Oh Life!
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Promote Humanity Serve Mankind B' Human"Experiences of living
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Comment from Selina Stambi
I was able to understand this one better than the others.
The lines are choppy and I am beginning to think again, that I am missing something.
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I was able to understand this one better than the others.
The lines are choppy and I am beginning to think again, that I am missing something.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem is a bit hard for me in places, but I gathered this theme: Man should strive to be more like God, who is no respecter of person (status, race, etc.). Also, we can learn so much by observing nature.
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Your poem is a bit hard for me in places, but I gathered this theme: Man should strive to be more like God, who is no respecter of person (status, race, etc.). Also, we can learn so much by observing nature.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
Comment from dmt1967
I like the verse about God loves everyone he doesn't judge or personalize his love very well written I like the human kind theme thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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I like the verse about God loves everyone he doesn't judge or personalize his love very well written I like the human kind theme thank you for sharing
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
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thanks for nice review
Comment from Nebukadneser
Aah! Another gem to chew over and over again. you are certainly a good teacher, my friend and you get the message of the poem across in so many beautiful ways. I don't think anyone can read this poem and don't feel its effect on their lives.
well done
you're the milky way
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
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Aah! Another gem to chew over and over again. you are certainly a good teacher, my friend and you get the message of the poem across in so many beautiful ways. I don't think anyone can read this poem and don't feel its effect on their lives.
well done
you're the milky way
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from ravenblack
sorry, but this acrostic - while I am with you in some parts- dissolves into incoherent logic and strange word combinations that just do not work. I read this through several times and feel the need for Tylenol.
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sorry, but this acrostic - while I am with you in some parts- dissolves into incoherent logic and strange word combinations that just do not work. I read this through several times and feel the need for Tylenol.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from allborn66
This is a very interesting poem. You give the reader many point to ponder. The word choice is very strong, and the piece has a nice flow.
Barbara
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This is a very interesting poem. You give the reader many point to ponder. The word choice is very strong, and the piece has a nice flow.
Barbara
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
Comment from mizzkris20
I've read a LOT of your poems today and I have to admit that this is one of the best. Excellent job writing this acrostic poem about serving mankind to promote humanity.
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I've read a LOT of your poems today and I have to admit that this is one of the best. Excellent job writing this acrostic poem about serving mankind to promote humanity.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
Comment from visionary1234
I 'got' this one - yeah! I love it when your write is straightforward and you have a unifying theme - except for the last verse where I got a bit lost! :)S
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I 'got' this one - yeah! I love it when your write is straightforward and you have a unifying theme - except for the last verse where I got a bit lost! :)S
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
Comment from adewpearl
I like your questions that show only people do thinks like displease other people and fail to care for children while animals and oceans and other parts of nature do not commit those sins of bad behavior
good use of questions to engage the reader
doesn't moonlit care - do you mean, doesn't moonlight care?
I'm not sure what you mean by tax nothing immoral
good touches of alliteration in phrases like humanity, a harmonized and race or religion
Again, I have an easier time getting an overall feel for your message than in understanding individual lines
Brooke
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I like your questions that show only people do thinks like displease other people and fail to care for children while animals and oceans and other parts of nature do not commit those sins of bad behavior
good use of questions to engage the reader
doesn't moonlit care - do you mean, doesn't moonlight care?
I'm not sure what you mean by tax nothing immoral
good touches of alliteration in phrases like humanity, a harmonized and race or religion
Again, I have an easier time getting an overall feel for your message than in understanding individual lines
Brooke
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for professional review
Comment from mauial
I like your use of questions throughout to get the reader to think about how to serve for the good of others. The thing is that not everyone will take up the call to be more than what we are, imperfect humans. But if we can do so individually at least will sleep good at night.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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I like your use of questions throughout to get the reader to think about how to serve for the good of others. The thing is that not everyone will take up the call to be more than what we are, imperfect humans. But if we can do so individually at least will sleep good at night.
Comment Written 17-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2013
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thanks for good review
