Moody
A rhyming poem written for fun36 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Jesse,
I'm glad I stumbled upon this witty, humorous (if you know what the writer experiences, it can be light).
My favorite line of yours is: turning diamonds into coal. When im down, I'm the opposite of Midas; everything I touch seems to turns to dust.
Wonderful poem, Jesse.
Congratulations on the all time best rating!
God bless,
Cindy
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Jesse,
I'm glad I stumbled upon this witty, humorous (if you know what the writer experiences, it can be light).
My favorite line of yours is: turning diamonds into coal. When im down, I'm the opposite of Midas; everything I touch seems to turns to dust.
Wonderful poem, Jesse.
Congratulations on the all time best rating!
God bless,
Cindy
Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Thanks, Cindy, for this encouraging review. Turning diamonds into coal is my favorite line as well.
It is writers such as you, who help me make it to the all-time best rating.
Thanks for the blessings!
Jesse
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😊 Jesse I got the saying, ?turning diamonds into coal,? from your writing. What a marvelous way to describe what you and I and many others feel at times.
I need the figurative rose-colored glasses to get through life sometimes; other times I need dark glasses to bring my mania down a notch.
A friend always,
Cindy
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This must mean you have both types of glasses to wear on either occasion.
Good to know. Thanks for sharing.
We share more than you know.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment from Esther Brown
Moodiness can exhaust you with the roller coaster ride. Well written. Living', lost the rhythm for me and I was wondering if Slipplin' was supposed to be slipping? I am glad you reached recognized status. Good job. Esther
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Moodiness can exhaust you with the roller coaster ride. Well written. Living', lost the rhythm for me and I was wondering if Slipplin' was supposed to be slipping? I am glad you reached recognized status. Good job. Esther
Comment Written 17-May-2024
reply by the author on 17-May-2024
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Thanks for your positive feedback.
Have a nice weekend.
Jesse
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Jesse, sometimes, we just have to have fun with ourselves and step back and laugh. You did a really great job with this poem. Of note;
Pouting, often shouting
He is one of a kind
(And we wouldn't want you to change for anything in the world.)
I'm glad you won! Well done. Margaret
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Hi Jesse, sometimes, we just have to have fun with ourselves and step back and laugh. You did a really great job with this poem. Of note;
Pouting, often shouting
He is one of a kind
(And we wouldn't want you to change for anything in the world.)
I'm glad you won! Well done. Margaret
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Thanks, Margaret, for the kind and thoughtful review.
I appreciate your choosing the favorite lines you liked.
We are both glad I won!
Take care,
Jesse
Comment from Michele Harber
Hi Jesse. The fun you had writing this absolutely comes through. This definitely sounds like you proclaiming your strength in the face of David's perceived betrayal--and, yes, the strongest has won, and that's you!
I enjoyed the added rhymes in the first and third lines of each verse. They were fun, and really made the poem bounce. This was a fun and uplifting read.
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Hi Jesse. The fun you had writing this absolutely comes through. This definitely sounds like you proclaiming your strength in the face of David's perceived betrayal--and, yes, the strongest has won, and that's you!
I enjoyed the added rhymes in the first and third lines of each verse. They were fun, and really made the poem bounce. This was a fun and uplifting read.
Comment Written 16-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Hello Michele.
I am glad you found the humor in my fun poem. It was playful and represented my new look at myself and my situation.
I had a blast with the internal and external rhymes! I am happy you enjoyed them.
The strongest has won and that is me!
I feel upbeat and cheerful for the first time in a while.
Thanks for your insightful review, my friend.
Take care,
Jesse
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You're very welcome, Jesse, and I'm so happy to hear you sound this way!
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Thanks. It feels good to be in these shoes!
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It should. I'm happy for you.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Jesse,
This witty poem flows well and has clean unforced abcb rhyme.
You have reason to be moody. But at least it seems you can get from bad back to good again. Laughter is always good and always shows you have won,
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great day.
Joan
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Hi Jesse,
This witty poem flows well and has clean unforced abcb rhyme.
You have reason to be moody. But at least it seems you can get from bad back to good again. Laughter is always good and always shows you have won,
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great day.
Joan
Comment Written 15-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Thank you, Joan, for the insightful review.
I agree laughter is good medicine and good for the soul.
I will keep writing and staying healthy.
Jesse
Comment from Erika Whittle
Poetry is one of the best ways to express one's state of mind. I personally think it's a healthy way to express one's self and my poetry also usually reflects my mentality. Good job, thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Poetry is one of the best ways to express one's state of mind. I personally think it's a healthy way to express one's self and my poetry also usually reflects my mentality. Good job, thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 15-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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I agree with you, Erika. Writing poetry that expresses the inner turmoil of our mental state is cathartic and well worth the reading.
Thanks for the positive feedback.
Jesse
Comment from Julie Helms
The internal rhymes in this poem give it a catchy, fun feel, which is a little at odds with the content, making it a really interesting piece. It sounds like you had a good time writing it...and I can't think of anything better for mental health than that.
Thanks for sharing!
Julie
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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The internal rhymes in this poem give it a catchy, fun feel, which is a little at odds with the content, making it a really interesting piece. It sounds like you had a good time writing it...and I can't think of anything better for mental health than that.
Thanks for sharing!
Julie
Comment Written 14-May-2024
reply by the author on 16-May-2024
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Yes, Julie, to laugh at oneself is a healthy trait to possess. It was meant to be catchy and fun. I am glad you saw the humor in the poem. Thanks for noticing the internal and external rhymes. They were a blast to create.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment from Mark Jackson
This is a good poem I am surprised you did not enter it into the mental health poetry contest. I like the idea of turning diamonds back into coal as a metaphor for things going wrong. Not sure what slippling means?
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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This is a good poem I am surprised you did not enter it into the mental health poetry contest. I like the idea of turning diamonds back into coal as a metaphor for things going wrong. Not sure what slippling means?
Comment Written 14-May-2024
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Hello Mark.
I don't usually enter contests. It is too competitive for me.
The metaphor of diamonds to coal was a fun one I came up with one day.
"Slipplin," means anything you want it to mean. I made it up.
Thanks for the positive feedback, my friend.
Jesse
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lol okay, I did wonder if it was a Jaberwocky-style work.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Having fun with your words is good therapy especially if the moody blues are hanging around. I like that you've written it from afar, and that the strongest has won. I'm thinking that's a positive.
Enjoyed your poem Jesse
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Having fun with your words is good therapy especially if the moody blues are hanging around. I like that you've written it from afar, and that the strongest has won. I'm thinking that's a positive.
Enjoyed your poem Jesse
Comment Written 13-May-2024
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Yes, Pearl, I am the strongest and I have won. I had fun with the positive and negative symptoms of my mental illness.
It is good therapy.
I am glad you enjoyed this poem.
Jesse
Comment from Willie P. Smith
A very good read. Good rhyme, and is very understandable. You describe many of us who get a moody streak once in a while. However, most of us don't want to admit it even if it's pointed out
by an observer. Very good. Willie
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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A very good read. Good rhyme, and is very understandable. You describe many of us who get a moody streak once in a while. However, most of us don't want to admit it even if it's pointed out
by an observer. Very good. Willie
Comment Written 13-May-2024
reply by the author on 14-May-2024
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Thank you, Willie. I agree, most of us won't admit it if we are moody. I had fun with the idea. I am glad this resonated with you.
We moody ones need to stick together.
Thanks for the kind review.
Jesse
