The CRAZY Women's Self Defense 2
This is part two of the mini script I wrote before.2 total reviews
Comment from lancellot
First, I applaude the effort. Now, the formatting is off. I recommend rewriting this. You can edit out what you have then repost, to see if the alignment is right. The context: The running joke may be a bit long and repetitive, and some of the dialogue, I would read out loud to see how it sounds.
And rethink the exposition at the end. Not wanted in a script.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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First, I applaude the effort. Now, the formatting is off. I recommend rewriting this. You can edit out what you have then repost, to see if the alignment is right. The context: The running joke may be a bit long and repetitive, and some of the dialogue, I would read out loud to see how it sounds.
And rethink the exposition at the end. Not wanted in a script.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thanks for pinpointing all the errors. Glad you came across it to point all the errors out. ...they wouldn't have never crossed my mind.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Nicely done! Your script certainly delivers on the humor! The over-the-top reactions and outrageous situations are so funny. It kept me entertained from start to finish. The dialogue is great. Well done!
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Nicely done! Your script certainly delivers on the humor! The over-the-top reactions and outrageous situations are so funny. It kept me entertained from start to finish. The dialogue is great. Well done!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2024
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Thanks. I'm glad I had you laughing. Thanks for the five stars.
