O My God and Mother Nature!
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Comment from Anastajiya
Wow this is great. I think I will read your entire book of poems. This is absolutely great! I like how you just create your poems in such unique styles!
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Wow this is great. I think I will read your entire book of poems. This is absolutely great! I like how you just create your poems in such unique styles!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
Comment from Dawn Munro
Once again, I think you are struggling a bit with the English language, though your meaning hasn't suffered terribly - this is a wonderful poem, inspiring faith and reminding that God lives in each of us.
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Once again, I think you are struggling a bit with the English language, though your meaning hasn't suffered terribly - this is a wonderful poem, inspiring faith and reminding that God lives in each of us.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
Comment from Cedar
I like this piece. We all must have faith in God, pass His life tests, do good deeds and help our fellow man. Then, we can bathe in His infinite gifts that He provides to us.
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I like this piece. We all must have faith in God, pass His life tests, do good deeds and help our fellow man. Then, we can bathe in His infinite gifts that He provides to us.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
Comment from terry drake
Most of your poems seem to read as broken thoughts across a spectrum of somewhat unrelated subjects. But the ones you chose to relate to God seem united in thought.
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Most of your poems seem to read as broken thoughts across a spectrum of somewhat unrelated subjects. But the ones you chose to relate to God seem united in thought.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hey there
I'm feeling this message. It's like you have written this to me personally. The message is felt in my heart as I feel as one with this piece.
Bear
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Hey there
I'm feeling this message. It's like you have written this to me personally. The message is felt in my heart as I feel as one with this piece.
Bear
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
Comment from Crystal Carey
I do not agree, He has never breathed. Air would mean nothing except to keep his children contained within the test that he lays before us. The flow needs work, OK Let me try a take at your words:
Have faith in He; be blest.
Pass His test, Selfless servant.
Provide, help one another.
Live in infinite gifts of love
Know his love for He created you.
Just some ideas, I don't want to give you a review without some ideas. Thank you!
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I do not agree, He has never breathed. Air would mean nothing except to keep his children contained within the test that he lays before us. The flow needs work, OK Let me try a take at your words:
Have faith in He; be blest.
Pass His test, Selfless servant.
Provide, help one another.
Live in infinite gifts of love
Know his love for He created you.
Just some ideas, I don't want to give you a review without some ideas. Thank you!
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
Comment from twinklepoems
I appreciate the underlying thought of your poem but I found your poem difficult to read. The words don't seem to flow easily. Your poetry seems more like a collection of thoughts than painting a picture of art.
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I appreciate the underlying thought of your poem but I found your poem difficult to read. The words don't seem to flow easily. Your poetry seems more like a collection of thoughts than painting a picture of art.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
Comment from Nebukadneser
Brilliant! Brilliant! Brilliant! Oh wise one this is very very good - take a bow. Your wisdom is amazing and the way you express it is beyond amazing.
Well done
you're a star
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
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Brilliant! Brilliant! Brilliant! Oh wise one this is very very good - take a bow. Your wisdom is amazing and the way you express it is beyond amazing.
Well done
you're a star
Cool bananas and warm regards
Nebukadneser
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
Comment from donaldww
I read this poem and am going to regurgitate with words I think it is saying.
Have faith in God and be blessed.
Pass his tests, serve man selflessly,
And earn status by your works.
Live free, receive infinite gifts
Feel pride--he too breathes the same air.
Again, I think you have some good ideas, but you need to work on your writing skills. No one will listen to a musician who makes mistakes during their performance, no matter how inspired.
The same principle applies to poets.
Cheers,
DW
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I read this poem and am going to regurgitate with words I think it is saying.
Have faith in God and be blessed.
Pass his tests, serve man selflessly,
And earn status by your works.
Live free, receive infinite gifts
Feel pride--he too breathes the same air.
Again, I think you have some good ideas, but you need to work on your writing skills. No one will listen to a musician who makes mistakes during their performance, no matter how inspired.
The same principle applies to poets.
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
Comment from words
The lines here are not grammatical ... they read like English put through a bad translator. They seem just a series of didactic commands. I find no poetry in the execution.
I am not sure what you intention was.
Have God faith; be blest.
Pass His tests, serve man selfless.
Earn status per work,
Live in free infinite gifts
Feel pride; He too breathes same air.
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The lines here are not grammatical ... they read like English put through a bad translator. They seem just a series of didactic commands. I find no poetry in the execution.
I am not sure what you intention was.
Have God faith; be blest.
Pass His tests, serve man selfless.
Earn status per work,
Live in free infinite gifts
Feel pride; He too breathes same air.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
