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Comment from Senyai
Hi Alcreator,
I am entralled by this poem. I think you are contrasting the way humankind as a global unit, serves only to favoritism, to only those who have the same religion, who are like themselves, the same race, creed and like minded, unlike God who comes to all freely. God loves all the same, gives to all the gifts of his heart and being.
I like the lines that explain these things ...
"Ultimate contribution like air serves beyond color, religion or sex"
" As history supports civilization; as God offers His gifts to all equally
No personalization; serve as the sun reaches your doors equally"
Here you admonish Humankind to do the same as God does, giving freely of his gifts to all mankind, so should we all give our gifts to all equally.
Great work. Again, I imagine your poem as a dialog between father and son as they walk together talking in the cool evening air :-)
All the best,
Senyai
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Hi Alcreator,
I am entralled by this poem. I think you are contrasting the way humankind as a global unit, serves only to favoritism, to only those who have the same religion, who are like themselves, the same race, creed and like minded, unlike God who comes to all freely. God loves all the same, gives to all the gifts of his heart and being.
I like the lines that explain these things ...
"Ultimate contribution like air serves beyond color, religion or sex"
" As history supports civilization; as God offers His gifts to all equally
No personalization; serve as the sun reaches your doors equally"
Here you admonish Humankind to do the same as God does, giving freely of his gifts to all mankind, so should we all give our gifts to all equally.
Great work. Again, I imagine your poem as a dialog between father and son as they walk together talking in the cool evening air :-)
All the best,
Senyai
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
Comment from Gert sherwood
Alcreator Litt Dear I like your questions and I believe your answers.
A quote that I found--
Change is never easy, and it often creates discord, but when people come together for the good of humanity and the Earth, we can accomplish great things.
David Suzuki
Gert
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Alcreator Litt Dear I like your questions and I believe your answers.
A quote that I found--
Change is never easy, and it often creates discord, but when people come together for the good of humanity and the Earth, we can accomplish great things.
David Suzuki
Gert
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
Comment from Boogienights
The greatest thing that one man can do for another is show compassion and humanity. It's what God expects of us and what we should desire as well. I like the themes you explore in your poetry. :)
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The greatest thing that one man can do for another is show compassion and humanity. It's what God expects of us and what we should desire as well. I like the themes you explore in your poetry. :)
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
Alcreator:
Sometimes it is a bit difficult for me to follow your train of thought as it seems you tend to write in a cylindrical model that does not always follow the same pattern. It often requires me to reread several times to ensure I get the depth and breadth of what you are saying. Perhaps it is just me, but more precise wording would seem to work to your advantage.
Rdfrdmom2
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Alcreator:
Sometimes it is a bit difficult for me to follow your train of thought as it seems you tend to write in a cylindrical model that does not always follow the same pattern. It often requires me to reread several times to ensure I get the depth and breadth of what you are saying. Perhaps it is just me, but more precise wording would seem to work to your advantage.
Rdfrdmom2
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
Comment from royowen
God is the greatest of all servants, He manifested Himself in Jesus, Hevsaidvto His disciples, "if you've seen me you've seen the Father". "Whatever the Father does I do likewise,, His will is my will" beautifully written, well said, blessings Roy
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God is the greatest of all servants, He manifested Himself in Jesus, Hevsaidvto His disciples, "if you've seen me you've seen the Father". "Whatever the Father does I do likewise,, His will is my will" beautifully written, well said, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
Comment from elchupakabra
I enjoyed this free verse, it was certainly inquisitive to say the least. I do like the openness and receptive quality of the piece, that is nice to see - in today's world, we need more people to be inclusive. Great work and thanks for sharing. Later daze.
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I enjoyed this free verse, it was certainly inquisitive to say the least. I do like the openness and receptive quality of the piece, that is nice to see - in today's world, we need more people to be inclusive. Great work and thanks for sharing. Later daze.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
Comment from Ulla
Hi there, to be honest I am not quite sure what you want to say in this rather long free verse poem. I've tried to make sense of it but will still needa little more time. I liked your words and rhythm of the poem. Ulla:)))
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Hi there, to be honest I am not quite sure what you want to say in this rather long free verse poem. I've tried to make sense of it but will still needa little more time. I liked your words and rhythm of the poem. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. I get your message and it is well thought out. I like your poem. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
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I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. I get your message and it is well thought out. I like your poem. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Inventive device makes for a powerful presentation with provocative questions. Startling imagery, much of which I won't pretend to comprehend, but I think I get the gist of your theme.
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Inventive device makes for a powerful presentation with provocative questions. Startling imagery, much of which I won't pretend to comprehend, but I think I get the gist of your theme.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
Comment from ephraim crud, COS.
a well thought acrostic, ALD, but,
again, 'tis somewhat verbose.
unfortunately what we have is human,
be it good or bad and, but for a miracle,
the shit we've created will continue
till we drown in our own cesspit of greed.
regards, eph.
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a well thought acrostic, ALD, but,
again, 'tis somewhat verbose.
unfortunately what we have is human,
be it good or bad and, but for a miracle,
the shit we've created will continue
till we drown in our own cesspit of greed.
regards, eph.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
