Everyday Miracles
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Dreams"We see miracles every day. They're all around uy'
8 total reviews
Comment from pome lover
I'm giving you a 5 for your delightful poem, but I feel I've got to correct your spelling, if you don't mind,
1. 1st verse, 4th line - hum a few bars
2. 2nd verse, last line - hues
3. 3rd verse, 3rd line - burrow
You create a lovely picture.
Katharine
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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I'm giving you a 5 for your delightful poem, but I feel I've got to correct your spelling, if you don't mind,
1. 1st verse, 4th line - hum a few bars
2. 2nd verse, last line - hues
3. 3rd verse, 3rd line - burrow
You create a lovely picture.
Katharine
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Hello! I bet you think I've not responded because my little feelers are hurt. NO! This is what good reviewers do! They point out the bad as well as the good. If I only wanted ego strokes, I'd read to my 10-year-old granddaughters. lol
Thank you so much for pointing out these issues. I was on vacation and trying to submit via my iPhone - a new skill which I have NOT accomplished. Combine that with a sight impairment and... Well, you get things like Hughs instead of hues. lol. Voice=to=text ain't all it's cracked up to be. But you are, as a reviewer. I'll go fix those atrocious errors as soon as I catch up with responding to reviews. Please - feel free to come and criticize my work ANY TIME!
Blessings,
Deb -
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smile!! thanks.
Hope it was a fun vacation!
Katharine
Comment from Mark Jackson
I liked the poem it was positive and it was a good read. I do think you have a number of issues to correct in this one. Firstly and the same thing happened to me the other day every capital letter I chose would only be black. I selected everything and chose the correct colour. Next, it looks like you have a z before music. I think you mean hues and burrow. Finally, I would review the use of capital letters they appear inconstant. You can get rid of them completely or use them.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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I liked the poem it was positive and it was a good read. I do think you have a number of issues to correct in this one. Firstly and the same thing happened to me the other day every capital letter I chose would only be black. I selected everything and chose the correct colour. Next, it looks like you have a z before music. I think you mean hues and burrow. Finally, I would review the use of capital letters they appear inconstant. You can get rid of them completely or use them.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2024
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Thank you, Mark. I appreciate all your constructive feedback. I was trying to learn to post from my phone - a failed effort, I believe. lol. Something about old dogs and new tricks, perhaps... Anyhow, thank you so much for both your positive and negative comments. Both are helpful and appreciated.
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from Carol Clark2
Nice description of the night sky, and the changes made as dawn arrives.
Did you mean (hum) a few bars? (Burrow) beneath the blankets? Colors and (hues)? The 'I' in 'Imagine' barely shows up on the black background. I like your words, but please give this an edit, Deb. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Nice description of the night sky, and the changes made as dawn arrives.
Did you mean (hum) a few bars? (Burrow) beneath the blankets? Colors and (hues)? The 'I' in 'Imagine' barely shows up on the black background. I like your words, but please give this an edit, Deb. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2024
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Thank you for pointing all of that out, Carol. It was a mess, wasn?t it. 🙄 sorry about that! I did learn, however, not to change the font before I do the poem. I couldn?t see it worth nothing! Lol I do appreciate you taking the time to look over it for me. It?s all fixed up now. I appreciate you.
Blessings,
Deb
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Sorry, Deb. Sometimes the editor brain works overtime! Hope it helped, though.
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Hi Deb, what a lovely poem and sentiments. I love your presentation, the colors and the blue font.
I looked at your reviews so there is not a need for me to make you feel worse by pointing out the mistakes. I have those days where I think I am still dreaming. LOL
Great job otherwise. Love ya, Debi
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Hi Deb, what a lovely poem and sentiments. I love your presentation, the colors and the blue font.
I looked at your reviews so there is not a need for me to make you feel worse by pointing out the mistakes. I have those days where I think I am still dreaming. LOL
Great job otherwise. Love ya, Debi
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Girl, I?m doing this on my iPhone right right now! Lol I would imagine that mistakes are abundant and flagrant. 😊 I?ll fix what I can but? It might wait until I get home from my computer, too.
I appreciate you reading and leaving a rating, even though it probably didn?t deserve it. Obviously not publication ready.
Hugs and blessings
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Gosh, I usually don't say anything because I don't want people to feel bad, but then I remember if no one would have said anything to me, I wouldn't have learned what I have. Don't feel bad, hon. I thought it was beautiful.
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Gosh, I usually don't say anything because I don't want people to feel bad, but then I remember if no one would have said anything to me, I wouldn't have learned what I have. Don't feel bad, hon. I thought it was beautiful.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Dreams allow us to live more than one life. The real one that isn't always everything we would like it to be, and the dream life, which can take us wherever our imaginations want to go. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Dreams allow us to live more than one life. The real one that isn't always everything we would like it to be, and the dream life, which can take us wherever our imaginations want to go. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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There were lots of goofs in this so I appreciate your kindness and your review. 😊 I think I?ve gone back and fixed everything? We shall see. Or, rather, a reviewer will see. 😊
Thank you for always being such a faithful reviewer. Blessings,
Deb
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I don't usually point out anything I see unless someone tells me they want me to. Besides, I make more mistakes than anyone. LOL.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Dreaming is something I rarely do. My husband does it often. They say everybody dreams. I just don't remember mine. I wish I did. Thank you for sharing.
brushingex (???)
to go back to your dreaming agai (again??0
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Dreaming is something I rarely do. My husband does it often. They say everybody dreams. I just don't remember mine. I wish I did. Thank you for sharing.
brushingex (???)
to go back to your dreaming agai (again??0
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Thank you for helping me find those, Barbara. Me, with the site impairment, trying to work on an iPhone is like a comedy of errors. 😊 but I?ll be home to my computer on Friday! I can?t tell you how relieved I will be. I?ve gone back back and fixed and changed a bit of it and do appreciate your help.
Bless
Deb
Comment from Shirley Ann Bunyan
A beautiful, 'dreamy' poem which is well structured and reads fluently with interesting content.
Just a thought - should 'Hughes' be 'hues'?
Thank you.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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A beautiful, 'dreamy' poem which is well structured and reads fluently with interesting content.
Just a thought - should 'Hughes' be 'hues'?
Thank you.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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oh my gosh! Did Siri really do that to me? 😊 crazy machine! It needs to know what I?m thinking instead of what it might hear? Emoji I appreciate you helping me with that, Shirley. And I love your name! My mom?s name was Shirley Ann. I?m glad you enjoyed the poem and made me smile. M warmest blessings,
Deb
Comment from lyenochka
I like the early morning feelings that you captured that feeling of transitioning from dreamland to waking. Great use of alliteration and internal rhyme!
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and brushingex away the stars (brushing) didn't know what the "ex" was
Millions of fireflies start And dozens of colors and Hughes (hues)
and peaks in at you with a grin (peeks)
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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I like the early morning feelings that you captured that feeling of transitioning from dreamland to waking. Great use of alliteration and internal rhyme!
Comments:
and brushingex away the stars (brushing) didn't know what the "ex" was
Millions of fireflies start And dozens of colors and Hughes (hues)
and peaks in at you with a grin (peeks)
Comment Written 23-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2024
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Yep, Siri really did me in on this one. Lol I?ve gone back and fixed the boo-boos, I think. Blind people and cell phone and writing? What a combo! But I will be back to my computer on Friday. 😊 I didn?t realize how excited I would be. Lol I totally appreciate you pointing all that craziness out to me, Helen.
Hugs and blessings,
Deb
