Silence Sleeps
An eldritch horror in quatrains18 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi
The color scheme of this poem goes with the theme well. I like the short lines and aabb rhyme scheme the seems to allude to depression and maybe checking into a psychiatric ward. I think therapy is a better first step.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Enjoy your day and the upcoming week.
Joan
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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Hi
The color scheme of this poem goes with the theme well. I like the short lines and aabb rhyme scheme the seems to allude to depression and maybe checking into a psychiatric ward. I think therapy is a better first step.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Enjoy your day and the upcoming week.
Joan
Comment Written 28-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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This is based upon the mythology of h.p. lovecraft. His writing was about people investigating mysteries finding out too much and either going mad or signing themselves into institutions for their safety.
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Hi
This sounds a little too dark for me even though I usually like anything that has to do with mythology.
Joa
Comment from Raul1
I think it's well written and it has deep description emotions. It is well expressed. Excellent work! No mistakes found. I have enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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I think it's well written and it has deep description emotions. It is well expressed. Excellent work! No mistakes found. I have enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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Thank you.
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You're welcome!
Comment from Shirley Ann Bunyan
Very good entry to the Three by Four poetry contest with correct format.
The poem builds gradually invoking a creeping feeling of dread. Nicely done.
Good luck in the contest :)
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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Very good entry to the Three by Four poetry contest with correct format.
The poem builds gradually invoking a creeping feeling of dread. Nicely done.
Good luck in the contest :)
Comment Written 28-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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Thank you.
Comment from royowen
An interesting form, sounds staccato, something very similar to the staccato affect of the Japanese language which has mastered the short form staccato like Hauban form, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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An interesting form, sounds staccato, something very similar to the staccato affect of the Japanese language which has mastered the short form staccato like Hauban form, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 28-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the review.
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Welcome
Comment from lyenochka
There's something hypnotic about this series of short lines. It reads to me like something deep and hidden and sinister is luring someone to commit a crime which lands him behind "bars of steel."
Best wishes in the contest!
Question:
Weaved in fear (did you mean "weaved" as in a weaving motion or "woven"?)
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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There's something hypnotic about this series of short lines. It reads to me like something deep and hidden and sinister is luring someone to commit a crime which lands him behind "bars of steel."
Best wishes in the contest!
Question:
Weaved in fear (did you mean "weaved" as in a weaving motion or "woven"?)
Comment Written 28-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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Actually, I meant wreathed in fear. thank you for picking up on that. Thank you for the review.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
You up the tension and the creepiness right from the start with the darkness and eerieness in the beginning leading down to the madness and dread. I really enjoyed the tone of your 3 by 4 poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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You up the tension and the creepiness right from the start with the darkness and eerieness in the beginning leading down to the madness and dread. I really enjoyed the tone of your 3 by 4 poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from hullabaloo22
What an effective poem! From the very beginning your words paint a picture of uneasy dread. Your choice of background color and font added to the effect, as did your choice of image.
Very well done!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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What an effective poem! From the very beginning your words paint a picture of uneasy dread. Your choice of background color and font added to the effect, as did your choice of image.
Very well done!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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Thank you very much, it is very much borrowed from the style of Lovecraft, slowly building dread until the end wanting to be confined for safety. The characters in his stories often end up mad.
Comment from Douglas Goff
These Three By Four Poem entries are turning out to be excellent. Yours included!
You went for a bit of the creepy element which seems to work well in this style.
Nice job and good luck!
D
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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These Three By Four Poem entries are turning out to be excellent. Yours included!
You went for a bit of the creepy element which seems to work well in this style.
Nice job and good luck!
D
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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Thank you.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
What is the name of your font selection ? I really like it. The picture is suitably creepy. but you do not mention in the author's notes where you got it from.
Good writing. Karen
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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What is the name of your font selection ? I really like it. The picture is suitably creepy. but you do not mention in the author's notes where you got it from.
Good writing. Karen
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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The font is a mixture of two different ones the capital letter is different to the rest. It takes ages to do and can cause issues with formatting, I don't recommend it. The picture is a photo I took of an old James Herbert book I sold on ebay. I zoomed in to remove all but the picture and then added my own text. Thanks for the review.
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Seems like an awful lot of work to me. Have a good week. Karen
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It was, I was on holiday last week.
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:-)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I have never heard of this form before, there is some rhythm here with these short lines about an eerie scene, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x x x x
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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I have never heard of this form before, there is some rhythm here with these short lines about an eerie scene, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x x x x
Comment Written 27-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2024
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thank you
