Nostalgia
Wanting the impossible4 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A unique offering for the competition here... would suggest that such a short form needs no punctuation marks as they but take away from the beautiful simplicity - the format and capitalization (if applicable) should take care of pauses and such. Also, did you mean "chocolate's" rather than "Chocolates;"? Either way, the word chocolate is not a proper noun... Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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A unique offering for the competition here... would suggest that such a short form needs no punctuation marks as they but take away from the beautiful simplicity - the format and capitalization (if applicable) should take care of pauses and such. Also, did you mean "chocolate's" rather than "Chocolates;"? Either way, the word chocolate is not a proper noun... Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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You are probably not English and so would not get the reference Chocolates is written in the style of the most famous English brand. Cadbury. It took me an absolute age to get that right, the capital C is actually in a different font than the rest of the word. The branding is Gold and a rich purple, I urge you to check it out. No I did not mean Chocolate's first kiss. I actually went through this re-writing it about six times. It is the person who is kissing the Chocolates. I find it funny that I spent about an hour crafting those few words for you to feel you can tell me they are mistaken. There is no way for you to know how much time I invested into those few words. To be told my grammar is wrong in poetry is amusing. Poetic licence. Thanks for trying to help, this is after all a peer review site but... As I say just look up Cadbury branding. My fault for assuming it was internationally renowned.
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I thought I recognised you, did you ever look up Cadbury's and realise that I had chosen the capital for a valid reason? Yes, an example of where I would be right and you would be wrong. Dwell on that thought...you could be wrong.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This reminds me of a Cadbury's chocolate advertisement as they love purple. Chocolates and romance go hand in hand and I enjoyed your fine presentation, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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This reminds me of a Cadbury's chocolate advertisement as they love purple. Chocolates and romance go hand in hand and I enjoyed your fine presentation, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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I knew you would get it. It took me ages to get the font and it refused to be gold for the longest of times. The formatting can be quite glitchy at times. Thank you.
Comment from jessizero
I loved the way you formatted the word "chocolates." I think you picked a great emotion (nostalgia) to focus on. You got the syllable count right, as well. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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I loved the way you formatted the word "chocolates." I think you picked a great emotion (nostalgia) to focus on. You got the syllable count right, as well. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2024
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Thank you, It is based on Cadbury, an old English brand.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-I like your first line that invites the reader in.
-You add the enticement to do so in the next line.
and the piece de resistance is the last line.
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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-Very nice artwork and presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-I like your first line that invites the reader in.
-You add the enticement to do so in the next line.
and the piece de resistance is the last line.
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2024
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2024
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Thank you
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You are welcome.
