Comment from RJ Heritage

Excellent

Very interesting format. I like the length given to it.
The verses are compelling and very clear and each different color gives a nice touch to each different aspect or feature in nature.
RJ

 Comment Written 21-May-2024

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reply by the author on 21-May-2024

Thank you very much, my friend.

Gypsy

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

You paint a lovely autumn scene with your words from the colorful leaves to the departing migratory birds and the dancing waves. Thanks for sharing this kind of sijo!

 Comment Written 20-May-2024

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reply by the author on 21-May-2024

Thank you very much , big sister.

Love

Marival

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

This was so beautiful and moving. It was as if the elements were youthful and innocent. It was like watching young people moving about with ease and grace. This was a wonderful poem to read. Gretchen

 Comment Written 20-May-2024

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reply by the author on 20-May-2024

Thank you very much, Gretchen 😊

Gypsy

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

tides dancing in white foam skirts... awesome imagery!

i've read this line 4 times... but i trip over it each time -
wave goodbye sky migrant birds -- did you mean "wave goobye TO migrant birds"?
could be just me, but thought i'd mention it lol
other than that, a great sijo

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 20-May-2024

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reply by the author on 20-May-2024

I know! I had to do a lot of changes. This is what happens when I rush because my grandson wants to go to the park. LoL

Thank you very much, Shelley. 😊

Gypsy