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Comment from kahpot
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It must be so hard for children to understand, when parents are fighting all the time, and yet they tell the little ones that they do love each other, very well written and presented****kahpot

 Comment Written 19-May-2024


reply by the author on 20-May-2024
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy
Comment from Mike Stevens
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Another fine poem, Gypsy....and a sad truth indeed....hard to imagine but often the reality behind the lie of a normal, happy picture of domestic bliss shown to the outside world

 Comment Written 19-May-2024


reply by the author on 19-May-2024
    Thank you very much, Mike

    gypsy
Comment from Mark D. R.
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Gypsy,

One of the few times I really was super mad/upset at my daughter's antics was when she crayoned her bedroom wall.

She did not hide in the closet, but she did need to (try to) clean the wall.

Thanks for that memory through your poem.

Mark

 Comment Written 19-May-2024


reply by the author on 19-May-2024
    Thank you very much, Mark

    gypsy
Comment from RJ Heritage
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Children re also affected by what we as parents do, either in a good or bad way. Your verses are compelling and truthful, and well presented.
Thanks for sharing.
RJ

 Comment Written 19-May-2024


reply by the author on 19-May-2024
    Thank you very much, RJ

    gypsy
reply by RJ Heritage on 19-May-2024
    You?re welcome
Comment from lyenochka
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It is frightening to a child to witness the two adults he loves and depends on fighting with one another. You show a realistic response of the child trying to keep a stable sense in his mind through his drawings.

 Comment Written 18-May-2024


reply by the author on 19-May-2024
    Thank you very much, big sister. Child abuse comes in a sort of way. I feel so sad for abused children, they are little innocent angels.

    love,
    marival
Comment from shelley kaye
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

love that crayon pic and the keyhole pic - awesome addition!

this was sad, but at least he had a safe place to retreat to
and his imagination to create colourful pictures

an all-around excellent gogyohka poem
great imagery and smooth flow

thank you for sharing!
shelley :)


 Comment Written 18-May-2024


reply by the author on 19-May-2024
    Thank you very much, Shelley. I appreciate your exceptional six stars review and kind words.

    gypsy 😊

    gypsy
Comment from Teri7
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Gypsy, This is a very well written Gorychka you have penned. You used great descriptive words and I love the picture. That wouldn't happen to be Atticus would it? Thanks so much for sharing. love and blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 18-May-2024


reply by the author on 19-May-2024
    Thank you very much, Teri

    gypsy
Comment from Pamusart
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Hi, Gypsy. Yeah. These very short poems make it hart to impart

I think you did a good job. Were his crayon drawings on the walls of the closet? You might be specific in your notes.

Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 18-May-2024


reply by the author on 18-May-2024
    the crayons is a page divider, as the poem says, the boy is in the closet drawing happy family but the parents fight alot.

    Thank you very much, Pam

    Gypsy