophical view. I have nothing against the profit motive though. Fanstory is an example, people review you either because you promote your stuff or because you are willing to give something in return. Without the profit motive, I don't think we would have advanced economically, even the communists had to admit it.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I'm trying to understand the general philosophical view. I have nothing against the profit motive though. Fanstory is an example, people review you either because you promote your stuff or because you are willing to give something in return. Without the profit motive, I don't think we would have advanced economically, even the communists had to admit it.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for fantastic professional review
appreciated much
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You're welcome.
Comment from Pili Pubul
No doubt about your brilliant mind, but encounter the same complexities
In your complicated way to express clearly your message.
Less words and straight to the point may reach the minds faster and deeply.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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No doubt about your brilliant mind, but encounter the same complexities
In your complicated way to express clearly your message.
Less words and straight to the point may reach the minds faster and deeply.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks
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Welcome
Comment from donaldww
This is a acrostic poem about life. The poet starts by promoting and justifying altruistic behaviour, and continues that tact, for the most part, throughout the poem. Many of the concepts are sound and wonderful, but the writing is stilted and grammatically challenged in places. For example:
Be man first, contribute globally on way to human
Entries personal bank balance, achievement is personal ?
Does God patronize it? He doesn't personally, but countries do patronize the division of colonies, in the name of religion. Ostensibly to civilize the natives.
The last stanza is close to incomprehensible to me. I think that this poem has potential, but needs work on grammar and comprensibility.
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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This is a acrostic poem about life. The poet starts by promoting and justifying altruistic behaviour, and continues that tact, for the most part, throughout the poem. Many of the concepts are sound and wonderful, but the writing is stilted and grammatically challenged in places. For example:
Be man first, contribute globally on way to human
Entries personal bank balance, achievement is personal ?
Does God patronize it? He doesn't personally, but countries do patronize the division of colonies, in the name of religion. Ostensibly to civilize the natives.
The last stanza is close to incomprehensible to me. I think that this poem has potential, but needs work on grammar and comprensibility.
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for fantastic professional review
appreciated much
Comment from robina1978
And yet a next one I found. Someone asked you if you were against religion but from your last stanza I think: certainly not. Good question to ask in this Acrostic as well. A joy to read and review.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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And yet a next one I found. Someone asked you if you were against religion but from your last stanza I think: certainly not. Good question to ask in this Acrostic as well. A joy to read and review.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for nice review
Comment from Tina McKala
Human, hue in a man // i loved this little play with the word, really excellent!!
another chapter, again strong language and attitude. well penned.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Human, hue in a man // i loved this little play with the word, really excellent!!
another chapter, again strong language and attitude. well penned.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for the review
Comment from Righteous Riter
The creativity and the talent of the writer is displayed through this Acrostic poem. This piece is well thought out as the message is clear. The writer shares his thoughts and emotion with the reader.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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The creativity and the talent of the writer is displayed through this Acrostic poem. This piece is well thought out as the message is clear. The writer shares his thoughts and emotion with the reader.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
Comment from Sanku
Excellent acrostic form .i t vividly portrays your observations of society and its inhuman illogical ways .we have to learn from nature.nature never discriminates and it is high time we went to a simple mode of life .Thank you for writing this.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Excellent acrostic form .i t vividly portrays your observations of society and its inhuman illogical ways .we have to learn from nature.nature never discriminates and it is high time we went to a simple mode of life .Thank you for writing this.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for nice review
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Alcreator,
I just reviewed one of your writings that defines what man is as he lives and rules upon the Earth.
This piece is expertly written defining what man should strive to be. Civilization and the lives of many will improve if man follows God's plan for his prized creation. The two greatest commands are:
Luke 10:27 (NIV) He answered: "`Love the Lord your God with all your heart and with all your soul and with all your strength and with all your mind'; and, `Love your neighbor as yourself.'"
If we accomplish these words of God, the Earth will be a much better place to live.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Curtis
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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Alcreator,
I just reviewed one of your writings that defines what man is as he lives and rules upon the Earth.
This piece is expertly written defining what man should strive to be. Civilization and the lives of many will improve if man follows God's plan for his prized creation. The two greatest commands are:
Luke 10:27 (NIV) He answered: "`Love the Lord your God with all your heart and with all your soul and with all your strength and with all your mind'; and, `Love your neighbor as yourself.'"
If we accomplish these words of God, the Earth will be a much better place to live.
Thanks for sharing your thoughts.
Curtis
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for fantastic professional review
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, alcreator, you did an excellent job writing this acrostic poem about serving mankind to promote humanity. it sounds like you're disapproving of Christianity from what i could make of it. if i'm wrong, let me know.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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this is very well written, alcreator, you did an excellent job writing this acrostic poem about serving mankind to promote humanity. it sounds like you're disapproving of Christianity from what i could make of it. if i'm wrong, let me know.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
