David's Angel
short story about teenage love2 total reviews
Comment from Julie Helms
This is such a beautiful, touching story. It's a nice change too to read something uplifting regarding teenagers! Descriptions were well done as was the dialogue.
I saw a single typo:
into the trunk. and got back into
(...trunk, and got...)
Nicely done!
Julie
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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This is such a beautiful, touching story. It's a nice change too to read something uplifting regarding teenagers! Descriptions were well done as was the dialogue.
I saw a single typo:
into the trunk. and got back into
(...trunk, and got...)
Nicely done!
Julie
Comment Written 22-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Thank you for the kind words.
Comment from FurryBunny
This piece is written very well. The author effectively conveys the emotions of each character as they navigate the challenges they face. The dialogue is realistic and adds depth to the story. The pacing is well done, and the reader is drawn in by the gradual unfolding of events. The use of descriptive language helps create a vivid picture of the scenes and characters. Overall, this story is well-written and engaging.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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This piece is written very well. The author effectively conveys the emotions of each character as they navigate the challenges they face. The dialogue is realistic and adds depth to the story. The pacing is well done, and the reader is drawn in by the gradual unfolding of events. The use of descriptive language helps create a vivid picture of the scenes and characters. Overall, this story is well-written and engaging.
Comment Written 18-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2024
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Thank you so much.
