O My God and Mother Nature!
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Ol' Wave!"Appreciation of God and Mother Nature
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Comment from Diny
Interesting idea- sort of reminded me about Katrina from last year- can you belive its been a year since that? anyway interesting idea and I think you may be on to something- I did find this with your weekly reader banner just wanted you to know it was werkin' Write on... DINY
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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Interesting idea- sort of reminded me about Katrina from last year- can you belive its been a year since that? anyway interesting idea and I think you may be on to something- I did find this with your weekly reader banner just wanted you to know it was werkin' Write on... DINY
Comment Written 16-Aug-2006
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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THANKS A LOT FOR THIS PROFESSIONAL REVIEW I DO APPRECIATE.
Comment from Buckshot99
There's a lot of imagery here that makes it easy to see the flood and the resulting regrowth afterward. It brings forth images of the flooding in New Orleans and other areas. Well written.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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There's a lot of imagery here that makes it easy to see the flood and the resulting regrowth afterward. It brings forth images of the flooding in New Orleans and other areas. Well written.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2006
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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THANKS A LOT FOR THIS PROFESSIONAL REVIEW I DO APPRECIATE.
Comment from Hetty
Hi Alcreator,
Oooh... this one was almost scary to read. Suddenly I felt like I was back in the hmmm....fourteenth century and got the extraordinary image of a sort of castle-on-stilts siege. Probably senility. But that is what your writing does, baby! I liove the association of nature with man and man with nature inextricably intertwined in each other's histories. Nicely done. VERY vivid!
Hetty
Sorry. That's not particularly technically constructive is it? The poem has its own flow, it starts with a call to attention, builds up perfectly in pace and comes down on a strong ending line. There you go!
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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Hi Alcreator,
Oooh... this one was almost scary to read. Suddenly I felt like I was back in the hmmm....fourteenth century and got the extraordinary image of a sort of castle-on-stilts siege. Probably senility. But that is what your writing does, baby! I liove the association of nature with man and man with nature inextricably intertwined in each other's histories. Nicely done. VERY vivid!
Hetty
Sorry. That's not particularly technically constructive is it? The poem has its own flow, it starts with a call to attention, builds up perfectly in pace and comes down on a strong ending line. There you go!
Comment Written 15-Aug-2006
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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THANKS A LOT FOR THIS HONEST REVIEW I DO APPRECIATE MUCH.
Comment from Ainsley_Jo_Phillips
It took a little digging to find the message in this almost-like-a-word-salad poem, and I don't know if the message I found is the message you had in mind when you wrote it.
This is like the ink-blots one looks at in a psychiatrist's office, and can be interpreted in a number of different ways.
What I saw in this poem was the attack of Hurricane Katrina and the struggle back to some kind of comfort and sanity beyond its aftermath. In the end, the characters in this poem might be seen as survivors who are in good shape for the shape that they're in.
Was this what you had in mind? Or was it something else entirely?
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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It took a little digging to find the message in this almost-like-a-word-salad poem, and I don't know if the message I found is the message you had in mind when you wrote it.
This is like the ink-blots one looks at in a psychiatrist's office, and can be interpreted in a number of different ways.
What I saw in this poem was the attack of Hurricane Katrina and the struggle back to some kind of comfort and sanity beyond its aftermath. In the end, the characters in this poem might be seen as survivors who are in good shape for the shape that they're in.
Was this what you had in mind? Or was it something else entirely?
Comment Written 15-Aug-2006
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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THANKS FOR THIS INTENSIVE REVIEW I APPRECIATE. YOU ARE RIGHT.
Comment from G.B. Smith
Ho! Back, you strike men!
High water, dark stone, lash homes!
Lock links, drown day long!
Marooned hearts cry help for hours.
Calm! Now, see day light.
Saved pop re-breathe, off shore; how
Faiths find sunshine, glow, sprout genes.
Lives smile fading ol' dark days
There is a reason this is recogonized, it is because it is really wonderful. I will go back when time permits and review from chapter one.
Bear
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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Ho! Back, you strike men!
High water, dark stone, lash homes!
Lock links, drown day long!
Marooned hearts cry help for hours.
Calm! Now, see day light.
Saved pop re-breathe, off shore; how
Faiths find sunshine, glow, sprout genes.
Lives smile fading ol' dark days
There is a reason this is recogonized, it is because it is really wonderful. I will go back when time permits and review from chapter one.
Bear
Comment Written 15-Aug-2006
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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THANKS FOR THIS REVIEW, HONOR, GOOD WISHES AND READING TARGET I DO APPRECIATE MUCH.
Comment from Senyai
ALCREATOR WRITER, you captured the essence of the wave that is uncontrollably destructive, but human spirit rises above all the same. Well written and striking in its brevity.
Foxey
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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ALCREATOR WRITER, you captured the essence of the wave that is uncontrollably destructive, but human spirit rises above all the same. Well written and striking in its brevity.
Foxey
Comment Written 15-Aug-2006
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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THANK YOU FOR THIS REVIEW WITH APPRECIATION I DO APPRECIATE.
Comment from poezija
This short but very good poem proves that sometimes "Less is More". I had to read it a few times thinking that I wasn't getting the meaning. It certainly made me think and a good poem does that..so well done and God bless!!..It is good with great imagery and topped with a great picture.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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This short but very good poem proves that sometimes "Less is More". I had to read it a few times thinking that I wasn't getting the meaning. It certainly made me think and a good poem does that..so well done and God bless!!..It is good with great imagery and topped with a great picture.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2006
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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THANKS FOR THIS REVIEW WITH THE HIGHEST ORDER OF PRAISE AND APPRECIATION I DO APPRECIATE MUCH.
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you are very welcome!!
Comment from ronnie5o8
....Traumatic past, refusing to die. Stubborn will
But move on shall I, against all odds... Learning the lessons nevertheless. Hope springs life.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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....Traumatic past, refusing to die. Stubborn will
But move on shall I, against all odds... Learning the lessons nevertheless. Hope springs life.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2006
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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THANKS FOR THIS AWESOME REVIEW I DO APPRCIATE MUCH.
Comment from MFOX
I'm glad you gave the author's note about the beats... I read it the first time and was totally lost... then I read it a second time using the suggested beats and it helped ALOT. It is hard to review one way or the other on this... so, we'll go with, it meets the beat, gives a message, and hasn't got any major technical errors that I can see... That must mean good job in poetry terms! Good Job... mfox
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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I'm glad you gave the author's note about the beats... I read it the first time and was totally lost... then I read it a second time using the suggested beats and it helped ALOT. It is hard to review one way or the other on this... so, we'll go with, it meets the beat, gives a message, and hasn't got any major technical errors that I can see... That must mean good job in poetry terms! Good Job... mfox
Comment Written 14-Aug-2006
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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THANKS A LOT FOR THIS HONEST REVIEW I DO APPRECIATE MUCH.
Comment from Lokman
I am reminded of a story my grandfather told me when he took me to where he trained in Idaho to prepare for his departure on one of many ships carrying marines into the Pacific. The picture and your words compliment a moment between one who has seen and one who hasn't; one who has aged and one who has yet to understand.
This helps me understand him even more.
Thank you
Lokman
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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I am reminded of a story my grandfather told me when he took me to where he trained in Idaho to prepare for his departure on one of many ships carrying marines into the Pacific. The picture and your words compliment a moment between one who has seen and one who hasn't; one who has aged and one who has yet to understand.
This helps me understand him even more.
Thank you
Lokman
Comment Written 14-Aug-2006
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2006
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THANK YOU FOR THIS REVIEW WITH NICE CORRELATION.
